for A Song of Ice, Fire and Lightning4/2 c1 Guest
I never imagined I could hate a fanfiction as Mitch as I now do, the incessant failure of a story is agonising to read; and I have read, and read of a protagonist introduced as powerful and capable yet failing in every way imaginable at every vital opportunity the protagonist’s forced weakness is so irritating that after hours of fighting to read through this ‘story’ I gave up, due to the consistent poor writing. The protagonist fails so often to think, it astounds me and even when his story should be clear victory the plot demands, at the author’s insistence, that the protagonist must fail and expanse another unrealistic setback, again as if the protagonist doesn’t learn or grow or change or do anything other than be a continuous plot hole of a being. The failure of the author to even understand their own characters abilities hurts to a near physical extent and is an experience that I never wish to feel from fiction again.
TLDR: author can’t powerscale and it ends up hurting to read
I never imagined I could hate a fanfiction as Mitch as I now do, the incessant failure of a story is agonising to read; and I have read, and read of a protagonist introduced as powerful and capable yet failing in every way imaginable at every vital opportunity the protagonist’s forced weakness is so irritating that after hours of fighting to read through this ‘story’ I gave up, due to the consistent poor writing. The protagonist fails so often to think, it astounds me and even when his story should be clear victory the plot demands, at the author’s insistence, that the protagonist must fail and expanse another unrealistic setback, again as if the protagonist doesn’t learn or grow or change or do anything other than be a continuous plot hole of a being. The failure of the author to even understand their own characters abilities hurts to a near physical extent and is an experience that I never wish to feel from fiction again.
TLDR: author can’t powerscale and it ends up hurting to read
3/25 c45 TheMoistSoul
The last two chapters have been annoying slogs to read through, they may have introduced the tension they wanted but they did a piss poor job of being entertaining while doing it. We get it Euron scary and powerful, hopefully you move on to something more interesting, like any of the other 6 plot threads that you have going right now.
The last two chapters have been annoying slogs to read through, they may have introduced the tension they wanted but they did a piss poor job of being entertaining while doing it. We get it Euron scary and powerful, hopefully you move on to something more interesting, like any of the other 6 plot threads that you have going right now.
3/25 c44 TheMoistSoul
I dont mind harry facing adversity but having people from the ASOIAF suddenly match him in pure combat is just silly. You know it is too, that's why the writing around it is so awkward and janky. it was silly when barristan did and and it was downright idiotic when euron did it. The biggest advantage Harry has is just experience when it comes to using and wielding magic in combat but every Tom Dick and Mary is now matching him both in martial prowess and magical ability, which is as i said before, idiotic. No one in this world has had any sense of logical progression and its just you grabbing different people from the world, magically buffing them enough for them to be a foil with no build up. Its bad.
I dont mind harry facing adversity but having people from the ASOIAF suddenly match him in pure combat is just silly. You know it is too, that's why the writing around it is so awkward and janky. it was silly when barristan did and and it was downright idiotic when euron did it. The biggest advantage Harry has is just experience when it comes to using and wielding magic in combat but every Tom Dick and Mary is now matching him both in martial prowess and magical ability, which is as i said before, idiotic. No one in this world has had any sense of logical progression and its just you grabbing different people from the world, magically buffing them enough for them to be a foil with no build up. Its bad.
3/3 c5 InfiniteShadow3
If you cannot take out 50 people, trained or not with your magic you are a disappointment
If you cannot take out 50 people, trained or not with your magic you are a disappointment
2/6 c5 
1LuminouShadowAlt
This whole chapter is Jon this Jon that. Are we sure this not a slash fic.
Ik what you are trying to do, tagging jon to your journey so that you can be canon relevant. But damn you really suck on execution.
1LuminouShadowAltThis whole chapter is Jon this Jon that. Are we sure this not a slash fic.
Ik what you are trying to do, tagging jon to your journey so that you can be canon relevant. But damn you really suck on execution.
2/6 c3 LuminouShadowAlt
The amount of plot power in this chapter lol
First he randomly finds library in backward place in middle age setting which didn't had printing press introduced to it yet. So him finding readily available book in that era, let alone books documenting entire history in chronological manner is wonder to me. Especially in an era where maesters treasure book as if its their life. I am pretty sure any lord worth their salt would have either bought or stole the books if there was any library(which is impossible)
Second he finds all the solutions in the books for eg the dragon glass where they had whole asss episode finding that dragon is a thing that can harm other.
And now this horse, a strong powerful and beautiful horse that isn't already bought by the lords smh
The amount of plot power in this chapter lol
First he randomly finds library in backward place in middle age setting which didn't had printing press introduced to it yet. So him finding readily available book in that era, let alone books documenting entire history in chronological manner is wonder to me. Especially in an era where maesters treasure book as if its their life. I am pretty sure any lord worth their salt would have either bought or stole the books if there was any library(which is impossible)
Second he finds all the solutions in the books for eg the dragon glass where they had whole asss episode finding that dragon is a thing that can harm other.
And now this horse, a strong powerful and beautiful horse that isn't already bought by the lords smh
1/29 c51 Dretnuh
Competent Lancel? What heresy is this? Lmao but fr I need to reread this story to see how that happened. Just picked back up where I left off after months of not reading this fic lol.
Competent Lancel? What heresy is this? Lmao but fr I need to reread this story to see how that happened. Just picked back up where I left off after months of not reading this fic lol.