for The Uzumaki Phenex10/16/2021 c7 CandyMaster
i hold this fic for a long time, and it's just end like that NEED MORE AUTHOR SAN
i hold this fic for a long time, and it's just end like that NEED MORE AUTHOR SAN
9/29/2021 c7 Arashi Uzukaze
Still need a beta who is good at english and writing. When you get one, have them go over the previous chapters.
Still need a beta who is good at english and writing. When you get one, have them go over the previous chapters.
9/29/2021 c3 Arashi Uzukaze
The grammar could be better. But it's not too bad, just need to replace certain words or to use proper pronouns with some words.
The grammar could be better. But it's not too bad, just need to replace certain words or to use proper pronouns with some words.
139/4/2021 c1 Guest
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9/4/2021 c7 Rivzed
Now all we, the readers, need to do is waiting for another year for another update
Now all we, the readers, need to do is waiting for another year for another update
8/30/2021 c7 Drayck
Tal vez puedas colocar a Hinata en la historia, que reencarno igual que Naruto, puede ser Demonio o Angel. Sería fantástico, así también le metes celos a Rias (como lo harás lo del matrimonio político entre los dos (Naruto y Rias)), ya quiero que aparezca Serafall y Gabriel
Tal vez puedas colocar a Hinata en la historia, que reencarno igual que Naruto, puede ser Demonio o Angel. Sería fantástico, así también le metes celos a Rias (como lo harás lo del matrimonio político entre los dos (Naruto y Rias)), ya quiero que aparezca Serafall y Gabriel
8/30/2021 c7 Mythic Imagination
A good chapter in itself, although as painful as it is to say, I think you’ll have to a revision of the story now that you’ve made changes.
This chapter doesn’t feel like it “fits” smoothly with the story’s plot because in Chapter 3 Naruto has already been learning Rating Game strategies (years before his first Rating Game) and giving the impression Naruto will be a strategist, while in this chapter Naruto has been written as someone who barely strategises at all.
Like how Seilah was added, although the setting seems familiar for some reason. Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter.
A good chapter in itself, although as painful as it is to say, I think you’ll have to a revision of the story now that you’ve made changes.
This chapter doesn’t feel like it “fits” smoothly with the story’s plot because in Chapter 3 Naruto has already been learning Rating Game strategies (years before his first Rating Game) and giving the impression Naruto will be a strategist, while in this chapter Naruto has been written as someone who barely strategises at all.
Like how Seilah was added, although the setting seems familiar for some reason. Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter.