for The Name of the Game11/10/2023 c9 ShankZZ
my biggest issue of my addiction to fanfiction is that when I begin to enjoy a character or MC and their approach to their new life then the author turns them into an idiot all at once like this it's retarded for someone with for knowledge to align with Cinder for any reason not to mention his underworld is meant as a cover for money and he is already short on time for training this plan of "infiltrate" Cinder group is fantastically stupid way to draw large amounts of all bad guys attention to him self and his family by default while incredibly weak with little to no experience so ok till this chapter then abandoned for damaged IQ
my biggest issue of my addiction to fanfiction is that when I begin to enjoy a character or MC and their approach to their new life then the author turns them into an idiot all at once like this it's retarded for someone with for knowledge to align with Cinder for any reason not to mention his underworld is meant as a cover for money and he is already short on time for training this plan of "infiltrate" Cinder group is fantastically stupid way to draw large amounts of all bad guys attention to him self and his family by default while incredibly weak with little to no experience so ok till this chapter then abandoned for damaged IQ
9/27/2023 c3 Disappointment
Garbage. There are so many TRASH gamer fics, and now they have another one. Horrible writing, this is jist pure constant plot armor. Very convenient. Learn to write an actually interesting story. If someone disagrees, congratulations you're an idiot.
Garbage. There are so many TRASH gamer fics, and now they have another one. Horrible writing, this is jist pure constant plot armor. Very convenient. Learn to write an actually interesting story. If someone disagrees, congratulations you're an idiot.
9/27/2023 c1 Disappointment
Had to turn it into shit, didn't you. And it was progressing realtively smoothly up to THAT point.
Had to turn it into shit, didn't you. And it was progressing realtively smoothly up to THAT point.
8/1/2023 c1 Kragh
I recently decided to re-read the story and saw the negatives review. Feel free to ignore them as there is a reason your story is the 8th most popular RWBY fic.
I recently decided to re-read the story and saw the negatives review. Feel free to ignore them as there is a reason your story is the 8th most popular RWBY fic.
7/8/2023 c28 insanecoop
It got bad, hot a quarter of the way throught this chapter. Lost its way.
I wouldn't recommend starting Sue to how long story is with no pay off and how it drops off badly at the later chapters.
4/10
It got bad, hot a quarter of the way throught this chapter. Lost its way.
I wouldn't recommend starting Sue to how long story is with no pay off and how it drops off badly at the later chapters.
4/10
6/30/2023 c5 Guest
It's always a bad sign whenever the first male character besides the MC is introduced as some plot device to make the MC look good or get some pussy but it's still early on so I'm going to give this a chance.
It's always a bad sign whenever the first male character besides the MC is introduced as some plot device to make the MC look good or get some pussy but it's still early on so I'm going to give this a chance.
6/25/2023 c10 Proll
It gets rather tiring when mc does something dumb and then curses himself for it then does it again and again. Well, we understand that author is the one forcing the narrative, but it makes mc look idiotic at times.
It gets rather tiring when mc does something dumb and then curses himself for it then does it again and again. Well, we understand that author is the one forcing the narrative, but it makes mc look idiotic at times.
6/23/2023 c10 
25NewMystery356
That’s ONE way to get rid of Roman. A lot of extra steps, but worth it to cover his trail. Wonder how Neo will handle the lifestyle change.
25NewMystery356That’s ONE way to get rid of Roman. A lot of extra steps, but worth it to cover his trail. Wonder how Neo will handle the lifestyle change.
6/21/2023 c9 NewMystery356
Wonder how many “hats” he’ll have by the time he’s through. Also, Ruby is super-cute in this interpretation; especially when her hood was pulled over her head. Wonder how the meeting with Ozpin will go~
Wonder how many “hats” he’ll have by the time he’s through. Also, Ruby is super-cute in this interpretation; especially when her hood was pulled over her head. Wonder how the meeting with Ozpin will go~