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1/9 c1 7Devashish Karatolios
Ok, I like the premise of the story, hate that you made Harry Talion and even stole Acharn’s name. Acharn was supposed to be a promise of vengeance for Talion’s son, and was a repurposed broken sword. It has meaning. Harry’s Acharn has no such meaning. I think it would have been better to choose a unique name for the blade, and give Harry the title master of death instead of Gravewalker. Also, the wraith Harry bonded with. I don’t know if you go into more detail later, but it shouldn’t be related to him I think, but whatever. This is just my opinion on your story, which I’m giving now because I feel almost physical pain from reading Harry Potter’s name when he has the abilities of Talion.
7/27/2019 c4 Guest
Pretty sure you said luna was killed but shes still alive after that chpater
1/30/2019 c20 3WhiteElfElder
Nice story so far. While it flowed fast at some points, you still managed to be descriptive instead of acting like a diary entry.
1/30/2019 c14 WhiteElfElder
Well crap, if that staff is broken then Harry has lost the chance to break the curse on his family. I would kill Branka for that.
12/15/2018 c20 drr
personally I thought that that this story was new and intriguing and I liked the way you integrated it.
10/5/2018 c2 Guest
Luna again, gosh it's in every crossover.. whatever, anyway he has a wife, yet it's a leliana pairing? threesome? or harem? damn I'm sick of that theme..
10/5/2018 c1 Guest
so this is an OC story and not harry potter crossover? why post it here?
8/29/2018 c2 koseta.a
Uhm. What... Chapter 1 his name is talion the name Harry is never mentioned. Chapter 2 suddenly the name Harry is being used and he introduces himself as harry
8/28/2018 c20 Guest
I love how the story goes, but I would like to know, will you continue the story of Iron Man or Ghost Rider? is that I'm in suspense to know what's next.
8/24/2018 c20 alphadovah11
Hey why don't you put the original up and just use the content from the old story to make a new one. also if people complain about Harry Potter not being Harry Potter then they should read the J. K. Rowling books not fanfiction. I loved the original and I have some suggestions if its not too late to keep the story as is. First, Harry is Harry when he is with his friends, you had a good start with him an Luna but as the blight begins in earnest you should add in Hermione and Ron or someone else. this is because as I have play all the dragon age games the characters are easy to get to know and its fun to see them in new situations so having them interact with Harry Potter characters is a must to add interest to the story such as having Fred and George play pranks on the always serious Sten. You need to add a little comedic relief but only enough to take away the tension but not take too much away from the story
8/24/2018 c20 Guest
I’m down for whatever just know I’m looking forward to reading it
8/24/2018 c20 4zero02
i liked the harry being in the story without him i be sad...
8/23/2018 c20 7Revan Shan 2077
If you want to rewrite that’s your choice my friend however do me one favor look over your current story again and really think if you want to change it because as it is so far I think it’s great
6/4/2018 c2 margoxterencio
This Hary Potter is not "The Harry PotterI was expecting
I'm kind of disappointed about this... it's more like an OC who looks like Harry but his abilities, storyline, and personality said otherwise
4/27/2018 c1 Zentari2238
...it's not Harry potter. That's my review. It's an OC with the name plastered over him. No personality, appearance or even magic. This shouldn't be in the crossover section and the intro should be changed.
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