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6/17/2016 c3 9YellowMoonFlower
So she did it again, with Gray. :0
Ugh I felt pain in my heart, but I can't symphatize for Jack, as I'm on graire side.
You know, my heart went 'doki doki' with a hope that they'll eventually love each other, with a real love, someday after their wedding :))
6/17/2016 c2 YellowMoonFlower
Omg, I'm a pervert for gray. You did it very well xD
6/17/2016 c4 hobo ghost
omg jack you're such the devilIm so happy how this story turn out. keep up the good work
6/11/2016 c3 Dani
im enjoying this story so far, great job! now im a big jack/pete fan but i don't really mind the treatment he's getting in this story :P i hope hell get his own happy ending though... i hope you're not planning to do the jack x rival for gray cliche. i see it too often, just my 2cents

now, i understood so far gray & claire have no feelings for each other at all? hmm will be interesting to see how their relationship progresses. hope to see more graire soon~
ps i love your portrayal of claire. i don't really read many stories with her as the main. please protect her, don't let her get hurt. im looking at you gray.
5/26/2016 c3 KeepCalmandReview
I'm intrigued to see where you'll be taking this story. Aside from a few typos, I thought the first 3 chapters were amazingly written, interesting plot. I thought you did well with the angst. Although I can't help but feel sorry for Claire, poor girl just wants to be loved. I hope we'll get to see more of her happy side soon

In terms of making this story more light-hearted, I would suggest adding a cheerful character like Ann, or even Karen (I found her events from the game to be the most entertaining), as the main supporting character! Although I thought the part with Cliff from chapter 2 was hilarious :)
5/25/2016 c3 liane
OH MY GOD THIS STORY IS GETTING SO INTERESTING, I need to sit down.
Seriously though! I didn't expect these turn of events! I never would have thought that this would be the reason they got married in the first place! I thought it was the typical pregnancy stuff etc etc

And about Jack and Claire, I'll be honest with you, in the first chapter I found it slightly weird but after this chapter, I find that it makes perfect sense and actually make this story stand out! Keep up the good work! Looking forward to the rest of the story :D
5/25/2016 c2 liane
LOL CLIFF! You poor, poor thing! That was so funny! And yes, please write that lemon, I need to know exactly what happened that night so I can uhh... better understand why they decided to get married! (btw from your description, Gray sounds super yum)

I'm not a writer in any way, but can I just say I just love the flow of your story/language? I'm seriously hooked. Please, please, continue I'd love to read the next chapter! Meanwhile, I'll try to retrieve the password to my old fanfic account xD

(oh btw I think you misspelled Dr Trent/Tim name as Tom xD)

great chapter!
5/25/2016 c1 liane
wow! Great start, Im so looking forward to the rest to the story! And...Can I just tell you how happy I am at the mention of Gray x Popuri here? (sorry Im a major HM64 fan, Kai x Karen forever yo hahaha) Graire is still my number 1 OTP though xD

About Claire falling for her adopted brother, I hope they didn't become a family when she was really young because that would be weird xD just my 2 cents. great chapter overall!
5/24/2016 c3 11Jonaleepuff
Great explanation on why Claire was staying at the inn. It's all coming together now. Love the whole "contract" aspect of it.

I say Jack lost his chance. Time for Gray's chance! Definitely going to be interesting to see how things go between the two! Ahh, the suspense is killing me! Update soon!
5/24/2016 c2 Jonaleepuff
Ooh-things are getting intense. What will Gray do with his newly acquired present? Is Claire pregnant? Let's find out!
5/24/2016 c1 Jonaleepuff
You've got me hooked! Definitely a different aspect of marriage. Can't wait to read more!
5/23/2016 c3 Rona
First, let me thank you for the update and it's also action packed long chapter. You made my day :D And you don't have to thank me for reviewing, this story is so good, reviewing is all I can do to support it. On to the story. Let me be honest with you, usually the idea of love triangle in a story is always annoying me and I often avoid those kind of stories. However, with this story, especially in this chapter, although the Claire x Jack scenes annoy me to death (:p), I couldn't stop reading it. I enjoyed reading it so much that I endured the lovey-dovey scene between Claire and Jack and kept going lol Kudos to you! I just hope the romantic scenes between Jack and Claire will be less, or none at all, in the future and give me lots of Gray x Claire moments instead :D Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter. ps: can't wait for Gray and Claire to make love again... yes please :D
5/21/2016 c3 hobo ghost
really happy for the update, keep up the good work. And here I thought they married because... the kids are coming but that reason also work out, win win solution for them
great plot and awesome story telling, especially the fighting scene... can't wait for the next chapter
5/15/2016 c2 14Mnemah
I am of course looking forward to seeing Jack, but dang it, I'm really falling for Claire and Gray. I hope that they can actually make this experience not bad, but a good one. Maybe they can both grow and become more mature since they experienced this crazy moment of passion together. You also described Gray in such a sexy way when he stood up in the morning sunlight...I'm starting to become more of a Claire and Gray fan by the minute!
5/12/2016 c2 3Pinkstrawbs
Hey! I love your storyline so far! I think it's going to get really interesting! Can't wait for the update.
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