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2/5/2020 c1 Starlord Master
Oh yeah.
9/9/2016 c1 2SlowBook
Short, sweet, humorous.

Given the length, it has a good balance of dialogue and exposition. The characters' actions and dialogue are lively and very much within their character. Too bad Peridot failed but there are other chances (maybe).

Only critique would be try to refrain from using fan terms to describe characters in-story. It's a little jarring to read and then see Dorito or Triangle all of a sudden. Fans know about it and will find it funny but if it's not something that other characters would refer or know them as, I don't think it should be used even in exposition.

Those are my thoughts anyways. You're writing is well done so keep at it and keep improving as you go.
9/6/2016 c1 3Lady of the Sky
Rip Peridot
8/1/2016 c1 28NighttimePhilosopher
Typical Amethyst. I loved this oneshot!
7/31/2016 c1 Peritot
"Meanwhile a small Dorito gem in its semi-natural habitat..." I fell off of the couch I was on.
7/30/2016 c1 1BendyOrendi
Garnet: *gives thumbs up*

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