for The Name of the Game6/18/2023 c1 
2WPUrchezem23
you have this cross posted on Archive, I knew it seemed familiar, yeah I dropped this story cause of the incest shit. dawg, I really don't care whatever the reason for it, it's gross. also much as I like sex scenes in video games, I'm not reading this story for smut and before somebody else jumps on me for it I respect smut writers and know how hard it is, so f off I realize that people like it, I don't however.
2WPUrchezem23you have this cross posted on Archive, I knew it seemed familiar, yeah I dropped this story cause of the incest shit. dawg, I really don't care whatever the reason for it, it's gross. also much as I like sex scenes in video games, I'm not reading this story for smut and before somebody else jumps on me for it I respect smut writers and know how hard it is, so f off I realize that people like it, I don't however.
6/15/2023 c7 25NewMystery356
The logistics of incentivized population growth was pretty interesting. I approve of the world building~
25NewMystery356The logistics of incentivized population growth was pretty interesting. I approve of the world building~
6/15/2023 c6 NewMystery356
Well, at least he detoxed from blinking his sister… Also, wonder how many girls he’ll wind up packing into that penthouse~
Well, at least he detoxed from blinking his sister… Also, wonder how many girls he’ll wind up packing into that penthouse~
6/14/2023 c4 NewMystery356
You know, Lightning’s Gun/Blade really resonated with me too. As for the “Older Sister Route”, at least THAT will be easier to get the Alt Ending for; one hopes… As for the A.T. Field, I kinda thought it’d be called “Rotation/Kaiten” after NEJI’s attack since you already name-dropped Naruto in there. As for JUNIOR showing up at the end… wonder if he’ll run into Yang that way~
You know, Lightning’s Gun/Blade really resonated with me too. As for the “Older Sister Route”, at least THAT will be easier to get the Alt Ending for; one hopes… As for the A.T. Field, I kinda thought it’d be called “Rotation/Kaiten” after NEJI’s attack since you already name-dropped Naruto in there. As for JUNIOR showing up at the end… wonder if he’ll run into Yang that way~
6/13/2023 c3 NewMystery356
“Petty larceny” but with extra steps~
Eager to see how things go with his new ladyfriend~
“Petty larceny” but with extra steps~
Eager to see how things go with his new ladyfriend~
6/13/2023 c2 NewMystery356
Jun is just an absolute TREAT~ Especially right there at the end~ And of course, Menu-sama isn’t much better. Wonder if he can STAY out of trouble~
Jun is just an absolute TREAT~ Especially right there at the end~ And of course, Menu-sama isn’t much better. Wonder if he can STAY out of trouble~
6/13/2023 c1 NewMystery356
A very fun start. Suffice it to say, I’m hooked~ Binge reading montage, HOOOOOO!
A very fun start. Suffice it to say, I’m hooked~ Binge reading montage, HOOOOOO!
5/29/2023 c5 JustAngry
Ugh, this is some revolting shit man. I would say put "incest trash fic" in the description but as this story seems dead which is possibly a good thing. Fucking incest crap in Self Insert fic, man you got problems.
Ugh, this is some revolting shit man. I would say put "incest trash fic" in the description but as this story seems dead which is possibly a good thing. Fucking incest crap in Self Insert fic, man you got problems.
5/8/2023 c14 typo
draw agg - draw aggro
draw agg - draw aggro
5/8/2023 c14 Editing Error
"where I met it in the middle with a Flash Step"
This is the first mention of him using Flash Step.
You forgot to insert him actually learning it beforehand
"where I met it in the middle with a Flash Step"
This is the first mention of him using Flash Step.
You forgot to insert him actually learning it beforehand
5/8/2023 c14 Guest
It kinda saddens me that you have Neo speak, it makes her a lot less distinct as a character.
You could have had her use her semblance as a message board or something instead.
It kinda saddens me that you have Neo speak, it makes her a lot less distinct as a character.
You could have had her use her semblance as a message board or something instead.
5/7/2023 c10 Guest
"no one attempting to hide would order items for their secret identity to be delivered to the home of their civilian identity—which itself was a bit of reverse psychology to eliminate the apartment complex as somewhere 'Shiro' might live. "
Wow, he really likes out-thinking himself. Trying so hard to be smart, that he instead crosses into pure stupidity.
"no one attempting to hide would order items for their secret identity to be delivered to the home of their civilian identity—which itself was a bit of reverse psychology to eliminate the apartment complex as somewhere 'Shiro' might live. "
Wow, he really likes out-thinking himself. Trying so hard to be smart, that he instead crosses into pure stupidity.
5/7/2023 c7 Ibskib
Disappointing that we don't see the kinky librarian sex.
You should consider adding that to the chapter. :-)
Disappointing that we don't see the kinky librarian sex.
You should consider adding that to the chapter. :-)
5/7/2023 c7 typo
barbeque - barbecue
barbeque - barbecue
5/7/2023 c7 typo
principle - principal
principle - principal