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2/14/2016 c1 anotherboarduser
Interesting story, it's funny.
2/14/2016 c1 17RobSt
Enjoyed your story - great first effort.

Robert
2/14/2016 c1 5HinaGuy749
Very good first attempt. I'd say you need to work on your pacing a bit and don't be afraid to use the line breaks to separate the parts a bit more as it got a bit confusing at times when it jumped to a previous event. I loved the humor and a lot of the ideas in the story though I gotta say the whole Malfoy thing came off as sort of out of nowhere and unbelievable. Keep at it as I'm looking forward to reading more of your work in the future.
2/13/2016 c1 carick of hunter moon
All told this is a lovely story
That is well written
That has a very diffrent tone to it a soft voice
Well done
Now I for one would like to see more of this the story
May starting with the kidnapping and the first year why
I think with in this story arc / plot hook
You have the bones of what could be developed into an epic story
2/13/2016 c1 JuliSt
Great story! I really liked the Native American aspect to it. You did a great job with Harry and Hermione and their relationship. I wouldn't mind a follow up to see what happens in the future :))
2/13/2016 c1 ak
bonne fic!
2/12/2016 c1 4HarryHermioneEdwardBella
awesome story
2/12/2016 c1 4Nocte Furorem
That was a lot of fun, even if it was a bit difficult to read at times. The story had no spelling errors and had correct grammar as far as I saw, but line breaks at scene changes would have made this a much smoother reading experience.
2/11/2016 c1 3desireejones99
fun story, and no unneeded conflict for conflict's sake.

very excellent enteertainment
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