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8/7/2017 c3 45Evowizard25
This is an actually interesting premise with having a an alien race that are apparently in similar terms of thinking and advancement against the Race. The inclusion of a Jedi is interesting and makes me wonder if he'll find any force sensitive Race. I'm not so much familiar with the Shongairi and their series, but I think you did a good job of writing.

However, I have a few pointers. A few times, you had multiple people talk in one paragraph. Never have more then one speaker talk in a paragraph. It's confusing. Also, Line Breaks or putting words in Bold when you transition to another viewpoint would do well.

Overall, an interesting read and I'll track it.

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