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10/16/2018 c1 
39Omnitrix 12
Good concept here. Lots of writers tend to skim over the paperwork and other t-crossing and i-dotting that comes in with police work (I plead guilty to some degree), but you've managed to tap some new territory here (or at least new to me). Similar for the contemplation on Nick's history and the transition's impact on his past associates. Haven't seen much of that, but it seems pretty important to his character. Also the leg injury (again, guilty). You have a good attention to detail.
Liked the part about Judy getting a better apartment. I have my own sort-of headcanon about that (more head than canon), but I can't see her bearing it long in a dump like Pangolin Arms. She's already a cop, after all, and a person/mammal can only take so much chaos.
There is, admittedly, one flaw that trips me up. In the paragraph where Judy reflects on being a misfit with her family, there's one sentence that feels like it should be two sentences with something in between. Am I reading it wrong, or was that a writing mishap?
By the way, I hear your feedback comes highly recommended - spotting plot holes, for example. Mind taking a look at my stories? I'm always looking for useful input.
39Omnitrix 12Good concept here. Lots of writers tend to skim over the paperwork and other t-crossing and i-dotting that comes in with police work (I plead guilty to some degree), but you've managed to tap some new territory here (or at least new to me). Similar for the contemplation on Nick's history and the transition's impact on his past associates. Haven't seen much of that, but it seems pretty important to his character. Also the leg injury (again, guilty). You have a good attention to detail.
Liked the part about Judy getting a better apartment. I have my own sort-of headcanon about that (more head than canon), but I can't see her bearing it long in a dump like Pangolin Arms. She's already a cop, after all, and a person/mammal can only take so much chaos.
There is, admittedly, one flaw that trips me up. In the paragraph where Judy reflects on being a misfit with her family, there's one sentence that feels like it should be two sentences with something in between. Am I reading it wrong, or was that a writing mishap?
By the way, I hear your feedback comes highly recommended - spotting plot holes, for example. Mind taking a look at my stories? I'm always looking for useful input.
7/31/2017 c1 Medic
Ok, so read this twice. Still just as awesome
Ok, so read this twice. Still just as awesome
4/27/2017 c1 DiaH20
Awwwwww yeeeeeessss. I've just started reading "Always my Sly Bunny, Always my Dumb Fox", when I saw a mention of this one-shot. Let's just say that I am happy that I did check it out :D
Awwwwww yeeeeeessss. I've just started reading "Always my Sly Bunny, Always my Dumb Fox", when I saw a mention of this one-shot. Let's just say that I am happy that I did check it out :D
1/16/2017 c1 Missy 2.0
Awwwww, dumb fox
Awwwww, dumb fox
8/31/2016 c1 26GrandOldPenguin
This was a very good story. I knew it was going to be good when Judy caught Nick adding her contact information to his form from his phone, and it only got better from there. Such a routine thing done upon taking employment was turned into a beautiful story about friendship. I liked the mix of a little humor with the deeper feelings.
The explaining of why Nick had no other suitable contacts was good, especially the idea that Finnick might now feel betrayed. And Judy's changing her emergency contact to Nick was the icing on the carrot cake.
As for the writing itself, this story was generally well written, though I did find some places where a comma instead of a period should have been used after dialogue (for example, after "Here, add this to your pile"). A "to" is missing in "Judy's thoughts returned Finnick." Since both Bonnie and Stu Hopps own the farm, "parent's farm" should be "parents' farm." Lastly, the title is good, but it should be capitalized as "In the Event of an Emergency." I often skip stories that have titles that aren't correctly capitalized, as it is often a sign of sloppy, inexperienced writing. I almost missed reading this entertaining fic!
Overall, I give "In the Event of an Emergency" two paws up, and I hope you will have more "Zootopia" ideas to share with us in the future.
26GrandOldPenguinThis was a very good story. I knew it was going to be good when Judy caught Nick adding her contact information to his form from his phone, and it only got better from there. Such a routine thing done upon taking employment was turned into a beautiful story about friendship. I liked the mix of a little humor with the deeper feelings.
The explaining of why Nick had no other suitable contacts was good, especially the idea that Finnick might now feel betrayed. And Judy's changing her emergency contact to Nick was the icing on the carrot cake.
As for the writing itself, this story was generally well written, though I did find some places where a comma instead of a period should have been used after dialogue (for example, after "Here, add this to your pile"). A "to" is missing in "Judy's thoughts returned Finnick." Since both Bonnie and Stu Hopps own the farm, "parent's farm" should be "parents' farm." Lastly, the title is good, but it should be capitalized as "In the Event of an Emergency." I often skip stories that have titles that aren't correctly capitalized, as it is often a sign of sloppy, inexperienced writing. I almost missed reading this entertaining fic!
Overall, I give "In the Event of an Emergency" two paws up, and I hope you will have more "Zootopia" ideas to share with us in the future.
8/10/2016 c1 Guest123
I love your one shot! It's so cute! Nice story! :D
I love your one shot! It's so cute! Nice story! :D