for Uncrown Prince6/1/2021 c1 
1Voidborne II
"nobody ask for this shit smh god this turn into dogshit ya know what never mind just unfollow this shit what a fkcing mess this is more dogshit than the GOT ending AOT ending combine nobody ask for this fkcing drama that the writer just forcefully shoving to everyones throat i shouldn't have wasted my fkcing time reading this fkcing hell the regret is pissing me off️️"
"just unfollow the dude i recommend you guys read some other works that is better than this writer"
Here, I sent you back your comments from Fate: In Time. They are perfect for describing this story.
1Voidborne II"nobody ask for this shit smh god this turn into dogshit ya know what never mind just unfollow this shit what a fkcing mess this is more dogshit than the GOT ending AOT ending combine nobody ask for this fkcing drama that the writer just forcefully shoving to everyones throat i shouldn't have wasted my fkcing time reading this fkcing hell the regret is pissing me off️️"
"just unfollow the dude i recommend you guys read some other works that is better than this writer"
Here, I sent you back your comments from Fate: In Time. They are perfect for describing this story.
6/26/2018 c1 Unamused reader
This was a real chore to read, and that is a horrible standpoint for a story, especially fan fiction. I thought this story would be held to a high standard judging from how you flame other authors, but sadly it is not.
I cannot offer a truthful critique because I could not finish the first chapter. I recommend you learn from the authors that you flame. Learn from their use of grammar and punctuation, sentence structure and syntax, metaphors and similes, or just break up the text wall so that your work wont be such a chore to read.
This was a real chore to read, and that is a horrible standpoint for a story, especially fan fiction. I thought this story would be held to a high standard judging from how you flame other authors, but sadly it is not.
I cannot offer a truthful critique because I could not finish the first chapter. I recommend you learn from the authors that you flame. Learn from their use of grammar and punctuation, sentence structure and syntax, metaphors and similes, or just break up the text wall so that your work wont be such a chore to read.
5/19/2017 c1 Guest
This is for Grim24. For you.
Shut up and do it. The section of Persona does not need anyone like you. Persona stories did not tell you to read them.
Go back to your Naruto fic. We all know. Everybody who had read that story, or majority of Naruto fics for that matter, knows they are straightly trash.
Oh! Before you comment on someone's work about their stories being ''pure stupidity'' you should learn how to capitalize letter "I"
"This is my first time writhing (I will correct it for you *Writing*) so please don't flame me." Remember this? You son of hypocrite. You just flame someone's work and you just outrightly said Persona fics are... anyway try reading ADAD. To see that you are completely wrong.
Anyway. I just saw this fic so piece of advice. Use the paragraph, asshole.
This is for Grim24. For you.
Shut up and do it. The section of Persona does not need anyone like you. Persona stories did not tell you to read them.
Go back to your Naruto fic. We all know. Everybody who had read that story, or majority of Naruto fics for that matter, knows they are straightly trash.
Oh! Before you comment on someone's work about their stories being ''pure stupidity'' you should learn how to capitalize letter "I"
"This is my first time writhing (I will correct it for you *Writing*) so please don't flame me." Remember this? You son of hypocrite. You just flame someone's work and you just outrightly said Persona fics are... anyway try reading ADAD. To see that you are completely wrong.
Anyway. I just saw this fic so piece of advice. Use the paragraph, asshole.
8/2/2016 c1 Guest
Speaking of banishment, the very idea that "the council" or all the Konoha higher ups other than the Hokage would prefer to have Naruto banished is also fanon. No-one has ever called for it in the source material, and in Shippuden, Homaru and Kotane are shown attempting to persuade Tsunade to keep Naruto IN the village more, to reduce the risk of him being taken by the Akatsuki, and state that if they had their way, he wouldn't be able to leave at all. Considering that Kiri has a unit devoted to destroying corpses to prevent village secrets from getting out, the concept of banishment as punishment seems rather unlikely to be used in the Naruto world..
Speaking of banishment, the very idea that "the council" or all the Konoha higher ups other than the Hokage would prefer to have Naruto banished is also fanon. No-one has ever called for it in the source material, and in Shippuden, Homaru and Kotane are shown attempting to persuade Tsunade to keep Naruto IN the village more, to reduce the risk of him being taken by the Akatsuki, and state that if they had their way, he wouldn't be able to leave at all. Considering that Kiri has a unit devoted to destroying corpses to prevent village secrets from getting out, the concept of banishment as punishment seems rather unlikely to be used in the Naruto world..
7/25/2016 c1 Anon1
Worst grammar I've seen since "My Immortal."
I HIGHLY recommend that you find a beta.
Worst grammar I've seen since "My Immortal."
I HIGHLY recommend that you find a beta.