for Fate: Gamer Night - SE7/15/2016 c4 CrowFX
Goodness. I thought this story is abandoned.
This is already on my subscription from early days, but I am now hopeful the story will go far.
Goodness. I thought this story is abandoned.
This is already on my subscription from early days, but I am now hopeful the story will go far.
7/15/2016 c4 jim anime
You fic is great, but i have a question, why you make Shiro younger? I mean whit the exepcion of Luvia, Rin and Sakura the mostly girls of the canon(Tsukihime, Mahou, Fate, etc) was older than Shiro for a 3 years at least(Tsukihime is the most confuse, but i remember read i year before FSN), so why only Shiro? Why not the rest and have loli and shota?
You fic is great, but i have a question, why you make Shiro younger? I mean whit the exepcion of Luvia, Rin and Sakura the mostly girls of the canon(Tsukihime, Mahou, Fate, etc) was older than Shiro for a 3 years at least(Tsukihime is the most confuse, but i remember read i year before FSN), so why only Shiro? Why not the rest and have loli and shota?
7/15/2016 c4 
5Ander warrior
It took you a long time to update, but the results are impeccable I just hope that the next update will be quicker and that this story will see its end and not be abbandoned, keep up with the good work bye
5Ander warriorIt took you a long time to update, but the results are impeccable I just hope that the next update will be quicker and that this story will see its end and not be abbandoned, keep up with the good work bye
7/15/2016 c4 QuantumZero
Great story please keep it up as you are going and by that I mean slowly and without major timeskips.
Also please explain what titles are in your story as in Gamer you can have only one title active at any given time but you use them as perks which are all active all the time.
Have you considered having him learn a martial art that imitates the movement of the sword or something like that so he can fight without a weapon should the need arise or more effectively with a weapon in case an enemy gets close it is more efficient to use your hands/elbows/knees/legs/head... to injure an oponent and take them down or give yourself enough time to grab your sword.
Also it would be good to have your chapters in similar lenght as right now half your story is chapter 1.
Great story please keep it up as you are going and by that I mean slowly and without major timeskips.
Also please explain what titles are in your story as in Gamer you can have only one title active at any given time but you use them as perks which are all active all the time.
Have you considered having him learn a martial art that imitates the movement of the sword or something like that so he can fight without a weapon should the need arise or more effectively with a weapon in case an enemy gets close it is more efficient to use your hands/elbows/knees/legs/head... to injure an oponent and take them down or give yourself enough time to grab your sword.
Also it would be good to have your chapters in similar lenght as right now half your story is chapter 1.
7/15/2016 c4 eternaldestiny.deathsquad
really interesting, can't wait to see how many woman that shirou will conquer.
really interesting, can't wait to see how many woman that shirou will conquer.
7/15/2016 c4 droffatsstafford
Heeeeeeeeeeey, he's... actually making progress towards bettering his magecraft. It's going to take FOREVER to pay off, but it's there.
Also, that whole thing with [Nerve Circuits] being useful... Damn. That's going to do things.
(The eloquent review for the rest of the chapter, following Charismatic:)
OOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH SHIT. Things just got better... worse for Shirou, better for us readers.
...Oh, shit. Training with Saeko is going to be... interesting.
I'm not entirely sure about Vitality, unless it can only be increased through points.
As for Luck, good decision.
*gasp* I've reviewed every chapter insofar! (...Apparently the proper form is insofar, as opposed to in-so-far. Okay.) Do I get a cookie? :3
See ya next time you update something I read.
-Droffatsstafford
Heeeeeeeeeeey, he's... actually making progress towards bettering his magecraft. It's going to take FOREVER to pay off, but it's there.
Also, that whole thing with [Nerve Circuits] being useful... Damn. That's going to do things.
(The eloquent review for the rest of the chapter, following Charismatic:)
OOOHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH SHIT. Things just got better... worse for Shirou, better for us readers.
...Oh, shit. Training with Saeko is going to be... interesting.
I'm not entirely sure about Vitality, unless it can only be increased through points.
As for Luck, good decision.
*gasp* I've reviewed every chapter insofar! (...Apparently the proper form is insofar, as opposed to in-so-far. Okay.) Do I get a cookie? :3
See ya next time you update something I read.
-Droffatsstafford
7/15/2016 c3 droffatsstafford
[Sense the Unnatural] seems... useful? I'm not certain. It depends on whether you can control the range or not, as far as I'm concerned. I mean... Fuyuki City. Come on. Assuming the maximum level's range is 1000 meters, Shirou would likely be pinged... often. Very often. (I guess it really comes down to whether it would activate from familiar things...)
*[Sense Presence] appears*
...Damn, that's going to be a fairly broken combo. Especially since it tells you the relative position of the presence... Unless [Sense the Unnatural] can also do that, but not in regards to, well, entire areas. I don't know.
...
By the by, what did the 1% after the first level of both new skills mean? Is that there progress towards the maximum level, or something else?
Busujima Saeko is as I remember her... I think. Been a while since I watched HotD.
Hurray! Bonding over lost loved ones!
...Oh man, Victim relationship status... Yep, that's Saeko...
...Actually, I don't have anything else to say until the end.
...Ah, she fights the equivalent of... well, they fit zombie perfectly at lower ranks, and vampires at the higher ones... uh, Dead Apostles. Yeah.
...At least, I think that's what was implied.
ONWARD
[Sense the Unnatural] seems... useful? I'm not certain. It depends on whether you can control the range or not, as far as I'm concerned. I mean... Fuyuki City. Come on. Assuming the maximum level's range is 1000 meters, Shirou would likely be pinged... often. Very often. (I guess it really comes down to whether it would activate from familiar things...)
*[Sense Presence] appears*
...Damn, that's going to be a fairly broken combo. Especially since it tells you the relative position of the presence... Unless [Sense the Unnatural] can also do that, but not in regards to, well, entire areas. I don't know.
...
By the by, what did the 1% after the first level of both new skills mean? Is that there progress towards the maximum level, or something else?
Busujima Saeko is as I remember her... I think. Been a while since I watched HotD.
Hurray! Bonding over lost loved ones!
...Oh man, Victim relationship status... Yep, that's Saeko...
...Actually, I don't have anything else to say until the end.
...Ah, she fights the equivalent of... well, they fit zombie perfectly at lower ranks, and vampires at the higher ones... uh, Dead Apostles. Yeah.
...At least, I think that's what was implied.
ONWARD
7/15/2016 c2 droffatsstafford
I saw three chapters appear in my inbox simultaneously. I didn't care that they were shorter than one chapter combined (according to my standards, at least); I definitely would have woken everyone up if I didn't just get out of my bed.
Seriously, dude. Stories with unusual premises get me hyped.
Anyway, Shirou seems to be enjoying his new-found ability to tell when someone needs help. Useful, considering everything about most Shirous' social skills.
...Okay, I won't lie; I mistook the EXP progress for Shirou's HP. Thought it was a typo, but no... no, I'm just tired.
"...with now 40 points in both STR and DEX..." Uh. That is something completely different from what the actual stats are. It makes it sound like "both STR and DEX are at 40 points" or something similar. Man, numbers in stories can be hard to follow, eh?
Speaking of numbers, I am partial towards always spelling out numbers, but with a story like this, which throws around plenty of numbers that shall only get larger, I think it's acceptable.
...
Right. Anyway, I can't believe Shirou already has, what, 50 CHR as of the end of this chapter? I guess while I'm mentioning CHR, do you know how many CHR points Saber's Charisma... skill...? would translate into? I'm quite curious.
Poor Taiga's little Shirou is growing up so fast, and she doesn't even know why... I'm not sure why I can relate to that, but I do know I can at least understand it.
...damn CHR stat, making Shirou a stupid sexy baka... Really. That's how I'm seeing that. You can't change my mind. It's set.
...The insane leveling of Shirou's swordplay was hilarious... and then Shirou called it out for what it was and I almost fell out of my chair. Good God.
I hope I wasn't the only one who immediately thought they were talking about Taiga when the instructors began discussing a personal teacher. It was just too perfect.
THE EYE OF THE TIGEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEER
...I used to jam out to it a lot, okay?
Poor, poor Taiga... and Shirou, since he'll undoubtedly trigger her flags. (Not that it is a bad thing, of course... :3)
Okay, I've successfully reviewed the chapter without jumping straight into the next one. That's a first, sadly.
I saw three chapters appear in my inbox simultaneously. I didn't care that they were shorter than one chapter combined (according to my standards, at least); I definitely would have woken everyone up if I didn't just get out of my bed.
Seriously, dude. Stories with unusual premises get me hyped.
Anyway, Shirou seems to be enjoying his new-found ability to tell when someone needs help. Useful, considering everything about most Shirous' social skills.
...Okay, I won't lie; I mistook the EXP progress for Shirou's HP. Thought it was a typo, but no... no, I'm just tired.
"...with now 40 points in both STR and DEX..." Uh. That is something completely different from what the actual stats are. It makes it sound like "both STR and DEX are at 40 points" or something similar. Man, numbers in stories can be hard to follow, eh?
Speaking of numbers, I am partial towards always spelling out numbers, but with a story like this, which throws around plenty of numbers that shall only get larger, I think it's acceptable.
...
Right. Anyway, I can't believe Shirou already has, what, 50 CHR as of the end of this chapter? I guess while I'm mentioning CHR, do you know how many CHR points Saber's Charisma... skill...? would translate into? I'm quite curious.
Poor Taiga's little Shirou is growing up so fast, and she doesn't even know why... I'm not sure why I can relate to that, but I do know I can at least understand it.
...damn CHR stat, making Shirou a stupid sexy baka... Really. That's how I'm seeing that. You can't change my mind. It's set.
...The insane leveling of Shirou's swordplay was hilarious... and then Shirou called it out for what it was and I almost fell out of my chair. Good God.
I hope I wasn't the only one who immediately thought they were talking about Taiga when the instructors began discussing a personal teacher. It was just too perfect.
THE EYE OF THE TIGEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEER
...I used to jam out to it a lot, okay?
Poor, poor Taiga... and Shirou, since he'll undoubtedly trigger her flags. (Not that it is a bad thing, of course... :3)
Okay, I've successfully reviewed the chapter without jumping straight into the next one. That's a first, sadly.
7/15/2016 c4 Guest
Shirou x Taiga Shirou x Taiga Shirou x Taiga Shirou x Taiga!
Shirou x Taiga Shirou x Taiga Shirou x Taiga Shirou x Taiga!