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1/25/2020 c1 Rydia16
hooo what's next? I love R27 *w*
1/31/2017 c1 Ann
Interesting. I really liked your intro!
10/29/2016 c2 22D C JoKeR H S
;w; cute ;w;
10/11/2016 c1 Guest
You can it "always and forever". It can symbolise Tsuna's and Reborn's love for each other, and all the people they'll meet(again).
6/14/2016 c1 10Amu4ever
Eh...for an intended one-shot the end seems very...rushed...interrupted...

Hmm...describing it in a metaphorical way I would say the end looks like a movie, which stops at a random point.

This is not meant as offense just found it curious.

Also, your idea is interesting. Though you might want to try not to rush so much. After all you can also trip and stumble over a story not only over stories. It seems like it happened to you to an extent in the second part of this chapter.

So, keeping an eye out for it in the future would probably improve future story drastically. (And might prevent the feeling of something missing while reading it.)

This is not meant to be insulting in any way shape or form.

I want to apologise in case it comes over that way.
6/2/2016 c1 lilmymyshem
Do the sequel. I wanna see it bad.
5/21/2016 c1 Vongola10
why did you stop writing this story?
4/29/2016 c1 Yhaelle-chii
"Only for you Dame-Tsuna"...
Damn! I melted right there and then! This is so sweet but you managed to make it Reborn-ish, so a big round of applause for you! I hope you'll continue this, because I'm honestly fed up wih authors who end their story with an open ending...anyway great work!
3/10/2016 c1 1I-AM-A-SUPER-SADIST
Kawaii
3/9/2016 c1 11Crucifix HiME
...i liked your summary!
...this was so cheesy, my stomach hurts...
2/27/2016 c1 Guest
k is for young childs i guess ?
2/29/2016 c1 18NorCal.NEH
Haha that was cheesy and its so funny even before I finished reading it and reborn was like even if we were diffrent we would love each other I was thinking that it would be cool for a sequal or something were they met and then I found you put a little paragraph I was so happy. I think you should make a story out of the paragraph.
2/27/2016 c1 6ShizuBABE
Very cute. I loved the end you added there
2/27/2016 c1 mooniesgurl2468
LOVEE ITTTT OMGG THIS IS SO ADORABLE AWWWWW *hearts fluttering and flittering*

P.S. this might be a random and weird title but: "What If...?" :0

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