8/3/2017 c8 6King Meezy
I love the references in the past chapters like the one about metal gear solid v as well as tekken, edd ed n eddy, RWBY and well all of them

8/2/2017 c8 2te.nellis
Glorious. Keep it up!

8/2/2017 c8 35KimDWil71
Very good.

7/24/2017 c1 Guest
I love the story could you please update it

7/10/2017 c7 Guest
You said you would keep up to date but it 2017 almost as entire year away from last post

6/26/2017 c6 Guest
Lapis and peridot come on man

6/11/2017 c7 17TheOne16th
I appreciate your response, Corrupted-Amethyst, and that you've taken the time to write it.

Given that your feedback appears intent on initiating an argument more fit for PM, I'd like to say that writing this in the story's review section for everyone else to see is doing us no disservice. For the benefit of the author and of the readers, I am open to apologizing for anything I've misunderstood thus far. However, I will invite anyone reading this to understand that I wouldn't have written my previous review without valid premise, which comes essence to my intention on presenting fair critique.

To begin, in my interests to engage in productive discussion, I'd appreciate if you try to understand why I've written my so-called 'rant' before resorting to calling me an imbecile. Adding an insult to your opening response lessens the weight of this discussion's value, and if this were to continue without just reason, I'm sure both of us would be happy to disengage from this exchange for mutual benefit once I find that you're more intent on insulting me and my remarks than arguing for this story, something you've clearly put an honest effort in beta-ing. Moreover, I've hurled no intentional insult to the story or to the author himself in my initial review, nor did I insult him via PM when we discussed it there. You even went as far as to mention my other review in another story as if you're willing to discard speaking in the context of this fic and of my review so as to personally discredit me. I think it is worth noting that the author of that particular fic thanked me for my review and expressed his interest to clarify Steven's age. Now, if you're to really interested in defending this particular story that you beta-ed as I am to defend my review, we can start with courtesy.

To your first point, which is whether or not my remark concerning switching genders is relevant, I'd argue that it is relevant. You say that it has nothing to do with it without proving why. In this opportunity you've granted, I'd state my reasons and I'd like to see your response so that you can better present this point of yours and offer a rebuttal to mine.

First of all, I posited the gender-switching question in my intent to bring the reader to a different perspective. I assume that, as a reviewer, I'm free to propose different ways to view the story to further elaborate my criticism. How is this practice wrong or irrelevant? And why should I not do that, taking into account that publishing fiction automatically opens it to a subjective scope? And for the gist of the question, the genders, this is porn, porn is all about genders and them fucking. I do not understand why, a very basic element of erotica which is the mingling of genders for the benefit of the sexual enjoyment of our own, is not relevant. I'd encourage you to explain to me why, this prime context in which erotica operates, is irrelevant to mention. Again, I am free, as anyone else is, to position different interpretations of the fic and its context so as to compliment it or criticize it, and the author is free to discuss them to correct me accordingly. And with my interpretation, I hoped to elicit valid questions to the reader: What if genders were switched? What then are we looking at? And what would we think about the story? This is valid to do no more than it is valid to criticize literature/creative writing with different approaches, and I've yet to see a reason otherwise.

For your second point, you say that Steven's being not underage is implied without providing lines to prove the implication, doing you the detriment of asserting your argument without directly backing it up in your narrative. You beta'ed this fic, so proving this should be nothing less of a convenience, I hope. And as I've said to the author, if you're to find any solid implication that Steven is mature and definitely not underage in this fic, my previous review is rendered entirely worthless, with only 'jungle of erotica' to be valid. However, the author himself has not given me a substantial one that can actually be seen in the story, and not in his own statement.

To defend my review, I have three premises that solidify its basis. First, is the summary where it is said that 'Steven starts having wet dreams'. Of what age do people start having wet dreams? Does an adult go through this stage of physical and psychological development? Second is Steven having gone through his first noticed wet dream in the actual story, as a child walking into puberty would. And third which is that Ruby & Sapphire had to teach him about sex, something, as I've said to the author, that Steven appears not to have ever encountered before.

Provide me the lines harboring the implications, explain them while reconciling it with the fact Steven is clearly still new to his pubescence (a fact that considers my three premises), and I will happily concede, apologize for misrepresenting you, the author, and the reader, and take back my words.

Furthermore, I don't see any good reason why you accuse my review to be a complaint and it seems to me that you've mentioned that in hopes to further discredit what I've written. I provided insight to the narrative. I made no direct and intentional insult to the story or the author, nor did I call it names without justification. 'Sick contortion' and 'having one fucked up feature' is the closest that it comes to, and I said this within the territory of my premises. Moreover, I've pitted questions to both the reader and the author and didn't once imply that I was agitated, save for shocked (hence, What the fuck). I even discussed the story and my review with the author politely afterwards, stating why I wrote my review, thanking him for his time and consideration. He had every opportunity to discuss his work with me. Given these reasons, my previous review doesn't appear to be a rant nor was it a complaint. You don't even try prove it as such before calling it that, and you surrender to calling it dumb and me an imbecile all at the same time.

To your next point, the incest part is not the issue that I'm primarily concerned with. It's the underage part, something I am here discussing with you and with the author. But like the author, you say that it's not RL anyway. And on this note, the author, I believe, will do his writing a disfavor if he writes keeping in mind that the fiction is all fake by the end of the day. It implies having no faith in the message of the story, because, why, it isn't real anyway!

This logic, in turn, will cause us to ignore important questions: What real feelings does our writing reinforce? What truth does it hope to reveal? What very much real sensations are we going for when we write this or that kinky line? And what fetishes or other actions are we dissuading from being taboo which we welcome the reader to experience in the freedom of fiction, the fandom and its sub-culture's context, e.g. licking child semen off of fabrics? And with the real effects of our story, what reflection does this bring to the author and the reader? And, though the fiction itself isn't real, what will we say about that reflection?

I read this story start-to-finish. Prove otherwise that I didn't before asserting that I did. I wouldn't have made such a lengthy review if I didn't finish this, nor would have I mentioned the specific parts of Garnet, Rose, Greg, and Connie, which comes in the later part of the fic. You say that I've given up mid-way, and you don't try to prove that too, other than asserting it.

"Got an issue, don't read it." And how will this undermine the points of my previous review or contribute to anything? Criticism has every right to have an issue with this story and not dismiss it. Thinking like this is not conducive to constructive and open-minded attitude.

"It's dumb to complain over something not real..." No more than it is dumb to put so much effort to write, edit, and publish "something not real" for people to read, enjoy, and give their feedback about? What makes my review any more "dumb" or less valid than that? I'd like to know. You've yet to prove why it's complaint, and not analysis or intentional criticism.

"It's not like this'll actually happen" I never accused or assumed that this will happen. It's a wonder why you mentioned this, because that isn't my point and you do me the error of hyperbole. I clarified this to the author. "What real feelings is it reinforcing and in what way is it doing this?" is a better way to present my point, and not "assume that someone, inspired by the story, will act on his pedophilic/incestuous urges", which is something this remark of yours is aiming to answer.

Now, with the reasons I've stated, I can say that I've been misconstrued. You've personally went for my other review on another story. You have branded my narrative as being a complaint/rant without concrete reason, and in turn, you've called me an imbecile, while I've done nothing of the like, not to you, the story, or the author. It appears to me that you're the one with some personal issue, and I wouldn't encourage that for the sake of good-willed discussion.

In closing, I can only hope that your next response will be in good faith, because your prior response doesn't appear to foreshadow it. I'm intent on defending my review as you and the author are to arguing for the story to which you've both worked hard for.

I hope that we continue to engage in this with positive intentions. Thank you again for your time and concern.

Good day.