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2/16/2017 c8 FrankieB
Loved the latest chapter!
12/22/2016 c8 1BlueTigress
Fantastic chapter! merry Christmas and a happy new year to you as Well! Hiatus is torchure
12/22/2016 c8 zannika02
This is amazing
12/21/2016 c8 Guest
lovely. happy holidays to you as well
12/21/2016 c8 gamilton
I love this story! It is giving them a chance to know one another with no outside pressure or interference, no stress except what is self generated by 'thinking too much'!
Maybe Regina will learn to be less of a pessimist and Emma will find her lost hope along with her happiness.
12/21/2016 c7 gamilton
Woah! Great sexy chapter with lots of feels! I love it!
12/21/2016 c8 JMJ050512
Love.. I can't wait for an update and I'm really curious what you have in store for when they get back to stoeybrooke
12/16/2016 c7 8Moonlit Tides
I was right, I knew that first kiss was coming!

I LOVE how happy Emma and Regina are in this chapter and your writing for the scenes on the beach were so beautiful. One of my favourite parts was, "At that time she felt nothing but anger at the beauty of another woman, she hated not being the most beautiful in the room, as she had been almost all her life. Now, was another story though, Emma's beauty actually made her feel more beautiful herself", because I feel like it's SO Regina and it describes the evolution of her feelings for Emma. That in the beginning she was envious of her and viewed her as a threat (not just to her beauty, but to her pride, her life, her son and basically everything she wanted) but that her feelings for Emma have completely transformed. And I don't just mean in terms of romance, but in terms of how Regina feels in herself and how her life has changed for the better due to Emma's influence, which you explored.

It's always been obvious Emma had been nothing but a good influence on Regina, but what I liked about how you explained Regina's change was that even though the motivation to change was sparked by a comment from Emma, it was Regina herself that wanted to change and be better, for her and for Henry.

I LOVED the bikini scene, because yet again you captured that light and jokey side they bring out in each other, whilst also keeping Emma and Regina largely in character with the white and black suits - that's just so them!

A couple of issues I just wanted to pick you up on though, Neil is misspelled and it's actually spelled as Neal. It's only a minor thing but thought I'd point it out to you, because I'm sure if I don't someone else will haha.

The other issue for me with this chapter, is similar to what I mentioned in my previous chapter about the pace of Regina and Emma's romance unfolding. You've managed to have a slow burn, but I guess for me it's STILL not been slow enough and the kiss was too soon. I loved seeing the two of them happy in this chapter and of course a kiss (and whatever comes next hmm) is what I've been waiting for, but it just almost felt too good to be true. They haven't really questioned what's happening between them too much and have just embraced it, which seems strange to me considering they've both just recently lost their boyfriend's who they'd both openly claimed to be the love of their lives, they've never (as far as we're aware) had romantic feelings or relationships with women, so surely there would be more reluctance and confusion? And the fact that their first kiss is immediately so heated and there's tongue involved, leg stroking and then they're heading to the bedroom...it almost undermines the slow burn because that's too fast. I understand that you want to get to the good stuff (haha) for yourself and the readers, and you, as the writer, know best what pace to write at, but I'm just merely sharing how it made me feel. I guess I'm a sucker for a love-story with a slow build-up and lots of angst haha. But I just think Regina and Emma discovering their feelings for each other could be so much more interesting and provide more growth for them as individual characters if it was hard, complicated and they both had to go up against their doubts and fears, and so far there just hasn't been enough of that.

Having said that, I'm as much of a sucker for the intimate stuff as anyone else and I can't WAIT for the next chapter. Maybe the two of them will question what's going on between them more AFTER whatever is about to happen happens? I would like to see that, but of course, you don't have to because it's important for you to stay true to yourself and your story. But I think perhaps this growing attraction has finally exploded and they've got caught up in a moment, but when they've come down from that high they'll begin to panic about what's happened and how much it's going to change everything. I just feel like that fear, denial and reluctance is really the reaction both of them would have.

Anyway, enough of that, thank you so much for writing another great chapter. I'm so glad I re-discovered your story and can't wait for your next chapter! :)
12/16/2016 c6 Moonlit Tides
So I was just browsing through my faves and saw your story and thought "hm, what's this one about?" and then the second I saw which one it was I lost my s*** because I stumbled across your story ages ago and binge read it in practically two days because I loved it so much, but I forgot to follow it so I missed TWO UPDATES AHHH!

First of all, the initial reason as to why I kept reading this story is because of the slow burn. I try where possible to find fics where the characters are in character and the development feels organic and real, and this story does. To have Emma and Regina immediately jump each other's bones and proclaim their undying love for each other would be easy, but it would also make for bad story telling and I love the way you're slowly building upon their relationship with each chapter without undermining Robin or Killian or making Emma or Regina OOC.

Admittedly there have been points where the open physical contact and affection they've showed each other has felt out of place, mostly because I perceive Emma and Regina to both be rather reluctant and afraid of their feelings for one another and uncertain on whether to act on it. But, I understand that the tiny acts such as hand holding are really necessary for building the romance.

I think what I love most is the natural sense of camaraderie and banter that's between them which is very much a part of the way they communicate. Regina's fear of flying and Emma teasing her, Regina digging at Emma for eating too much and not making sense and I particularly loved the whole "Are you gonna eat before it gets cold?" "It's salad, it's already cold" part. It actually brought a smile to my face because I could imagine Emma and Regina having that exact conversation.

I'm eager to see how the rest of their relationship unfolds, because even though I can feel their first kiss being just around the corner, I think there's still a lot of confusion for both of them about exactly what they're feeling. The last line of this chapter really sums that up in one. "What the hell was happening between them?" I think it's important for them to figure that out. I'd be interested to actually see one of them (or both of them) freak out and completely distance themselves from each other as a way to deny what's happening. With the kind of people Emma and Regina are, them admitting their feelings won't come easy. They're both so stubborn and independent, just look how long it took them to admit their feelings for Killian and Robin! And this time it's going to be even worse because it's a completely new thing to them and totally unexpected.

Anyway, I'm just about to go read the next chapter, so I'll share my thoughts on that chapter with you too :)
12/13/2016 c7 8Wynn Rooney
Ugh that chapter was phenomenal. Please continue this story!
12/7/2016 c7 mestela320
Hot Damn...great story so far...very slow burn but worth it...hope the next chapter doesn't take too long.
12/7/2016 c7 11LauratheChef
soooooo look forward to the hot and steamy scene coming next ...

loved this.
12/6/2016 c7 41Sedgie
so hot here !

the beach time is my favorite ('til the next chapter ... XD) !

keep going !
11/12/2016 c6 8Wynn Rooney
Such an unbelievable good story! Please update soon!
11/2/2016 c6 1BlueTigress
Fantastic chapter! Love it how casual they are together! And it was almost a kiss! :)
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