for The Uzumaki Phenex11/19/2016 c9 
3Sir Cookie
When Naruto mentioned talent in space manipulation, he said "I have talent in space manipulation" typo
3Sir CookieWhen Naruto mentioned talent in space manipulation, he said "I have talent in space manipulation" typo
11/19/2016 c3 Sir Cookie
You are using the plural form of fiancé. Also, it is really weird to have people say to an amnesiac, "you shouldn't regain your memories." Naruto had no connection to the phenex, he had no reason to stay. Naruto has had no parents, was a parent and grandparents. If Naruto didn't want to take over dxdnaruto's life, beating it to go on a exploration would have made more sense.
You are using the plural form of fiancé. Also, it is really weird to have people say to an amnesiac, "you shouldn't regain your memories." Naruto had no connection to the phenex, he had no reason to stay. Naruto has had no parents, was a parent and grandparents. If Naruto didn't want to take over dxdnaruto's life, beating it to go on a exploration would have made more sense.
11/19/2016 c2 Sir Cookie
I think you are understating the affects of being old and how getting a young body would change that. At the change and state that Naruto was in, he should be lucky that he could remember anything. The brain is the first organ to go from old age. Once that starts deteriorating, everything goes down the toilet. And not only that, everything hurts. Going to the bathroom, walking, easy stuff and such a slow process that it's gradual. Old people just live with it. Also when Naruto said that he wanted to fuck yulebellna (the queen) and said that she was hotter than Hinata. This is not the reaction of a faithful and long husband. It doesn'the matter your personal preference, the dead Hinata should be a built up idealized memory, with all of the good and none of the bad. If Naruto remember her. It just breaks immersion for me that Naruto does not act old. He acts like a teen. Which I could accept a tiny bit if he had dxd memories but his last memories is of him dying. You'd think that would galvanize him to seize the day and take advantage of all the regrets that he had. Which he had plenty. Old people always regret something. You don't live that long without have lost something. I wouldn't have written it this way, but it's very interesting and I look forward to more.
I think you are understating the affects of being old and how getting a young body would change that. At the change and state that Naruto was in, he should be lucky that he could remember anything. The brain is the first organ to go from old age. Once that starts deteriorating, everything goes down the toilet. And not only that, everything hurts. Going to the bathroom, walking, easy stuff and such a slow process that it's gradual. Old people just live with it. Also when Naruto said that he wanted to fuck yulebellna (the queen) and said that she was hotter than Hinata. This is not the reaction of a faithful and long husband. It doesn'the matter your personal preference, the dead Hinata should be a built up idealized memory, with all of the good and none of the bad. If Naruto remember her. It just breaks immersion for me that Naruto does not act old. He acts like a teen. Which I could accept a tiny bit if he had dxd memories but his last memories is of him dying. You'd think that would galvanize him to seize the day and take advantage of all the regrets that he had. Which he had plenty. Old people always regret something. You don't live that long without have lost something. I wouldn't have written it this way, but it's very interesting and I look forward to more.
11/15/2016 c5 dark.muktadir
This was your strongest chapter/arc yet. I was almost losing interest in your fic, not cause of shoddy writing but cause replacing an unknown persons entire existence then pretending to be him, while having your way with his friends and families is worse than shou tucker.
This was your strongest chapter/arc yet. I was almost losing interest in your fic, not cause of shoddy writing but cause replacing an unknown persons entire existence then pretending to be him, while having your way with his friends and families is worse than shou tucker.
11/9/2016 c15 oppaihammer
This is one of the best ones i have read so far..
Cant wait for what happens next..
I hope you keep writing and update when possible..
This is one of the best ones i have read so far..
Cant wait for what happens next..
I hope you keep writing and update when possible..
11/7/2016 c8 1YeTianshi
Not exactly sure what happened because I don't really read reviews, just write them.
But honestly when it comes to cross overs I think that having more than one character crossing over becomes quite the pain to read. Not exactly sure how to explain it, but it just sort of feels like too much.
I personally don't hate Sasuke or even dislike him, he's an alright character, but I can understand why people wouldn't want a crossover of Naruto AND Sasuke. Like... their conflict was in the Naruto world, it began there, and it should die there. XD
1YeTianshiNot exactly sure what happened because I don't really read reviews, just write them.
But honestly when it comes to cross overs I think that having more than one character crossing over becomes quite the pain to read. Not exactly sure how to explain it, but it just sort of feels like too much.
I personally don't hate Sasuke or even dislike him, he's an alright character, but I can understand why people wouldn't want a crossover of Naruto AND Sasuke. Like... their conflict was in the Naruto world, it began there, and it should die there. XD
10/30/2016 c15 5Luke Dragneel
Just thought I would point out something you have missed since the beginning: Naruto is technically the Second (true)Sage of Six Paths. He thus knows all the abilities of such and thus can revive the recently deceased and use the technique Creation of All Things to turn his imagination to reality. Also, each of the seven swords are products of Fuuinjutsu from the Uzumaki clan.
This means Naruto can actually recreate the seven swords with altered abilities such as the Decapitating Carving Knife's blood absorption being used to constantly reinforce it's structure(as swords such as that will develop hairline fractures due to its size alone, not to mention the Knicks and dents along its edge)
from use).
I can understand Naruto not using his chakra based powers when he has his devil based ones to deal with. I also thought it would have been better if the anti-magic mist only negated magic use outside the body instead of poisoning the user. That would have allowed it's usage without the number of consequences to be as damaging.
I also think I am obligated to state Naruto can use the original technique of the Six Sage, where he originally taught humanity in the Elemental Nations the original use of Chakra(that is, to use you own life force to communicate with others. Humanity just weaponized it after learning it), could have granted his servants it's use.
I also find it strange Naruto hasn't taught Kuroka how to use some of his chakra based techniques(as it is stated in DxD that Nekomatas have chakra while Nekoshou can utilize nature energy, which requires chakra to utilize) nor explained properly to his servants considering both how long they have been with him and how he needed to reveal about his transformation and cloning technique(something that would have gone a great way to helping all his girls feel loved without a single one hogging all his affection) after Shirone's trial.
5Luke DragneelJust thought I would point out something you have missed since the beginning: Naruto is technically the Second (true)Sage of Six Paths. He thus knows all the abilities of such and thus can revive the recently deceased and use the technique Creation of All Things to turn his imagination to reality. Also, each of the seven swords are products of Fuuinjutsu from the Uzumaki clan.
This means Naruto can actually recreate the seven swords with altered abilities such as the Decapitating Carving Knife's blood absorption being used to constantly reinforce it's structure(as swords such as that will develop hairline fractures due to its size alone, not to mention the Knicks and dents along its edge)
from use).
I can understand Naruto not using his chakra based powers when he has his devil based ones to deal with. I also thought it would have been better if the anti-magic mist only negated magic use outside the body instead of poisoning the user. That would have allowed it's usage without the number of consequences to be as damaging.
I also think I am obligated to state Naruto can use the original technique of the Six Sage, where he originally taught humanity in the Elemental Nations the original use of Chakra(that is, to use you own life force to communicate with others. Humanity just weaponized it after learning it), could have granted his servants it's use.
I also find it strange Naruto hasn't taught Kuroka how to use some of his chakra based techniques(as it is stated in DxD that Nekomatas have chakra while Nekoshou can utilize nature energy, which requires chakra to utilize) nor explained properly to his servants considering both how long they have been with him and how he needed to reveal about his transformation and cloning technique(something that would have gone a great way to helping all his girls feel loved without a single one hogging all his affection) after Shirone's trial.
10/29/2016 c1 Acclaiming
"Wait, by that Doujinshi do you mean...Muffled Scream* Don't worry I hate it too...
Just finished the 1st chapter and I really like the story so far!
"Wait, by that Doujinshi do you mean...Muffled Scream* Don't worry I hate it too...
Just finished the 1st chapter and I really like the story so far!
10/10/2016 c8 PLEASE READ ME
no the uchiha is an ass, stuck up power-hungry delusional bastard of the 1st decree, with a stick shoved so far up his ass that its poking out of his mouth and could pole vault with it, he and Gilgamesh and he would get along like two peas in a pod in love but like bros cuz he ant gay (I think) in short he is insane.
no the uchiha is an ass, stuck up power-hungry delusional bastard of the 1st decree, with a stick shoved so far up his ass that its poking out of his mouth and could pole vault with it, he and Gilgamesh and he would get along like two peas in a pod in love but like bros cuz he ant gay (I think) in short he is insane.
10/8/2016 c10 correnhimself316
Yeah, why would he need help? He is a freaking Super Ninja with the experience of a long lived lif, backed up by a well of nigh infinite chakra(from his own reserves, Kurama's power, amd the inherited Six Paths Chakra)and presumably monstrous amounts of magic at his dude is also super devious and extremely clever. Breaking and entering a well fortified, high security library should be well within his capabilities.
Yeah, why would he need help? He is a freaking Super Ninja with the experience of a long lived lif, backed up by a well of nigh infinite chakra(from his own reserves, Kurama's power, amd the inherited Six Paths Chakra)and presumably monstrous amounts of magic at his dude is also super devious and extremely clever. Breaking and entering a well fortified, high security library should be well within his capabilities.
10/8/2016 c8 correnhimself316
I believe most people diislike Sasuke because he is a Mary Suish, whiny, emo, brooding, annoying little avenger. The thing is, I personally was begining to like Sasuke again, during the Fourth ShinobI War arc and the battle with Kaguya. Then he decides to go and turn all emo traito, super aveneger again and tries to enslave the Tailed Beasts and kill Naruto. He totally spat in the face of his Brother's Noble Sacrifice, by being consumed by his own hatred, just as Indra, Madara, and Obito had in the past.
I believe most people diislike Sasuke because he is a Mary Suish, whiny, emo, brooding, annoying little avenger. The thing is, I personally was begining to like Sasuke again, during the Fourth ShinobI War arc and the battle with Kaguya. Then he decides to go and turn all emo traito, super aveneger again and tries to enslave the Tailed Beasts and kill Naruto. He totally spat in the face of his Brother's Noble Sacrifice, by being consumed by his own hatred, just as Indra, Madara, and Obito had in the past.
10/8/2016 c7 correnhimself316
...Yeah Sayla, it's not like you are going to bump into the Child of Prophecy right?
...Yeah Sayla, it's not like you are going to bump into the Child of Prophecy right?