for The Legend of Natsu Dragneel8/14/2016 c4 Trewill91
Hey, since natsu knows that igneel is in his body now, could he talk to him? Like a naruto and kurama kind of thing?
Hey, since natsu knows that igneel is in his body now, could he talk to him? Like a naruto and kurama kind of thing?
8/14/2016 c4 
18ramasioti100
Awesome story. I've just recently found Fairy tail and I absolutely love your writing.
18ramasioti100Awesome story. I've just recently found Fairy tail and I absolutely love your writing.
8/9/2016 c3 Guest
Nice work thus far.
I recommend adding Cana and Flare
Nice work thus far.
I recommend adding Cana and Flare
8/10/2016 c3 SpringRolls
A harem could be consisted of only 3 or 4 ladies. I know that you wont care whatever i tell you but i would not approve the idea of having 8 or 9 ladies as it would most likely promote confliction. But the decision's yours. Choose well
A harem could be consisted of only 3 or 4 ladies. I know that you wont care whatever i tell you but i would not approve the idea of having 8 or 9 ladies as it would most likely promote confliction. But the decision's yours. Choose well
8/7/2016 c2 2Seal-Sama
Okay, I like the premise of this story, and while there is a lot to improve on, it is an enjoyable read, and worth reading!
Lets start of with the pace. Chapter 1 started of extremely rough and drafty, but it did the job of portraying the main plot of the story, and all it needed was a detailed dialogue and narrative of Natsu's experiences and emotions throughout his time in the war. Don't take this the wrong way, I did get some feels, but just add a little more detail, and correct the grammer errors.
The pacing of Chapter two is excellent, and I love the fact that you are taking a slow development in the romance with Natsu, Erza and Mira. If there is one request though, If i may, It'll be really awesome if you had Erza offically realize her feelings for Natsu after he defeated Jellal in the Tower of Heaven Arc, and have Mira realize her feelings her feeling at the Lisanna Death Arc. Anyone would admit that these are the best moments for a romance to take sail, and you have the perfect setting to do it.
Secondly, I'd like to highlight your take on the power levels. If you are using the Natsu from the latest chapter of Fairy Tail, you should know, that he had already mastered Dragon Force and achived a level in his Fire Dragon Slayer Magic that will actually enable him to destroy Gildarts, and pretty much everyone until Alverez Arc. So, my request for this, is PLEASE! Please don't let Natsu learn any new magic. I feel that it'll be way more epic if he mastered his Fire Dragon Slaying magic even Further, and developed Techniques that is of his Dragon Slaying Magic only. Like for example, you can make Natsu develop a Lanza Del Relampago like Ulquiorra's from Bleach, except its flame type and a Fire Dragon slayer technique that Natsu created, you can even have him developed shape shifting abillities with his flames. Like for example, creating gigantic flame hands from his magic core that bursts from the ground and crushes(scorches) the enemy in its grip.
So here, in regards to this, I do hope that you have him stick with just Fire Dragon Slayer magic and Lightning Dragon Slaying Magic. And focusing more on constantly reaching a new level throughout the story with these Magic.
And lastly, is your harem. In all honesty, I have absolutely no problem with the Harem at all, I think its perfect!
So with my thoughts said, goodluck on continuing this story and the next chapter. Keep on improving and working hard, and will enjoy your work and provide you with entertaining feedback!
Seal out!
2Seal-SamaOkay, I like the premise of this story, and while there is a lot to improve on, it is an enjoyable read, and worth reading!
Lets start of with the pace. Chapter 1 started of extremely rough and drafty, but it did the job of portraying the main plot of the story, and all it needed was a detailed dialogue and narrative of Natsu's experiences and emotions throughout his time in the war. Don't take this the wrong way, I did get some feels, but just add a little more detail, and correct the grammer errors.
The pacing of Chapter two is excellent, and I love the fact that you are taking a slow development in the romance with Natsu, Erza and Mira. If there is one request though, If i may, It'll be really awesome if you had Erza offically realize her feelings for Natsu after he defeated Jellal in the Tower of Heaven Arc, and have Mira realize her feelings her feeling at the Lisanna Death Arc. Anyone would admit that these are the best moments for a romance to take sail, and you have the perfect setting to do it.
Secondly, I'd like to highlight your take on the power levels. If you are using the Natsu from the latest chapter of Fairy Tail, you should know, that he had already mastered Dragon Force and achived a level in his Fire Dragon Slayer Magic that will actually enable him to destroy Gildarts, and pretty much everyone until Alverez Arc. So, my request for this, is PLEASE! Please don't let Natsu learn any new magic. I feel that it'll be way more epic if he mastered his Fire Dragon Slaying magic even Further, and developed Techniques that is of his Dragon Slaying Magic only. Like for example, you can make Natsu develop a Lanza Del Relampago like Ulquiorra's from Bleach, except its flame type and a Fire Dragon slayer technique that Natsu created, you can even have him developed shape shifting abillities with his flames. Like for example, creating gigantic flame hands from his magic core that bursts from the ground and crushes(scorches) the enemy in its grip.
So here, in regards to this, I do hope that you have him stick with just Fire Dragon Slayer magic and Lightning Dragon Slaying Magic. And focusing more on constantly reaching a new level throughout the story with these Magic.
And lastly, is your harem. In all honesty, I have absolutely no problem with the Harem at all, I think its perfect!
So with my thoughts said, goodluck on continuing this story and the next chapter. Keep on improving and working hard, and will enjoy your work and provide you with entertaining feedback!
Seal out!