for Moments3/2/2016 c1 
1Radio Free Death
[he finds comfort in the near solitude she finds there and with a trembling hand, she lights a candle to the Mother; her voice shaking as she kneels and prays from a healthy babe.]
Remember to use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable.
[Tells her to breath,]
It's breathe. Breath is the air expelled from the lungs when you breathe. Breathing is drawing breath.
It's a cute start! I really wish there was a bit more time showing instead of telling, like when Rhaella spends time with Viserys, we're only told this without getting an example as to what they do together.
1Radio Free Death[he finds comfort in the near solitude she finds there and with a trembling hand, she lights a candle to the Mother; her voice shaking as she kneels and prays from a healthy babe.]
Remember to use sentence-connecting semicolons sparingly and only when the ideas in the clauses are inseparable.
[Tells her to breath,]
It's breathe. Breath is the air expelled from the lungs when you breathe. Breathing is drawing breath.
It's a cute start! I really wish there was a bit more time showing instead of telling, like when Rhaella spends time with Viserys, we're only told this without getting an example as to what they do together.