for Percy The Son Of Chaos And Guardian Of Artemis3/29/2016 c1 PrettyCoolName
Hey,
your story seems to be okay... It's interesting that Chaos is there for him from the start. But please use "..." or '...' or »...«, if someone is saying something. Otherwise it could be way to complicated to understand.
By the way, it's even better if you use a curved writing style for thoughts or mind-conversations.
Next thing is, please make longer chapters. Something about 1000 words is the minimum. Longer better. Little trick, try to write things as long as possible. Use a more/a lot of adjectives. "A tree" 2 words. "A big and old tree that rose up into the skyline" 11 words. The meaning stays the same, but the chapter is longer.
Also please work a little bit on your grammar and spelling. It is annoying to read something and always think: This is wrong...! or That sentence is stupid! It just 'kills' possible readers.
The same things goes for the summaries. It shouldn't be too long neither too short. Also some information's about the character, the pairing and other stuff should be included in an summary.
AN's... I literally hate them. Most writer just use them to get a longer chapter. But believe me, it doesn't feel like longer chapter because to long and stupid AN's suck. I don't care if any author is 'giving' me cookies... Sorry, I'm drifting off.
So in the end I want to apologize for my bad English, but its not my native language. Sorry :c
Hey,
your story seems to be okay... It's interesting that Chaos is there for him from the start. But please use "..." or '...' or »...«, if someone is saying something. Otherwise it could be way to complicated to understand.
By the way, it's even better if you use a curved writing style for thoughts or mind-conversations.
Next thing is, please make longer chapters. Something about 1000 words is the minimum. Longer better. Little trick, try to write things as long as possible. Use a more/a lot of adjectives. "A tree" 2 words. "A big and old tree that rose up into the skyline" 11 words. The meaning stays the same, but the chapter is longer.
Also please work a little bit on your grammar and spelling. It is annoying to read something and always think: This is wrong...! or That sentence is stupid! It just 'kills' possible readers.
The same things goes for the summaries. It shouldn't be too long neither too short. Also some information's about the character, the pairing and other stuff should be included in an summary.
AN's... I literally hate them. Most writer just use them to get a longer chapter. But believe me, it doesn't feel like longer chapter because to long and stupid AN's suck. I don't care if any author is 'giving' me cookies... Sorry, I'm drifting off.
So in the end I want to apologize for my bad English, but its not my native language. Sorry :c