for HP & The Jade Dragon
11/20/2018 c90 SHolmes34
First off let me start by saying that I really have enjoyed the world you have created, the characters and the plot. I very rarely give reviews even though I have read hundreds of fan fictions and i’ve been reading them for at least 10 years. One of the things I search for when I want a new story to read is the is it over 60,000 words and I have read some long stories. The length and the amount of description you put into the story is overbearing and I would say over kill. There is descriptive and allowing the reader to make a picture in their head and then there is telling the reader so many things about the surroundings and the every day of the students that they start to skim the pages for the important details. I’m sure this would have been fine if I started reading your book from the time you posted it but unfortunately it took me a while before I found it and gave it a shot. I unfortunately had to stop reading this story as the long chapters and side stories of the side characters although important took too long to develope and took away from the world you created. My advice if you were to do another story is simply and don’t have so many side story’s that thousands of words to explain. Have smaller discriptions and focus to the point . I know this is just my thoughts but like I said I really did enjoy the world I just wish I could have made myself stay with story.
First off let me start by saying that I really have enjoyed the world you have created, the characters and the plot. I very rarely give reviews even though I have read hundreds of fan fictions and i’ve been reading them for at least 10 years. One of the things I search for when I want a new story to read is the is it over 60,000 words and I have read some long stories. The length and the amount of description you put into the story is overbearing and I would say over kill. There is descriptive and allowing the reader to make a picture in their head and then there is telling the reader so many things about the surroundings and the every day of the students that they start to skim the pages for the important details. I’m sure this would have been fine if I started reading your book from the time you posted it but unfortunately it took me a while before I found it and gave it a shot. I unfortunately had to stop reading this story as the long chapters and side stories of the side characters although important took too long to develope and took away from the world you created. My advice if you were to do another story is simply and don’t have so many side story’s that thousands of words to explain. Have smaller discriptions and focus to the point . I know this is just my thoughts but like I said I really did enjoy the world I just wish I could have made myself stay with story.
1/19/2018 c5 avidreaderomega
What the heck. This makes no freaking sense! Harry should 100% be the heir of Slytherin! Ron freaking Weasley is a total dumband has no Slytherin tendencies whatsoever. I probably will stop reading this just because of that.
What the heck. This makes no freaking sense! Harry should 100% be the heir of Slytherin! Ron freaking Weasley is a total dumband has no Slytherin tendencies whatsoever. I probably will stop reading this just because of that.
1/16/2018 c101 ElderWandWielder
You made my day, I was starting to despair on the lack of updates. But take the time u need and deliver more of this fantastic masterpiece.
You made my day, I was starting to despair on the lack of updates. But take the time u need and deliver more of this fantastic masterpiece.
1/15/2018 c1 Liquidsnake867
Ok look here Craggle! I made an account just so I can leave you a review! Your story IS my antidepressant! I’ve reread it 5 times waiting for a new chapter! Which by the way you ended on a cliffhanger! So tell your dickhead boss to fuck off and lock yourself in a room for a few hours and give us what we want! We’ve been with you for over a million words! This is THE best story on fanfic! And I swear to Hades if you don’t finish it I don't know who you are, I don't know what you want. If you are looking for ransom, I can tell you I don't have money. But what I do have are a very particular set of skills, skills I have acquired over a very long career. Skills that make me a nightmare for people like you. If you finish my story now, that'll be the end of it. I will not look for you, I will not pursue you. But if you don't, I will look for you, I will find you, and I will kill you.
Ok look here Craggle! I made an account just so I can leave you a review! Your story IS my antidepressant! I’ve reread it 5 times waiting for a new chapter! Which by the way you ended on a cliffhanger! So tell your dickhead boss to fuck off and lock yourself in a room for a few hours and give us what we want! We’ve been with you for over a million words! This is THE best story on fanfic! And I swear to Hades if you don’t finish it I don't know who you are, I don't know what you want. If you are looking for ransom, I can tell you I don't have money. But what I do have are a very particular set of skills, skills I have acquired over a very long career. Skills that make me a nightmare for people like you. If you finish my story now, that'll be the end of it. I will not look for you, I will not pursue you. But if you don't, I will look for you, I will find you, and I will kill you.
1/15/2018 c101 Daerwin45
You are evil for this not update lol this is my favorite story please I need my story fix. This a fantastic story and I will never give up on it.
You are evil for this not update lol this is my favorite story please I need my story fix. This a fantastic story and I will never give up on it.
1/15/2018 c101 Lord Inquisitor Kriss
Nice to hear from you, take your time, i personally would rather you not post for several more months than get a sub-par chapter.
Nice to hear from you, take your time, i personally would rather you not post for several more months than get a sub-par chapter.