
12/1/2017 c2
1Dreamy Blaze
I see potential for a great story but the grammar makes the story hard to read which could turn people away from reading it.

I see potential for a great story but the grammar makes the story hard to read which could turn people away from reading it.
5/25/2016 c1
5lostgamer64
Hi. You can't escape from my watching eye even here! I'll be watching you forever and ever!

Hi. You can't escape from my watching eye even here! I'll be watching you forever and ever!
5/23/2016 c2
2snickering
I like the banter between the characters, especially the Ruby milk comments. You also got Nora's and Ren's interaction down. Keep up the good work!

I like the banter between the characters, especially the Ruby milk comments. You also got Nora's and Ren's interaction down. Keep up the good work!
5/13/2016 c2 Wolfenheart
Good chapter, having Weiss's new spider genes slightly alter her glyphs was a nice touch.
And Ruby being all jealous was cute and funny.
Looking forward to the next update, keep up the good work.
Good chapter, having Weiss's new spider genes slightly alter her glyphs was a nice touch.
And Ruby being all jealous was cute and funny.
Looking forward to the next update, keep up the good work.
5/13/2016 c2 FieldswithFlowers
Welcome back guys. Have to say this story is getting interesting.
For me it’s quite funny you two are making this story. I got a friend who is into yaoi. I’m myself are into yuri. This probably makes no sense right? Give a sec.
A friend of mine loves to read yaoi stories or see arts of such couples. One that he/she has been into lately is Spiderman and Deadpool shipping.
From what I can see, if this story was to become a White Rose story (a shipping that has been growing on me lately) then Ruby can either be:
A)Mary Jane Watson
B)Deadpool
So far Ruby is the only one who appears to be concerned about Weiss and not angry at her for her accidental spider sense fuelled reflex. So if Ruby is to play a major role in this story, she might become MJ. If Ruby gained superpowers she might become Deadpool.
The reason I mentioned Deadpool is due to Wolfenheart. I followed the Deadrose AU and found that each character of RWBY has become a mix of RWBY and Marvel. Ruby Deadpool, Weiss Spiderman, Blake Black Panther and Yang Wolverine.
So by creating a story where White Rose (Ruby/Weiss) is basically Spiderman Deadpool, is like trying to mash one of my favourite fictional yuri couples with my buds favourite fictional yaoi couples. Are you psychic or are you following the fan base with the new comics that stars both Spiderman and Deadpool?
Whether or not Ruby and any other RWBY characters gain Marvel superpowers is up to you guys, however, if you are taking reviewers opinion into consideration please add White Rose into this story (even if it’s a little bit).
Pretty please with cherry and cookies on the top.
Looking forward to the next chapter. See you later and good luck KuletXCole and Battlefield4us.
Welcome back guys. Have to say this story is getting interesting.
For me it’s quite funny you two are making this story. I got a friend who is into yaoi. I’m myself are into yuri. This probably makes no sense right? Give a sec.
A friend of mine loves to read yaoi stories or see arts of such couples. One that he/she has been into lately is Spiderman and Deadpool shipping.
From what I can see, if this story was to become a White Rose story (a shipping that has been growing on me lately) then Ruby can either be:
A)Mary Jane Watson
B)Deadpool
So far Ruby is the only one who appears to be concerned about Weiss and not angry at her for her accidental spider sense fuelled reflex. So if Ruby is to play a major role in this story, she might become MJ. If Ruby gained superpowers she might become Deadpool.
The reason I mentioned Deadpool is due to Wolfenheart. I followed the Deadrose AU and found that each character of RWBY has become a mix of RWBY and Marvel. Ruby Deadpool, Weiss Spiderman, Blake Black Panther and Yang Wolverine.
So by creating a story where White Rose (Ruby/Weiss) is basically Spiderman Deadpool, is like trying to mash one of my favourite fictional yuri couples with my buds favourite fictional yaoi couples. Are you psychic or are you following the fan base with the new comics that stars both Spiderman and Deadpool?
Whether or not Ruby and any other RWBY characters gain Marvel superpowers is up to you guys, however, if you are taking reviewers opinion into consideration please add White Rose into this story (even if it’s a little bit).
Pretty please with cherry and cookies on the top.
Looking forward to the next chapter. See you later and good luck KuletXCole and Battlefield4us.
4/27/2016 c1 Wolfenheart
Yay, Spider-Weiss fic, this should be fairly interesting.
If you plan on giving her a spider suit (how can you not) I suggest the one ocean82802 made for his Deadrose AU. (If you haven't seen it yet, look it up on DeviantArt it's awesome)
Anyway, I’m looking forward to more.
Yay, Spider-Weiss fic, this should be fairly interesting.
If you plan on giving her a spider suit (how can you not) I suggest the one ocean82802 made for his Deadrose AU. (If you haven't seen it yet, look it up on DeviantArt it's awesome)
Anyway, I’m looking forward to more.