for That One Random Day When2/11/2017 c2 
10xXxCrescent MoonxXx
This is definitely interesting! It's truly enjoyable to read the story from Ratchet's POV and I like the fact that it's taking place on Veldin, we rarely see that happening. I truly appreciate the fact that you work hard on narrating every event with the slightest detail as it really makes your writing stand out and helps the story unfold beautifully like movie scenes. Poor Ratchet has a lot to deal with, I felt rather sad when he argued with Clank. I'm sure he knows how much everyone cares about him but I understand why he felt smothered by all this care. Kalvin is an interesting character, quite the troublemaker (that's why Ratchet can keep up with him). The ending made me smile suggestively; Ratchet, you just CAN'T keep yourself away from trouble.
Really looking forward to more. Nicely done!
10xXxCrescent MoonxXxThis is definitely interesting! It's truly enjoyable to read the story from Ratchet's POV and I like the fact that it's taking place on Veldin, we rarely see that happening. I truly appreciate the fact that you work hard on narrating every event with the slightest detail as it really makes your writing stand out and helps the story unfold beautifully like movie scenes. Poor Ratchet has a lot to deal with, I felt rather sad when he argued with Clank. I'm sure he knows how much everyone cares about him but I understand why he felt smothered by all this care. Kalvin is an interesting character, quite the troublemaker (that's why Ratchet can keep up with him). The ending made me smile suggestively; Ratchet, you just CAN'T keep yourself away from trouble.
Really looking forward to more. Nicely done!
9/15/2016 c2 WatsonManSAIYAN
I lile the chaoter captions you started using to introduce the chapter! Yes I know I haven't been to connected in emails but rest assured that I have been working on RealityShift and I will send you the chapter revisions, mate! Am still hoping to beta this one if you would let me!
Oh, and have a feedback.
I lile the chaoter captions you started using to introduce the chapter! Yes I know I haven't been to connected in emails but rest assured that I have been working on RealityShift and I will send you the chapter revisions, mate! Am still hoping to beta this one if you would let me!
Oh, and have a feedback.
9/14/2016 c2 Unknown user
Carmelita Montoya Fox: (Angry) Kalvin, you're just like Tachyon!
Carmelita Montoya Fox: (Angry) Kalvin, you're just like Tachyon!
5/15/2016 c1 3Dagonet Feline
I'm interested in what will happen. You write really nice stories and I really enjoy them. You make the story not seem rushed, unlike mine.
3Dagonet FelineI'm interested in what will happen. You write really nice stories and I really enjoy them. You make the story not seem rushed, unlike mine.
4/23/2016 c1 Omegawatcher
I had I feeling there was a reason I went on today. Figures you posted a new story -I'll be wary for your previous story too. At what time does this take place? There did seem to be what sounded like run on sentences, but a closer read shoved those thoughts away for awhile.
-Omega
I had I feeling there was a reason I went on today. Figures you posted a new story -I'll be wary for your previous story too. At what time does this take place? There did seem to be what sounded like run on sentences, but a closer read shoved those thoughts away for awhile.
-Omega
4/23/2016 c1 2EdwardDunder
When I saw that it was an Obsidian Mind AU, I thought "Obsidian Mind sounds familiar" and low and behold it was a story that I really liked! So gave this a read and I think the start is good and I can't wait to read more!(I also can't wait to read more RealitySHIFT)
Also I did notice a few places that needs a go over like "how the hell was there was MUD on the". Sounds like there are one too many "was" in there.
Anyways keep it up!
2EdwardDunderWhen I saw that it was an Obsidian Mind AU, I thought "Obsidian Mind sounds familiar" and low and behold it was a story that I really liked! So gave this a read and I think the start is good and I can't wait to read more!(I also can't wait to read more RealitySHIFT)
Also I did notice a few places that needs a go over like "how the hell was there was MUD on the". Sounds like there are one too many "was" in there.
Anyways keep it up!
4/23/2016 c1 Guest
haha funny title. Can I see your comics?
haha funny title. Can I see your comics?
4/22/2016 c1 TheQueenOfDiamondsKimy
OMGggggg! You're back after 5 months :) post something for youre other stories! I like this one too, and Ratchet does seem a little mad than he normally is. I'm going to see the movie on March tho, so Ill be late on everything XD
OMGggggg! You're back after 5 months :) post something for youre other stories! I like this one too, and Ratchet does seem a little mad than he normally is. I'm going to see the movie on March tho, so Ill be late on everything XD
4/22/2016 c1 WatsonManSAIYAN
Clever, Exodus. You had actually added the argument into the story. It wasn't the way I had thought, but this sounds way better than planned. I'm following it just because you caught my interest when you added Grimroth. By the way, congrats on your Spektar armor! I myself have the full Desolate set for my Titan and Warlock, but I will not be spending that much money on my female Titan.
Clever, Exodus. You had actually added the argument into the story. It wasn't the way I had thought, but this sounds way better than planned. I'm following it just because you caught my interest when you added Grimroth. By the way, congrats on your Spektar armor! I myself have the full Desolate set for my Titan and Warlock, but I will not be spending that much money on my female Titan.