for Agents of WADDLES6/24/2016 c8 
47Alisi Thorndyke
Guess who's back! XD The prodigal author has returned! XD At least for the time being. :) I had some time to read today and jumped right on it. Not only that, chapter 4 to Secrets of the Code is complete! Finally, after like centuries lol! Who knew being married without children was so busy? XD
But on to my review:
Uncle Jackie reminds me so much of uncle Ford and when Jade and her evil side were fighting, why did that remind me so much of Mabel and Catherine? XD Call it flashbacks, but this chapter was good. :) I'll be back later on, very early tomorrow to read a few more updates of yours. :) Like two or three. :) I'm going to try to keep my eyes open so I can becuase I have been slacking so much.
Alisi Thorndyke :)
47Alisi ThorndykeGuess who's back! XD The prodigal author has returned! XD At least for the time being. :) I had some time to read today and jumped right on it. Not only that, chapter 4 to Secrets of the Code is complete! Finally, after like centuries lol! Who knew being married without children was so busy? XD
But on to my review:
Uncle Jackie reminds me so much of uncle Ford and when Jade and her evil side were fighting, why did that remind me so much of Mabel and Catherine? XD Call it flashbacks, but this chapter was good. :) I'll be back later on, very early tomorrow to read a few more updates of yours. :) Like two or three. :) I'm going to try to keep my eyes open so I can becuase I have been slacking so much.
Alisi Thorndyke :)
6/9/2016 c9 Guest
Another excellent chapter! I always love reading and rereading your stories. Quite a variety of cast along with elaborate storytelling. A bit messy at times but overall a good series to enjoy.
I simply have one complaint, I feel bad that Mabel doesn't play a bigger role in this other than the comic relief. She has no development and is constantly tossed aside. As I can pick up, she merely provides as the stepping stone for others and that makes me feel so sad that I actually get heartache.
Each time I come across her she's just hated by Pacifica, sheltered from important things, constantly belittled, and most of the time seen as crazy. Maybe I'm just overthinking things, she did show some skill in determining that Trace and Joe are clones but really thats the only defining moment.
I just hope this is not her fate in your stories. You're a good writer that is no mistake but there really should be more to Mabel than this.
Another excellent chapter! I always love reading and rereading your stories. Quite a variety of cast along with elaborate storytelling. A bit messy at times but overall a good series to enjoy.
I simply have one complaint, I feel bad that Mabel doesn't play a bigger role in this other than the comic relief. She has no development and is constantly tossed aside. As I can pick up, she merely provides as the stepping stone for others and that makes me feel so sad that I actually get heartache.
Each time I come across her she's just hated by Pacifica, sheltered from important things, constantly belittled, and most of the time seen as crazy. Maybe I'm just overthinking things, she did show some skill in determining that Trace and Joe are clones but really thats the only defining moment.
I just hope this is not her fate in your stories. You're a good writer that is no mistake but there really should be more to Mabel than this.
6/4/2016 c9 nightmaster000
Another excellent chapter.
Waddles did a wonderful job with that pep talk.
I figured Riley and Todd would be one's to tell their parents about the Agency. I mean their mom is a secret agent, and as you said who better to ask for advice about W.A.D.D.L.E.S. Will they also ask for advice about Nyx?
It seem's Biffy wants to meet Lee in detention. Wonder why there, and what he wants to talk about. It looks like for Lee no matter how much things change he's still the Detentionaire.
I wonder if the other agents will eventually tell their family or friend about W.A.D.D.L.E.S.
So it seems Fillmore as well as some others are having doubt's about whether they want to accept the offer to becomes agents. I look forward to seeing what they decide. I personally hope everyone that's left stays with the agency.
What happen to Stephanie while the twins we're away is truly one of the classics.
Look's like we've gotten a glimpse of W.A.D.D.L.E.S latest mission with Chris and Gage. That little bit really has me looking forward to when we learn the OC's full backstories, and just what's the story behind their enemies.
Poor Waddles ate more than he could handle. Guess that's one of the downsides to being a pig. No control over you're appetite.
Another excellent chapter.
Waddles did a wonderful job with that pep talk.
I figured Riley and Todd would be one's to tell their parents about the Agency. I mean their mom is a secret agent, and as you said who better to ask for advice about W.A.D.D.L.E.S. Will they also ask for advice about Nyx?
It seem's Biffy wants to meet Lee in detention. Wonder why there, and what he wants to talk about. It looks like for Lee no matter how much things change he's still the Detentionaire.
I wonder if the other agents will eventually tell their family or friend about W.A.D.D.L.E.S.
So it seems Fillmore as well as some others are having doubt's about whether they want to accept the offer to becomes agents. I look forward to seeing what they decide. I personally hope everyone that's left stays with the agency.
What happen to Stephanie while the twins we're away is truly one of the classics.
Look's like we've gotten a glimpse of W.A.D.D.L.E.S latest mission with Chris and Gage. That little bit really has me looking forward to when we learn the OC's full backstories, and just what's the story behind their enemies.
Poor Waddles ate more than he could handle. Guess that's one of the downsides to being a pig. No control over you're appetite.
6/4/2016 c9 Jonesy
Literally if one of them quits you should have Lincoln from the loud house to be there since its change from magic and evil doing and whatnot and have a normal person come in.
Literally if one of them quits you should have Lincoln from the loud house to be there since its change from magic and evil doing and whatnot and have a normal person come in.
6/4/2016 c9 8The Keeper of Worlds
Loving the drama building now, and the Sin meeting has me curious as to how you'll do it. Oh, and little tidbit, Hope is the opposite of Despair. So falling to Despair would be a VERY bad thing for Gage to keep in mind. He might get control at some point or similar, but Despair is often considered the last lost evil sin.
Good dynamic here so far on getting group back together for a debrief and settling members. Hope the OCs stay in team.
8The Keeper of WorldsLoving the drama building now, and the Sin meeting has me curious as to how you'll do it. Oh, and little tidbit, Hope is the opposite of Despair. So falling to Despair would be a VERY bad thing for Gage to keep in mind. He might get control at some point or similar, but Despair is often considered the last lost evil sin.
Good dynamic here so far on getting group back together for a debrief and settling members. Hope the OCs stay in team.
5/10/2016 c8 Arsenal
I just realized that astral projection from the sheep talisman is almost if not exactly the same as how dipper was stuck in the mindscape
I just realized that astral projection from the sheep talisman is almost if not exactly the same as how dipper was stuck in the mindscape
5/9/2016 c8 nightmaster000
Awesome chapter.
I really like the name that you chose for Jyo.
So more of the members of N.I.C.E have been revealed. If I remember right it was mentioned in the first meeting of N.I.C.E some the members we're missing from the meeting for one reason or another. So I wonder if more members of N.I.C.E will be revealed as time goes on.
I'm certainly eager to find out who the mastermind villain is.
I really liked you decision to include Jimmy in the story. If there's one thing I didn't like about JCA is that characters who had so much more potential like Jimmy only appeared in one episode.
Really clever twist with the new talismans based off the constellation zodiac. This really shows how much potential Jimmy has in the magical arts. Creating powerful mystical items like these is nothing to scoff at after all. Will we find out what powers each talisman has later on in the story?
As always I really enjoyed seeing the agents in action.
Seeing more of Chris and and Gage was very interesting. I'm enjoying finding out more about them as the story goes on. Also that scene with Gage/Momotaro and Jyo was very amusing.
You know I can't help but think Edgar and Ellen being unknowing masters at Alchemy really fits. I wonder how they are taking that little revelation. Will they look up information on Alchemy?
Jyo working for section 13 is a very interesting twist. Though question is how long will it last? It seem's Jyo is going to be playing the role of a wild card in this game of good vs evil. I look forward to seeing what her next move/plan will be.
I wonder how Waddles will handle damage control. I don't think I said this before, but it will be interesting to see how Waddles will handle being leader/boss for a group like this.
I look forward to seeing how the agents first meeting after all their first missions will go. While some are in higher spirits than others right now. Mostly because they still don't know that things went the way N.I.C.E want, others like the Detentionaire/Replacment group Riley and Todd in particular are in poor spirits. Will Waddles and the others be able raise their spirits?
Again awesome chapter. :)
Two last things. First I have another crossover suggestion it's where on earth is Carmen Sandiego.
The second is and please hear me out is a new pairing pitch for Nyx. What do you think of a Nyx/Riley pairing? It would sort of be like a Karai/Leo style relationship. What with them being enemies at first for a while especially with Nyx's reasons for hating Riley and Todd. But over time like with Leo and Karia unexpected feelings could develop. What do you think?
Awesome chapter.
I really like the name that you chose for Jyo.
So more of the members of N.I.C.E have been revealed. If I remember right it was mentioned in the first meeting of N.I.C.E some the members we're missing from the meeting for one reason or another. So I wonder if more members of N.I.C.E will be revealed as time goes on.
I'm certainly eager to find out who the mastermind villain is.
I really liked you decision to include Jimmy in the story. If there's one thing I didn't like about JCA is that characters who had so much more potential like Jimmy only appeared in one episode.
Really clever twist with the new talismans based off the constellation zodiac. This really shows how much potential Jimmy has in the magical arts. Creating powerful mystical items like these is nothing to scoff at after all. Will we find out what powers each talisman has later on in the story?
As always I really enjoyed seeing the agents in action.
Seeing more of Chris and and Gage was very interesting. I'm enjoying finding out more about them as the story goes on. Also that scene with Gage/Momotaro and Jyo was very amusing.
You know I can't help but think Edgar and Ellen being unknowing masters at Alchemy really fits. I wonder how they are taking that little revelation. Will they look up information on Alchemy?
Jyo working for section 13 is a very interesting twist. Though question is how long will it last? It seem's Jyo is going to be playing the role of a wild card in this game of good vs evil. I look forward to seeing what her next move/plan will be.
I wonder how Waddles will handle damage control. I don't think I said this before, but it will be interesting to see how Waddles will handle being leader/boss for a group like this.
I look forward to seeing how the agents first meeting after all their first missions will go. While some are in higher spirits than others right now. Mostly because they still don't know that things went the way N.I.C.E want, others like the Detentionaire/Replacment group Riley and Todd in particular are in poor spirits. Will Waddles and the others be able raise their spirits?
Again awesome chapter. :)
Two last things. First I have another crossover suggestion it's where on earth is Carmen Sandiego.
The second is and please hear me out is a new pairing pitch for Nyx. What do you think of a Nyx/Riley pairing? It would sort of be like a Karai/Leo style relationship. What with them being enemies at first for a while especially with Nyx's reasons for hating Riley and Todd. But over time like with Leo and Karia unexpected feelings could develop. What do you think?
5/9/2016 c8 8The Keeper of Worlds
Sweet mission for my boys and that is an interesting idea using Pandora's box in such a manor.
8The Keeper of WorldsSweet mission for my boys and that is an interesting idea using Pandora's box in such a manor.
5/9/2016 c8 11OMAC001
Interesting use of the Dark Jade story type. Wonder if Jimmy will become corrupted with power again.
11OMAC001Interesting use of the Dark Jade story type. Wonder if Jimmy will become corrupted with power again.
4/28/2016 c7 47Alisi Thorndyke
So Rose Quartz dropped in for a sitting did she? :D When you include her, you know you have my attention :D
And I like what you did with Catherine :) She played her part well! :) Will she appear in future chapters? :) I hope so and a side note, in NMIGF, she is much more powerful and can handle heavy duty magic. :) Lets see how she handles the Cipher's eye :)
Great job! :)
Alisi Thorndyke :)
47Alisi ThorndykeSo Rose Quartz dropped in for a sitting did she? :D When you include her, you know you have my attention :D
And I like what you did with Catherine :) She played her part well! :) Will she appear in future chapters? :) I hope so and a side note, in NMIGF, she is much more powerful and can handle heavy duty magic. :) Lets see how she handles the Cipher's eye :)
Great job! :)
Alisi Thorndyke :)
4/25/2016 c7 nightmaster000
Excellent chapter.
Catherine is certainly a interesting character. I'm curious will she find a way to get rid of her weakness to water. After all melting by just getting wet is a huge problem and obstacle.
Interesting twist with the amulet made out of Bill's eye. The pines should probably have done something about Bill's statue to prevent something like that happening.
Excellent chapter.
Catherine is certainly a interesting character. I'm curious will she find a way to get rid of her weakness to water. After all melting by just getting wet is a huge problem and obstacle.
Interesting twist with the amulet made out of Bill's eye. The pines should probably have done something about Bill's statue to prevent something like that happening.
4/25/2016 c7 8The Keeper of Worlds
Great mercy on high! An evil Cipher powered clone of Mabel from a separate dimension, at least Bill himself is still sealed.
Nice chapter and Waddles is playing Grey to do work for Light, not bad:-)
8The Keeper of WorldsGreat mercy on high! An evil Cipher powered clone of Mabel from a separate dimension, at least Bill himself is still sealed.
Nice chapter and Waddles is playing Grey to do work for Light, not bad:-)
4/19/2016 c6 1Araitsume
Well, the first two members of N.I.C.E. that have revealed themselves should have been obvious to me before, and I'm beating myself for not realizing that earlier. Anyway, it's going to take some time get used with the nature of the missions. Anyway, I like how you managed to build on Todd & Riley's orphanage days to build a connection to Nyx. Then again, I wasn't expecting the Changing Chopsticks to be utilized in this way instead of the Star Hanabi. As for the events in Miracle City, I'm curious if you're planning on making changes to the creator's future notes. And yeah, I wanted Manny and Zoe back together since "Super Egghead Geniuses Unite", but not through Sartana's manipulations. And now, Frida has become a villain because she selfishly wants Manny without Zoe around; I can't help but wonder if Zoe would've been more mature in the possibility still dating Manny even if he and Frida were still friends. Still, maintaining the balance seems to be a daunting task since one can't really predict how much of an impact each event has.
1AraitsumeWell, the first two members of N.I.C.E. that have revealed themselves should have been obvious to me before, and I'm beating myself for not realizing that earlier. Anyway, it's going to take some time get used with the nature of the missions. Anyway, I like how you managed to build on Todd & Riley's orphanage days to build a connection to Nyx. Then again, I wasn't expecting the Changing Chopsticks to be utilized in this way instead of the Star Hanabi. As for the events in Miracle City, I'm curious if you're planning on making changes to the creator's future notes. And yeah, I wanted Manny and Zoe back together since "Super Egghead Geniuses Unite", but not through Sartana's manipulations. And now, Frida has become a villain because she selfishly wants Manny without Zoe around; I can't help but wonder if Zoe would've been more mature in the possibility still dating Manny even if he and Frida were still friends. Still, maintaining the balance seems to be a daunting task since one can't really predict how much of an impact each event has.