for Fate-In time4/20 c101 Andreds Myth
Dang! I need that prequel now! 10/10 story, probably gonna read some of it again. I know it’s been years now, but if you’re still into writing it, you absolutely should! I’d definitely read it if you posted it. I need closer after that teaser!
Dang! I need that prequel now! 10/10 story, probably gonna read some of it again. I know it’s been years now, but if you’re still into writing it, you absolutely should! I’d definitely read it if you posted it. I need closer after that teaser!
4/15 c5 EndriRigs
I'd like to point out a small inconsistency near the start of your story. Shirou calls Saber Lily Arturia when she never gave her name, which under normal circumstances would mean he already knew her gender but in the next chapter she acts like he never did even though he continues to casually call her arturia a few times. It's a small detail to miss but it's there.
I'd like to point out a small inconsistency near the start of your story. Shirou calls Saber Lily Arturia when she never gave her name, which under normal circumstances would mean he already knew her gender but in the next chapter she acts like he never did even though he continues to casually call her arturia a few times. It's a small detail to miss but it's there.
3/30 c74 
2TheSlySage
small note for thr gawain duel. Shirou is half Fire elemental. his father was the lord of flames so i'd assume and even higher tier of fire elemental similar to vivian the mere concept of gawain's heat even inconveniencing him is kind of unthinkable. he'd be Gawain's worst opponent. half fire elemental and his main familiar is a phoenix with blue flames... fire is his blood fammmm
everything else is dopeAF but this small thing was an amusong plothole lol plus he has dragon blood from fafnir he should be literally fireproof as he has every flame type big boss creature as part of him lol
2TheSlySagesmall note for thr gawain duel. Shirou is half Fire elemental. his father was the lord of flames so i'd assume and even higher tier of fire elemental similar to vivian the mere concept of gawain's heat even inconveniencing him is kind of unthinkable. he'd be Gawain's worst opponent. half fire elemental and his main familiar is a phoenix with blue flames... fire is his blood fammmm
everything else is dopeAF but this small thing was an amusong plothole lol plus he has dragon blood from fafnir he should be literally fireproof as he has every flame type big boss creature as part of him lol
3/29 c48 TheSlySage
waiiiiit Palamid is still cursed by Merlin to be a womannnnnn hahahahahahhahahahah i never caught that line before daaaammmn
waiiiiit Palamid is still cursed by Merlin to be a womannnnnn hahahahahahhahahahah i never caught that line before daaaammmn
3/28 c36 TheSlySage
this chapter is my favorite in the whole story. gives me chills everytime when Arturia and Shirou reunite after the reverse side situation.
thanks for writing this so damn well.
this chapter is my favorite in the whole story. gives me chills everytime when Arturia and Shirou reunite after the reverse side situation.
thanks for writing this so damn well.
3/11 c31 Church21
Arturia’s issue was that mentally and emotionally she couldnt remain human and be king of Camelot. Her issue was never that she was an incapable battle commander or warrior. In fact she was one of the greatest in history. Shiro’s role for the most part should be more mental and emotional suport while Arturia does her thing. Yet everytime anything comes up Shiro goes off and solo’s it. The first battle at the fort. Taking back the castle and reinforcing it. Arming the entire Army with enchanted arms and armor now this expeditionary attack on the Saxons are all feats for Shiro while Artoria doesn’thave to do anything. Just come in with an already overwhelming advantage and clean up after Shiro. Her legend in this timeline isn’t going to be anything other then a king that had an exemplary warrior fight her battles for her. Arturia and her knights of the round wont have to do shit because Shiro takes on everything by himself and eliminates any chance of adversity they will ever need to overcome. Any battle any success they may have will just be attributed to Shiro. It may seem like hes helping but in reality he is absolutely crippling everyone because they are just dependent on him. If hes going to go the rout of taking on everything himself while everyone sits back as bystanders he might as well as just drew calibern himself and nade Artoria his queen. This whole all Shiro’s feats by nature will get attributed to Artoria as her first knight makes little sense. These are all things Arturia accomplished in her original tineline on her own cause she is stronger there then she is here. You would think Shiro would have more respect for her as a warrior and let her do her own thing. Take off her training wheels and let her be a king. I know this is a Shiro centered story so he is likely to be the big hero but in trying to be a nice guy he is absolutely wrecking the legend of king arthur and the knights of the round table. Its just weird hes playing at the gies of im doing this for Arturia when all he’s really doing is building hes own legend and making her nothing but a bystander at best or a damsel in distress at worst.
Arturia’s issue was that mentally and emotionally she couldnt remain human and be king of Camelot. Her issue was never that she was an incapable battle commander or warrior. In fact she was one of the greatest in history. Shiro’s role for the most part should be more mental and emotional suport while Arturia does her thing. Yet everytime anything comes up Shiro goes off and solo’s it. The first battle at the fort. Taking back the castle and reinforcing it. Arming the entire Army with enchanted arms and armor now this expeditionary attack on the Saxons are all feats for Shiro while Artoria doesn’thave to do anything. Just come in with an already overwhelming advantage and clean up after Shiro. Her legend in this timeline isn’t going to be anything other then a king that had an exemplary warrior fight her battles for her. Arturia and her knights of the round wont have to do shit because Shiro takes on everything by himself and eliminates any chance of adversity they will ever need to overcome. Any battle any success they may have will just be attributed to Shiro. It may seem like hes helping but in reality he is absolutely crippling everyone because they are just dependent on him. If hes going to go the rout of taking on everything himself while everyone sits back as bystanders he might as well as just drew calibern himself and nade Artoria his queen. This whole all Shiro’s feats by nature will get attributed to Artoria as her first knight makes little sense. These are all things Arturia accomplished in her original tineline on her own cause she is stronger there then she is here. You would think Shiro would have more respect for her as a warrior and let her do her own thing. Take off her training wheels and let her be a king. I know this is a Shiro centered story so he is likely to be the big hero but in trying to be a nice guy he is absolutely wrecking the legend of king arthur and the knights of the round table. Its just weird hes playing at the gies of im doing this for Arturia when all he’s really doing is building hes own legend and making her nothing but a bystander at best or a damsel in distress at worst.
3/11 c28 Church21
Alot of good to this story. Fate Artoria drew Caliburn at 15 so im not sure why they waited an additional 2 years here. My only dislike in this story so far is I think Arturia is going to wind uo much weaker then her cannon counterpart. Shes kind of been caudeled by Shiro from 9 on. That scene with Caliburn and shiro kind if deminished Arturia in a way. Her thought process walking up to the sword is that it shines brighter for Shiro he would be a better king but I will draw it anyway. Also kind of confused why Shiro would sell arms and armor to the saxons when Arturia will be at war with them soon.
Alot of good to this story. Fate Artoria drew Caliburn at 15 so im not sure why they waited an additional 2 years here. My only dislike in this story so far is I think Arturia is going to wind uo much weaker then her cannon counterpart. Shes kind of been caudeled by Shiro from 9 on. That scene with Caliburn and shiro kind if deminished Arturia in a way. Her thought process walking up to the sword is that it shines brighter for Shiro he would be a better king but I will draw it anyway. Also kind of confused why Shiro would sell arms and armor to the saxons when Arturia will be at war with them soon.
3/2 c28 9Archangel Change24
Would love to see an alternate story where Shirou DOES pull the sword from the stone… i actually kind of prefer that story as an idea rather than Shirou just following along with the narrative
9Archangel Change24Would love to see an alternate story where Shirou DOES pull the sword from the stone… i actually kind of prefer that story as an idea rather than Shirou just following along with the narrative
1/31 c27 1LuminouShadowAlt
This is too much drama, that I am tired of it. Its like author cant think any other plot than arturia being a liability and then shirou being hurt to save her, and then she will feel that she is week abd next time again she will get involved and the results would be same.
Author keep repeating this plot line everytime, like he cant think of anything else. I am tired of reading same bs done again and again. Atleast think if some other plotline.
1LuminouShadowAltThis is too much drama, that I am tired of it. Its like author cant think any other plot than arturia being a liability and then shirou being hurt to save her, and then she will feel that she is week abd next time again she will get involved and the results would be same.
Author keep repeating this plot line everytime, like he cant think of anything else. I am tired of reading same bs done again and again. Atleast think if some other plotline.
1/27 c46 hearthyguy
Parcasious has this shirou glaze formula he keeps cooking repeatedly, godlike descriptions, character in awe of shirou's magnificence, and all that jazz. All his stories use this formula repeatedly and people loved it, I loved it. But no matter how often you enjoy a certain flavor, eventually, it will lose its appeal and become bland. Readers grow up as well, and their tastes naturally evolve and mature over time. However author still uses the same formula and I think the amnesia arc was a set up to cater the use of the formula. The character development of shirou and arturia both snipped the build up for their rule shove aside. Chapter 43 once a perfect set up to try new things (kingdom building, politicking against morgan, family building(?) or adulthood) and breathe through other interesting characters crushed by the timeskip. Fan of parcasious but man... Doesn't help when his current updating works as of writing this still utilizes the same formula.
Parcasious has this shirou glaze formula he keeps cooking repeatedly, godlike descriptions, character in awe of shirou's magnificence, and all that jazz. All his stories use this formula repeatedly and people loved it, I loved it. But no matter how often you enjoy a certain flavor, eventually, it will lose its appeal and become bland. Readers grow up as well, and their tastes naturally evolve and mature over time. However author still uses the same formula and I think the amnesia arc was a set up to cater the use of the formula. The character development of shirou and arturia both snipped the build up for their rule shove aside. Chapter 43 once a perfect set up to try new things (kingdom building, politicking against morgan, family building(?) or adulthood) and breathe through other interesting characters crushed by the timeskip. Fan of parcasious but man... Doesn't help when his current updating works as of writing this still utilizes the same formula.
1/20 c101 Guest
Wow, simplemente no tengo palabras, pero de una cosa si estoy segura y es gracias, esta historia simplemente a sido increíble y me a encantado todo de ella, sigue asi tu trabajo es increíble y te aseguro que lo seguiré, espero que tu trabajo no sea pérdido en el tiempo ;)
Gracias.
Wow, simplemente no tengo palabras, pero de una cosa si estoy segura y es gracias, esta historia simplemente a sido increíble y me a encantado todo de ella, sigue asi tu trabajo es increíble y te aseguro que lo seguiré, espero que tu trabajo no sea pérdido en el tiempo ;)
Gracias.
1/14 c2 aries.vash20
ashton seems like ashborn, then efret seems like igrid, did you perhaps get the inspiration from solo leveling? but it seems this fic is way back before solo leveling was published.
ashton seems like ashborn, then efret seems like igrid, did you perhaps get the inspiration from solo leveling? but it seems this fic is way back before solo leveling was published.