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8/19/2020 c1 25stevem1
This is excellent. I’ve always wondered why some write of Harry ‘forgiving’ the Dursleys. Harry might because he’s a hero/saint sometimes. Others around him wouldn’t.
12/16/2019 c1 rowenasheir
So Crookshanks, the cat Harry terrified when learning to ride a broom at 1 year old!
7/21/2016 c1 Fallow53
xxx Kudos xxx : )
6/26/2016 c1 7V. L. Crawford
Couldn't have happened to a nicer guy. Good JOB!
6/25/2016 c1 HP fan
A great idea, but you used a lot of exclamation points. In general, narrative sentences should rarely be capitalized, and dialogue only when somebody is shouting or something similar. For a fic your length and your topic, I would suggest no more than 3 or 4, max.
6/18/2016 c1 28GuidingHand
I like the concept, the characters and the story. You used good visualizations. It is evident though that English isn't your first language due to some of the sentence structures. For instance, you have, "from him his behind" it should be, "from behind him." From his behind implies a noise and smell coming from a certain area, where as from behind him means there is something making a noise behind him. I can't claim I'd do nearly as well as you did if I tried to write something in Spanish, so I'll just say, excellent story!
6/16/2016 c1 18Harmonious Cannons
The Hound of Baskervilles...blimey! A story that has a free Sirius, and him avenging his pup would always be my favourite. That said though, I am still attempting to drown out the image of Vernon Dursley lusting after anyone at all with a phosphorous-clad Padfoot.
Kudos, The 94th River II!
6/15/2016 c1 Forest Edyne
Priceless! I almost fell out of bed laughing can barely see the words on my phone.
6/14/2016 c1 Guest
Absolutely satisfying.. Well done
6/14/2016 c1 James Birdsong
Beautiful

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