for my sonic x adventures12/3/2016 c1 
67White Moon Falcon Ninja
I seriously JUST finished reading all 4 of your stories. These are way too short, and all say pretty much exactly the same thing. On the upside: After reading these, I can almost feel ideas, (and how to do it in similar writing style to yours,) filling my mind. Maybe I should try writing it this next week; with the cold front/storm coming? Oh yeah! How comes that story of yours; the one my storyHart's Heart' challenges the reader to?
67White Moon Falcon NinjaI seriously JUST finished reading all 4 of your stories. These are way too short, and all say pretty much exactly the same thing. On the upside: After reading these, I can almost feel ideas, (and how to do it in similar writing style to yours,) filling my mind. Maybe I should try writing it this next week; with the cold front/storm coming? Oh yeah! How comes that story of yours; the one my storyHart's Heart' challenges the reader to?
8/19/2016 c1 7Arkilos
I'm sorry to say. I'm sure you can do beater than devided sentences.
There is little to no detail. And what does this have to do with Sonic, as far as far as I can tell its a kingdom hearts story (games section).
Let me know when you have proper paragraphs and more detail.
(Ty was a normal kid, he enjoys playing kingdom hearts. He had just in the middle playing the first Laval Destney islands, for the 5th time. And the scene before the storm played. "I can't wait, untill we set sail, it will be great." Kari had said a game Character. However before anything else could happen, the screen glowed brightly. cousing Ty's eyes to sting. As the glowing died down, try uncovered his eyes that where bulging in fright. He could only say "What was that?!" The echoe of a sonic Boom echoed from out side. Cousing Ty to jump out of his bed. Landing on his but on the floor.)
Sorry if I come off as mean, I was simply expecting something than what 5 year old would wright.
7ArkilosI'm sorry to say. I'm sure you can do beater than devided sentences.
There is little to no detail. And what does this have to do with Sonic, as far as far as I can tell its a kingdom hearts story (games section).
Let me know when you have proper paragraphs and more detail.
(Ty was a normal kid, he enjoys playing kingdom hearts. He had just in the middle playing the first Laval Destney islands, for the 5th time. And the scene before the storm played. "I can't wait, untill we set sail, it will be great." Kari had said a game Character. However before anything else could happen, the screen glowed brightly. cousing Ty's eyes to sting. As the glowing died down, try uncovered his eyes that where bulging in fright. He could only say "What was that?!" The echoe of a sonic Boom echoed from out side. Cousing Ty to jump out of his bed. Landing on his but on the floor.)
Sorry if I come off as mean, I was simply expecting something than what 5 year old would wright.