4/24/2016 c1 15fleets
hey you got around to writing this! hurray! :D
i have some suggestions (i can pm you more if you want, i know some people don't really want a lot of critique) but one minor thing that would make a huge difference is including some break lines? for instance, it was a little confusing/jarring when the scene suddenly switched from Link's POV to Vaati's somewhere in the middle of the text, and it took me a while to wrap my head around the fact that time and place had both changed. (a line somewhere after 'heard Impa screaming' would help big time).

ok, so now that that's out of the way:
your descriptions are fantastic! i really liked how you described ganondorf, the sword, and especially the mask. i could really imagine what the setting and characters looked like, and i didn't have to pull anything from what i already knew about stuff from the games to figure out what you were describing :)
i can't really say much about the plot or characterizations yet since, well, it's only chapter 1 and it takes time for these things to get rolling, but i hope we get to find out more about what's the up up regarding a Vaati-like Link and a Link-like Vaati ;)