for Challenger5/10 c18 Guest
A chapter in Pallet is nice. So you're leaning towards Alolan Raichu, I like the idea.
A chapter in Pallet is nice. So you're leaning towards Alolan Raichu, I like the idea.
5/10 c17 Guest
Glad things didn't end up very bad.
Glad things didn't end up very bad.
5/11 c20 
1The Mangled Shoe
Today, I reread your story, and truly enjoyed every word of it.
However, I feel quite disheartened witnessing a growing trend on fanfiction platforms: Many people message writers simply to say, "I read your story."
Unfortunately, this has led to many writers leaving the fanfiction community.
I hope this hasn't ocurred with you as your story has a very deep, immersive, extremely well-researched story with a stand out level of quality.
I hope I see more of it in the future.
1The Mangled ShoeToday, I reread your story, and truly enjoyed every word of it.
However, I feel quite disheartened witnessing a growing trend on fanfiction platforms: Many people message writers simply to say, "I read your story."
Unfortunately, this has led to many writers leaving the fanfiction community.
I hope this hasn't ocurred with you as your story has a very deep, immersive, extremely well-researched story with a stand out level of quality.
I hope I see more of it in the future.
5/9 c16 Guest
Eevee evolved into Espeon, one of my two favourite Eeveelutions, the other being Jolteon. I get the feeling Wes's Flygon could beat all six of Ash's team by itself, its shows the difference between Ash and Wes's strength.
Eevee evolved into Espeon, one of my two favourite Eeveelutions, the other being Jolteon. I get the feeling Wes's Flygon could beat all six of Ash's team by itself, its shows the difference between Ash and Wes's strength.
5/9 c13 Guest
Yay Pikachu is back, Douse and Sobek also evolved. The team is complete again, and it has become much stronger. Can't wait for the St Anne tournament.
Yay Pikachu is back, Douse and Sobek also evolved. The team is complete again, and it has become much stronger. Can't wait for the St Anne tournament.
5/9 c12 Guest
The Veteran Gyarados and his legion helps training Ash and his team is quite generous, and Pyro has evolved. Can't wait for to see his capabilities as a Charizard.
The Veteran Gyarados and his legion helps training Ash and his team is quite generous, and Pyro has evolved. Can't wait for to see his capabilities as a Charizard.
5/8 c11 Guest
Looks like Koga put a stop to Ash's gym victories. Can't wait for their eventual rematch. Seems when Jasmine evolves, it would take a few years before she can become a Dragonite then.
Ash wonders how Toxicroak gets healed when hit with a water move, he forgot Douse has a similar ability.
Looks like Koga put a stop to Ash's gym victories. Can't wait for their eventual rematch. Seems when Jasmine evolves, it would take a few years before she can become a Dragonite then.
Ash wonders how Toxicroak gets healed when hit with a water move, he forgot Douse has a similar ability.
5/7 c10 Guest
That was a good meeting with Janine, as well as the battle. A Dratini, great addition! I know we won't get a Dragonite anytime soon, but a Dragonair in the League will still be a formidable asset. Can't wait to see Green Eyes in action.
That was a good meeting with Janine, as well as the battle. A Dratini, great addition! I know we won't get a Dragonite anytime soon, but a Dragonair in the League will still be a formidable asset. Can't wait to see Green Eyes in action.
5/7 c9 Guest
I unfortunately did not see the previous version. Still the whole chapter with Leaf was a nice break for Ash.
I unfortunately did not see the previous version. Still the whole chapter with Leaf was a nice break for Ash.
5/7 c8 Guest
Consequences indeed, and its Pikachu who payed. Hope the little rascal will return without problems.
Consequences indeed, and its Pikachu who payed. Hope the little rascal will return without problems.
5/4 c7 Guest
This story got even more interesting, adding Wes and Rui from Colosseum. On another note, four badges down and four to go, halfway there. And a little teasing for Ash.
This story got even more interesting, adding Wes and Rui from Colosseum. On another note, four badges down and four to go, halfway there. And a little teasing for Ash.
5/4 c6 Guest
Ohh, a Duskull, its an ok ghost-type pick. Dusknoir would be a tank. The Rockets here sure are deadly, seems they're the main antagonist in this story. Cynthia is a great help for Ash and the team, especially Eevee.
Ohh, a Duskull, its an ok ghost-type pick. Dusknoir would be a tank. The Rockets here sure are deadly, seems they're the main antagonist in this story. Cynthia is a great help for Ash and the team, especially Eevee.
5/4 c5 Guest
And that's three badges now, five to go. The battle was well written. Poliwhirl is a good choice for a water-type.
And that's three badges now, five to go. The battle was well written. Poliwhirl is a good choice for a water-type.
5/4 c4 Guest
Two badges down, six to go. Wonder how Ash will tame Eevee after what she's been through, it would be a struggle but I hope they can bond.
Two badges down, six to go. Wonder how Ash will tame Eevee after what she's been through, it would be a struggle but I hope they can bond.
5/4 c3 Guest
One badge down, seven to go. Didn't expect Paul here, another strong rival for Ash then.
One badge down, seven to go. Didn't expect Paul here, another strong rival for Ash then.