for The Rift9/20/2016 c1 Guest
Zootopia the biggest subject in all of furry history, many stories with that fox and rabbit having sex and having fucked up little ugly ass children screaming and making nasty gargling noises. Everyone is terrified and the father can't take anymore and shoots the baby and stuffs it in the mail box. What a surprise for the mailman! That mailman is gonna shit himself so damn hard and be like "what the fuck is that?!" and has to get some poor janitor to scrape the mess out of the mailbox and the FBI takes it for "top secret reasons" (probably to make more for unknown sick reasons we can't comprehend) Anyways your idea about shock collars is already been used they even have one about shock collars used for sex where if the prey runs it gets zapped. Find something new. :)
Zootopia the biggest subject in all of furry history, many stories with that fox and rabbit having sex and having fucked up little ugly ass children screaming and making nasty gargling noises. Everyone is terrified and the father can't take anymore and shoots the baby and stuffs it in the mail box. What a surprise for the mailman! That mailman is gonna shit himself so damn hard and be like "what the fuck is that?!" and has to get some poor janitor to scrape the mess out of the mailbox and the FBI takes it for "top secret reasons" (probably to make more for unknown sick reasons we can't comprehend) Anyways your idea about shock collars is already been used they even have one about shock collars used for sex where if the prey runs it gets zapped. Find something new. :)
6/17/2016 c1 
57FlightfootKeyseeker
I've been looking for a Wilde-times/Zootopia crossover! I'm looking forward to seeing Zootopia!Nick run around the Wilde times iteration of the world.
I'm betting that WildeTimes!Judy is responsible for everything, and that she's also the Judy at the end of the chapter.
57FlightfootKeyseekerI've been looking for a Wilde-times/Zootopia crossover! I'm looking forward to seeing Zootopia!Nick run around the Wilde times iteration of the world.
I'm betting that WildeTimes!Judy is responsible for everything, and that she's also the Judy at the end of the chapter.
6/16/2016 c1 tycobros
A lot of grammatical errors and a hustling contests. Some of the lines were not necessary and You don't need to put a break between every scene (in fact, most of the time, breaks are used to change perspective or go into a flashback). Pretty much the idea and the writing in itself is good, for a first draft. Edit these things and you should be golden.
A lot of grammatical errors and a hustling contests. Some of the lines were not necessary and You don't need to put a break between every scene (in fact, most of the time, breaks are used to change perspective or go into a flashback). Pretty much the idea and the writing in itself is good, for a first draft. Edit these things and you should be golden.
6/15/2016 c1 1randomkungfupandafan
Any chance you saw a show called ReBoot? Had some ideas based on it!
1randomkungfupandafanAny chance you saw a show called ReBoot? Had some ideas based on it!
6/14/2016 c1 Itsmario123
Well, well, look who it is! You haven't updated in a while. Either way, great first chapter. And I like the concept of you using the deleted script in this story. Keep it up!
-TGNG
Well, well, look who it is! You haven't updated in a while. Either way, great first chapter. And I like the concept of you using the deleted script in this story. Keep it up!
-TGNG