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5/24/2016 c2 zentraedi
I really like the direction this is going in. It seems to be evolving as i read on. Can't wait for another chapter if so inclined..
5/18/2016 c2 Mel
I love this so much. And I absolutely love Terra! Can't wait for the next one. :)
5/17/2016 c1 Guest
I hope you continue this it's really good so far
5/19/2016 c2 Unaviajante
Takahiro ingenuo jaja no puede evitarlo, es una de sus principales características jajaja, y Usagi le dió un beso! Wow jaja quiero saber cómo sigue .
5/19/2016 c2 deleted2020
Nice story so far! I think mute Misaki is really cute :3 I like your OC, too, and the characters' personalities are pretty well done. I think the first chapter needed a bit more detail, but you seem to have improved on that in chapter two. There are quite a few grammatical errors (switching between past and present tense or missing punctuation) and some sentences could do with being broken down a bit, but it could easily be fixed with a beta. I know you said you don't have one, but you can very easily get one.
Anyway, good work! I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next. :)
5/17/2016 c1 Deeney69
More please
5/17/2016 c1 Mel
Loved this so much!
5/18/2016 c2 cutieass
ahahah usagi u horny rabbit, why don't i feel bad for misaki at all now is a mistery wkwk, oh i must became one of usamis then, i mean they act like heroes in front of takahiro while in fact they're the one that caused misaki's problem and as u said impending doom xd
5/18/2016 c1 keepcalmngalaxy
so he let him go because he wasnt takakashi?
5/17/2016 c1 15AJ Maxima
Hey, you posted! Just read your message in my inbox, but I thought I'd reply via a review and just... review lol So here goes: I don't know know why you were worried about writing in first person. You don't have abundant 'I's floating in every first sentence (this coming from an 'I' abuser *coughs*...). There are slight tense shifts between past and present occasionally and minor typos, but it was still a good read :)

The story is similar to mine yeah, but still has your own twists and those are what make this yours. Plus our writing styles are different. I feel like you're better at what I said earlier compared to me (not so many 'I's), which makes the writing better, and a mute Misaki is SO cute! Is it weird that I find Misaki cuter when he isn't yelling at Usagi-san? :D

I can't wait to read all their interactions. I'm sure it'll be awkward and adorable! As far as the title, I like it. You don't have to change it like you were thinking, unless you absolutely want to, but it's simple and it fits... literally lol And just update when you're able to. Don't worry about how long it takes! We've all got RL to worry about.

Just out of curiosity, what's the longest chapter you've ever written, since you said this was the shortest?

-AJ
5/17/2016 c1 Unaviajante
Me gusta este nuevo comienzo, hasta siento que puede ser más interesante que la misma historia, así que please no te detengas y sigue actualizando :) . Sorprendenos, gracias por escribir 3
5/16/2016 c1 cutieass
thanks to that stupid usagi letting go of misaki's wrist, poor boy fell down on the bed of thorns. oh is that haruhiko who kidnapped misaki?
5/16/2016 c1 4roseybear68
I like the idea it sounds very fun. I have one small comment, do NOT take it the wrong way and im not meaning to offend you in any way, this is your story so do it how you like but, I think you should be a little more descriptive, it all happened a little fast. Sry if this lets you down, ik how much it means when ppl review so pls take my review as a thanks for you story XD

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