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11/18/2019 c5 19Crystal-Wolf-Guardain-967
Loved it! More please?!
10/2/2019 c5 fan
I like it, please continue to write the story it's really good.
8/23/2019 c5 Guest
I would have liked more of this story. Update soon
4/18/2017 c5 crazyjenius74
I rather like the idea of this story and it has potential. However, the scene changes are rather abrupt and choppy. It doesn't flow as well as it could. It jumps from scene to scene, person to person with no transitions. Segues into scenes would really help develop it on that aspect. Next, the characters need a bit more developing. They aren't completely flat, but a lot of the characters are developed by Kishimoto and not you the author. I would love to see your take on the characters and look into their psyche. Overall I feel this is solid, just needs to tap into that potential.
3/2/2017 c5 10Tobiramamara
Awwww, Please update! I want to know What Will happen! Cute couple ... thanks for writing this!
10/25/2016 c5 3stubs1101
oh please don't make us wait to long - tbh i had thought that you had died or something and this story was on permanent hitus
6/1/2016 c4 24LittlemissLazy
I want to be polite and ask when will the next update, but I'm so frustrated at the cliffhanger! Please update, Author-san, I'm begging you!
3/31/2016 c4 3stubs1101
damn i hate when real life interfears with a great story! please keep writing xoxo
3/25/2016 c4 1Sunrisehime
good :D
3/19/2016 c3 Sunrisehime
continue please :D
3/13/2016 c2 Petalclaw's PatriceBethPorter
I love this story I hope you update on it soon it is great so far.
3/8/2016 c1 3stubs1101
i love the originality of the story - and how you have left it open for many possible plot lines. my only criticism would be your writing is a little choppy. going for scene to scene or even thought to thought should not read like a textbook for example but smother like your thoughts. try reading it out loud and see if that helps. Keep writing you can only get better xoxo

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