9/20/2017 c15 nightmaster000
Finally got the chance to check out some of your other stories. And just like your crossover it's a great read. :)

I really enjoyed all the twists in this story.

From the various Hierophants and who they are. Seriously I didn't see the whole plot with Elyon coming.

Another unexpected surprise is Will's father Tony Vandom being not only one of the Hierophants. But also apparently being a centuries if not thousands of years old, and has been a number of infamous people in history.

It really seems that that the girls we're taunting faint with that comment of whats next one of our parents turning out to be like Darth Vader, during the confrontation with Sylva.

Of course that's not the only surprise coming from Will's family tree. It seem's one of the Four Royals Qetesh aka N'ghala the first Oracle is Tony's mother and Will's grandmother. Very excellent touch and twist there, all of this is bound to cause some very interesting family drama.

Speaking of family drama I really enjoyed the plot with Taranee's mother and brother, and what happen to Daniel.

Say by any chance we're those character Daniel recruited inspired by The Pack from Disney's Gargoyles?

I also enjoyed how Will finally tells her mother and Dean Collins the truth about her secret life. And how Cornelia's family find out about Magic as well.

Also on the humor side I think one of my top favorite scenes is the surreal confrontation between Phobos and Cedric.

Phobos: You fucking ate me! That entire scene really made laugh. :)

All together this is another awesome story, and I look forward to seeing how things develop. Though I'll be honest and admit Guardians, Wizards and Kung-Fu fighters is still my top favorite among your stories.

3/8/2017 c8 2Jarkous
Hypothetically speaking: what christmas were they celebrating?
I'm trying to put 2 and 2 together here with 2 being Irma said Iron man with the battle of the MK 1 and the other 2 being Christmas and concloded that they were celebrating christmas '09.

But I might be wrong.

3/3/2017 c3 Guest
Quick question: After reading the abandoned house scene, should I quote Ron Stoppable Or Irma Lair?

2/12/2017 c3 39Oblivian03
Oh, not Aldarn. I liked him as a character. :( That is NOT going to sit well with Caleb, considering the two were best friends (at least I think they were). I will be interested where the plot is taken by this in any case.

And why do I have a suspicion that the Tracker is going to really want to hunt down Drake... It would be interesting if the Tracker was indeed taken down or even a kind of 'I go down, you go down' thing between the two at the end or whatever. Even if there is no happy end; like the one person the Tracker can never really get the upper hand of (even when he does) being Drake and maybe vice versa? Would be an interesting development between the two. Or even the Tracker keeps almost getting him (with nothing Drake can do to stop it) but things keep coming up. Or Drake going up to the Tracker (because whatever reason he doesn't want to be hunted/just wants to get it over with/whatever) and the Tracker being furious that he took the fun out of the hunt. That would be a bit of fun. I'll just have to read the rest of what you've written though.

In any case, I was smiling at this when reading Irma and Cornelia and their dialogue in the beginning. Then people started dying (congratulations, by the way, for nailing a realistic idea of what would happen in a mall attack - they can't save everyone, but they can try and still succeed with some even if they get hurt - and that they can get hurt; an interesting line to follow this for sure and maybe possible foreshadowing?). And poor Vathek - despite everything that was happening (brilliant description of the monster by the war) it made me laugh about the line about him kind of complaining/getting frustrated over everyone escaping. His thoughts after Aldarn's death were good too; well written and heartbreaking and showcasing of Cedric's cruelty. As for Phobos; he does come across as broken in your writing. Whether he stays broken, however, will remain to be seen. ;) The industrialisation angle is interesting too. Sure it can be helpful, but at the same time why fix what is not broken? In ay case, it makes sense considering Elyon grew up in Earth which has been industrialised so Meridian as it stands would feel like a step back for her. Still, I would love to see the people not wanting to industrialise (most things; some things maybe like hospitals, etc.) but I shall see where you've taken this in any case.

Sorry for the long wait for a review - I'll probably be reading your chapters sporadically throughout the year (so you can look forward to some unexpected reviews at unexpected times in your inbox) although I will certainly keep reading this for now, if not right at this very moment. :)

12/6/2016 c13 6Rain on Roses
Well, this was a whirlwind of a chapter. I definitely loved the parts with Nerissa, and how her views have started to change. I also liked the bit with both Julian and Cassidy as the cartoon gave us some hints to suggest this isn't far off from the truth. Julian's funeral was very well written, and I loved the setting. The Elyon arc...hmm. This definitely explains her actions as of late. I like the Cornelia/Elyon twist as well. I'm still coming to terms with Elyon acting this way, but it fits well within your story.
Thank you for this wonderful update.

11/21/2016 c2 39Oblivian03
I love the beginning of this. It is great writing. I loved the different perspectives of the villains you had here (And as not one big on romance on any typical day, gods you make Cedric and Miranda creepy, which suits your story totally fine - my congratulations on that ;) Probably the funniest line to me (out of context of the story) was 'Raythor after he realised I was better than big brother...'

But back in context, it really fits well with the rest of that section on Elyon (although, gees, I want to slap some good sense into her - or at least by the end of this story I think I will. Not an idiot indeed... -_- True, she has learnt a very valuable lesson in not being naive and not trusting every person who smiles at her [especially given how powerful she is and her position in everything], and she has been through a lot, but gees... Just not a good way to be going about things *sighs* trust is a two way street - eventually, if she can't trust her people, their trust in her is going to grow less and less, especially if they perceive it as her thinking she is above them or hiding things from them). I like the change in her attitude towards her adoptive parents, although at the moment she sounds almost borderline Nerissa, like one wrong gust of wind and she'll be blown into that 'willing to use force to achieve good goals' department. Not sure if that's what you intended, but it will make for an interesting story.

Also don't think I mentioned this before - I LOVED how you have written Phobos. His section was probably my favourite. :) It's good that you've explored Caleb's doubts about his morality regarding his parentage (similar, but different to my own interpretation of the consequences of that revelation). The way you write his and Julian's relationship is good too (and in such contrast having followed Elyon's own now very estranged one with her adoptive parents). And I can't wait to see what this gift for Cornelia is and how you write her interactions with Caleb! :D Julian's dialogue at the end of that section was spectacular.

Finally, a brilliant perspective piece from the Tracker to end things with this chapter (and I look forward to any eventual meeting with Drake; as unlikely as it is, I can see Drake always winning against the Tracker which in turn infuriates him to no end... like the one blight on the immortal's record ;) I loved his attachment to his hat (a bit like a very evil and demonic and very into hunting Indiana Jones) :D You always managed to capture the suspense at the end very well (and that voice there always gives me the shivers). And the quote was a good one to choose - suits this chapter. :)

Anyway, great chapter and great writing and I can see heartbreak in the future. ;) You capture the effects of everything on them pretty well (if a tad more dramatic than what is in my head ;) And look forward to seeing more of the Tracker (and Sleepy Hollow reference? *excitedly* Where? Where? Now I have to go back and reread it...) In any case, my next review (and reading of the next chapter) may be in a bit - I do apologise for the time it is taking me to read this, but slowly slowly I'll get there. I promise. (and hopefully you'll trust my promise more than Elyon would ;)

11/4/2016 c1 39Oblivian03
So, I finally got on to reading this. I won't read a chapter every day, but over the next weeks you can expect more reviews (assuming I stick with it, which I should given how well it is written ;) Anyway, onto this chapter...

First up, before I forget, I'll just say I loved how you wrote Collins. That little funny moment at the beginning was perfect. :) Lillian's comment in the car was gold too! :D I loved this as a starting chapter in general. The way you write them all is good (although I particularly love Irma, Collins, Cornelia and Hay Lin). The ending though, that really sealed the deal for this chapter for me. ;) Just the right amount of suspense to hook me in for however many more of these long chapters you will write (and have written). And I agree with Raphael - it is careless for them to use their powers for such things, a fact I am sure you will probably exploit as the author of this fan fiction. I also love (and agree) with how you have developed the girl's characters from season 2. :) And I cannot wait until Caleb comes into it (although from skimming this you are going to evidently end up breaking my heart with him I think...) and his interactions with Cornelia! :D I look forward to your development of Haylin and Irma too. :)

In any case, I look forward to reading more when I get around to it (slowly, slowly - after all is it not better to savour a good thing than to consume it all rapidly in one go? ;) Great writing.

8/29/2016 c7 24Cassandra Starflower
I like this story! Can't wait to see how it turns out.