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11/30/2016 c6 Black Rune
Here's my major problem of the story: it's not formatted correctly. For example, when you type dialogue from a character, it's like this: ""What?!" she said. But what you're supposed to do is to make a new paragraph with it and do this instead:
""What?!" she said." Then you continue the paragraph. Make new paragraphs when different characters are talking from the one that started this one. The story can be improved, and choose the first thing that goes to your head and improve it. Bye!
10/22/2016 c6 27Oathkeeper0317
Did...my review really sound like that? I'm sorry, that wasn't my intention. It was to comment on the chapter itself...
10/17/2016 c5 Oathkeeper0317
Very cool, keep it up.
8/10/2016 c4 19Branchwing
Sorry to bother you, but this fanfiction is very hard to read. The paragraphs aren't spaced out. I don't know if it was an error in processing, but there should be two spaces between each paragraph. Otherwise, this seems like a decent story so far. Just fix the spacing error, and it'll be good.
8/5/2016 c4 27Oathkeeper0317
And Hatie has joined the Forces of Nature, let's make this easier.
8/5/2016 c4 7PokeMaster Zelda
Shoot. GRAMMAR MISTAKE! SEE IF YOU CAN FIND IT!
8/3/2016 c3 27Oathkeeper0317
Hmm, so Hatie is being recruited by Viridi?
7/25/2016 c2 Oathkeeper0317
Well that's not a very...cheery start to this story.

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