for The Last Straw4/22 c117 Ladytyger
This was amazing, couldn’t stop reading. A little fast paced at times for me, but still really excellent read.
This was amazing, couldn’t stop reading. A little fast paced at times for me, but still really excellent read.
513/16 c19 Jessica01329
it's mentioned on NCIS that his middle name is Farragut, Timothy Farragut McGee.
it's mentioned on NCIS that his middle name is Farragut, Timothy Farragut McGee.
2/27 c60 FluffyMama42
I think that Molly needs to see a Mind Healer. She's just too Delusional not to have something wrong.
I think that Molly needs to see a Mind Healer. She's just too Delusional not to have something wrong.
2/24 c37 FluffyMama42
I don't think that Abby deserves anymore CafPow's. Not the way she's been acting
I don't think that Abby deserves anymore CafPow's. Not the way she's been acting
2/9 c65 akasha24112
great story sp far buti have one small pet peeve geography: hawai could never be a convieniant pitstop between london en dc. burmuda, cuba or canary island sure, but hawai is in the pacific ocean west side usa not the atlantic ocean eastside.
great story sp far buti have one small pet peeve geography: hawai could never be a convieniant pitstop between london en dc. burmuda, cuba or canary island sure, but hawai is in the pacific ocean west side usa not the atlantic ocean eastside.
1/27 c117 Naedine-Daki
I wanted to let you know how much I admire your incredible storytelling. Your work really resonated with me, and I think it would make an outstanding comic. As a commission-based digital artist with experience in comic collaborations, I’d love to discuss bringing your story to life. If you’re interested,
you can reach out to me on Discord: lishafang or Twitter: Pelu_Oficial123
I wanted to let you know how much I admire your incredible storytelling. Your work really resonated with me, and I think it would make an outstanding comic. As a commission-based digital artist with experience in comic collaborations, I’d love to discuss bringing your story to life. If you’re interested,
you can reach out to me on Discord: lishafang or Twitter: Pelu_Oficial123
1/22 c117 Sophiamay
Your story is truly remarkable! I’m a commission-based digital artist with experience collaborating with writers to adapt their stories into comics. I genuinely believe your work would be an amazing comic, and I’d love to discuss that possibility with you. Let’s connect—Discord: danban1247275, Twitter: Mariegrey90.
Your story is truly remarkable! I’m a commission-based digital artist with experience collaborating with writers to adapt their stories into comics. I genuinely believe your work would be an amazing comic, and I’d love to discuss that possibility with you. Let’s connect—Discord: danban1247275, Twitter: Mariegrey90.
1/4 c100 Love2read23
I really like how reassuring the teacher, Mica, is being about Children’s readiness and ability to perform magic. It's really cool that they have special wands that any child can use and it has limits and alerts. This would negating any situation like Neville's mismatch wand. And it's comforting to know the schooling progresses according to the child's pace. I'm sure as a magical facility, they're better able to monitor how the students are doing.
Thank you for writing.
I really like how reassuring the teacher, Mica, is being about Children’s readiness and ability to perform magic. It's really cool that they have special wands that any child can use and it has limits and alerts. This would negating any situation like Neville's mismatch wand. And it's comforting to know the schooling progresses according to the child's pace. I'm sure as a magical facility, they're better able to monitor how the students are doing.
Thank you for writing.
1/3 c98 Love2read23
While reading this chapter and the last, I realized that I should compliment you on the improvement of your writing. In the beginning, quotation marks are randomly placed on narration paragraphs even it's obvious no one is actually speaking, and it's difficult to follow who is speaking to whom even when quotation marks are properly placed. However, that's not the case in recent paragraphs. Punctuation is properly placed.
Great job. Thank you for writing this epic.
While reading this chapter and the last, I realized that I should compliment you on the improvement of your writing. In the beginning, quotation marks are randomly placed on narration paragraphs even it's obvious no one is actually speaking, and it's difficult to follow who is speaking to whom even when quotation marks are properly placed. However, that's not the case in recent paragraphs. Punctuation is properly placed.
Great job. Thank you for writing this epic.
1/2 c87 Love2read23
Okay, but the DNA was also linked to that cold case in New York. So the Petty Officer wasn't the only one Steadman hurt. They need to make sure the New York precinct is informed that they found the killer, and that man that's still running needs to know hus rapist is being tried.
Okay, but the DNA was also linked to that cold case in New York. So the Petty Officer wasn't the only one Steadman hurt. They need to make sure the New York precinct is informed that they found the killer, and that man that's still running needs to know hus rapist is being tried.
1/2 c78 Love2read23
I know paternity leave is abysmal in the US, but Tim should have at least more than 2 weeks. All I could find on the NCIS page was he's allowed 12 weeks unpaid under FMLA. Which they could totally afford and Tim should have taken.
I know paternity leave is abysmal in the US, but Tim should have at least more than 2 weeks. All I could find on the NCIS page was he's allowed 12 weeks unpaid under FMLA. Which they could totally afford and Tim should have taken.
1/2 c76 Love2read23
When I was searching reviews last night, I tried not to read any spoilers but I did see one mention they were sad Tim decided not to have magic, but I disagree.
I applaud his decision. Tim is extremely happy with his life. And the process sounds exceedingly dangerous and extensive with no real promise he won't experience pain. And the end result might mean he can't use computers which is not just his job but his passion. Sure, we as nonmagicals think we'd do anything for magic but giving up our career and our hobbies, nah. And yeah, it'd be nice to know all the magic to defend and protect his family but that would take a lot of schooling and studying when he already has different skill sets to protect him and his loved ones. I like the way Tim and Hadrian communicate. I'm glad Tim took the time to ruminate and investigate before making his choice.
I'm also glad the option is available to children whose magic was bound but it's crazy that the rituals are sex rituals and a teenager would have to perform them with a professional. I'm not sure that'd be legal anywhere. There'd definitely have to be many checks in place so you don't just get perverts agreeing to become ritual specialist just so they can sleep with teens. And that presents the teens who aren't ready to have sex in a difficult position. 'Here you could have the magic that your parents denied you as a child but you'll have to have sex multiple times with this stranger, oh and you can't go to your normal school anymore and you can't post anything about this online, and you can't tell any of your friends, and you might not be able to use any electronics, oh and your parents will probably hate you.' And who all would pay for that? Harry has the money to pay for the specialty warded cell phones but teenagers wouldn't especially if they're disowned for unbinding their magic against their parents' wishes. No wonder Hadrian isn't support that legislation but the one that will outlaw parents choosing to bind children's magic.
One point of clarification: early on when Harry came to US, it was mentioned that the age for magical school was recently changed to six years old so it's not so weird that a child suddenly leaves in third grade. I mean going to mundane kindergarten and then ditching for first is still weird but okay. There was some mention that Tim's magic was bound at 8 because that's what age it was done then but now school starts at 6. But that hasn't been referenced since then and they only talk about school starting at 8 still. Just fyi.
Again, I applaud Tim's decision and that he is happy with his life now and doesn't need to grasp for those what if's.
Thank you!
When I was searching reviews last night, I tried not to read any spoilers but I did see one mention they were sad Tim decided not to have magic, but I disagree.
I applaud his decision. Tim is extremely happy with his life. And the process sounds exceedingly dangerous and extensive with no real promise he won't experience pain. And the end result might mean he can't use computers which is not just his job but his passion. Sure, we as nonmagicals think we'd do anything for magic but giving up our career and our hobbies, nah. And yeah, it'd be nice to know all the magic to defend and protect his family but that would take a lot of schooling and studying when he already has different skill sets to protect him and his loved ones. I like the way Tim and Hadrian communicate. I'm glad Tim took the time to ruminate and investigate before making his choice.
I'm also glad the option is available to children whose magic was bound but it's crazy that the rituals are sex rituals and a teenager would have to perform them with a professional. I'm not sure that'd be legal anywhere. There'd definitely have to be many checks in place so you don't just get perverts agreeing to become ritual specialist just so they can sleep with teens. And that presents the teens who aren't ready to have sex in a difficult position. 'Here you could have the magic that your parents denied you as a child but you'll have to have sex multiple times with this stranger, oh and you can't go to your normal school anymore and you can't post anything about this online, and you can't tell any of your friends, and you might not be able to use any electronics, oh and your parents will probably hate you.' And who all would pay for that? Harry has the money to pay for the specialty warded cell phones but teenagers wouldn't especially if they're disowned for unbinding their magic against their parents' wishes. No wonder Hadrian isn't support that legislation but the one that will outlaw parents choosing to bind children's magic.
One point of clarification: early on when Harry came to US, it was mentioned that the age for magical school was recently changed to six years old so it's not so weird that a child suddenly leaves in third grade. I mean going to mundane kindergarten and then ditching for first is still weird but okay. There was some mention that Tim's magic was bound at 8 because that's what age it was done then but now school starts at 6. But that hasn't been referenced since then and they only talk about school starting at 8 still. Just fyi.
Again, I applaud Tim's decision and that he is happy with his life now and doesn't need to grasp for those what if's.
Thank you!
1/2 c67 Love2read23
I found some inconsistencies and I was trying to search the comments to see if anyone already pointed them out because I don't want to layer on too much criticism if someone already has but man oh man are comments so difficult on this site. Definitely a reason I love AO3 but alas this hasn't been transferred over there yet, and I started reading and got sucked in so I'm here.
Anyways, I really appreciate that Hermione and Ron redid their vows to be more even. Some of them were a bit much but thank goodness Harry and Tim didn't let them be too vindictive.
I think though that in a culture that actively practices magically binding vows, there would be exhaustive lists of vows and their wording and their effects because like with wishes from genies, words can always be misconstrued.
Anyways, I hope Ron and Hermione are doing much better. I really thought Harry was just going to off Ron though. There was a werid skip back in that chapter though. Hermione thought Ron had compulsions or memory charms on since he wasn't upset at all that Ginny had potioned Harry when previously he had been. So that section ends with Hermione casting finite incantatem. I think later Hermione casually mentioned that Percy memory charmed them all to forget Harry's full name (why?) But the only reason that came up before was because for the vow she'd need his real name and it alarmed Harry when she didn't remember it and that's the whole reason he paid his healer to come to the island but then she didn't even use his real name in the vow anyways! And why didn't they have the healer stay to also clear Ron of any outside influences as well? Considering he probably has some as well and even if Hermione cast finite, that doesn't mean she got any memory charms or potions like a healer would be able to see.
Concerning Teddy: Tim told Neville when the Longbottoms were visiting in Hawaii with them, that they did not blood adopt Teddy. Neville had asked if Teddy had any of Harry's magic because Harry's magic does crazy things. And Tim said no, they didn't want to replace Remus and Tonks. But then chapters later it's said that they did blood adopt him but used a special one that only adds on new parents so now Teddy is all four of theirs.
In the case with the BAU and the Parkinsons, it said Pansy was 28 and Harry 27 but then Teddy would be 9 or 10. It hasn't been that many years, right?
I really like all the glimpses into the awesome things Harry's companies are doing. I love that his land is being used to build homes and schools. I wish someone would build starter homes in California. There's definitely a housing crisis.
I absolutely love the pregnancy scare scene. That was so real, especially the let down emotions when it's negative. So well done. I'm really glad they communicated and discussed what they were feeling and how they agreed that they do want more kids soon but not so soon Harry's health would be affected. Thank you.
Currently while I'm reading in chapters 65-67, they're at the Longbottom's for Ellison's christening (which now I think about is probably the wrong term for it because a magically family is definitely not blessing their child to Christ). And Susan is interrogating Tim and basically blames Harry for using Hannah's gossiping nature and Tim is just like, 'So, yeah, he did'. But Neville had asked Harry if that was why Hannah was invited and Harry said, 'Very much no, we just wanted to include your wife so we can keep you as a friend and all those conversations came up'.
In this chapter 67, Hermione said the twins kicked Harry out of the partnership but back then they were still on Harry's side and said, 'we're not backing out, in fact here's your proceeds from our sales' and that was the money they pranked for which Bill was fired over. Were the twins actually mad at Harry?
Man, Ernie is an ass. I kind hope Susan doesn't actually marry him. She's smarter and nicer than him.
Thank you for writing.
I found some inconsistencies and I was trying to search the comments to see if anyone already pointed them out because I don't want to layer on too much criticism if someone already has but man oh man are comments so difficult on this site. Definitely a reason I love AO3 but alas this hasn't been transferred over there yet, and I started reading and got sucked in so I'm here.
Anyways, I really appreciate that Hermione and Ron redid their vows to be more even. Some of them were a bit much but thank goodness Harry and Tim didn't let them be too vindictive.
I think though that in a culture that actively practices magically binding vows, there would be exhaustive lists of vows and their wording and their effects because like with wishes from genies, words can always be misconstrued.
Anyways, I hope Ron and Hermione are doing much better. I really thought Harry was just going to off Ron though. There was a werid skip back in that chapter though. Hermione thought Ron had compulsions or memory charms on since he wasn't upset at all that Ginny had potioned Harry when previously he had been. So that section ends with Hermione casting finite incantatem. I think later Hermione casually mentioned that Percy memory charmed them all to forget Harry's full name (why?) But the only reason that came up before was because for the vow she'd need his real name and it alarmed Harry when she didn't remember it and that's the whole reason he paid his healer to come to the island but then she didn't even use his real name in the vow anyways! And why didn't they have the healer stay to also clear Ron of any outside influences as well? Considering he probably has some as well and even if Hermione cast finite, that doesn't mean she got any memory charms or potions like a healer would be able to see.
Concerning Teddy: Tim told Neville when the Longbottoms were visiting in Hawaii with them, that they did not blood adopt Teddy. Neville had asked if Teddy had any of Harry's magic because Harry's magic does crazy things. And Tim said no, they didn't want to replace Remus and Tonks. But then chapters later it's said that they did blood adopt him but used a special one that only adds on new parents so now Teddy is all four of theirs.
In the case with the BAU and the Parkinsons, it said Pansy was 28 and Harry 27 but then Teddy would be 9 or 10. It hasn't been that many years, right?
I really like all the glimpses into the awesome things Harry's companies are doing. I love that his land is being used to build homes and schools. I wish someone would build starter homes in California. There's definitely a housing crisis.
I absolutely love the pregnancy scare scene. That was so real, especially the let down emotions when it's negative. So well done. I'm really glad they communicated and discussed what they were feeling and how they agreed that they do want more kids soon but not so soon Harry's health would be affected. Thank you.
Currently while I'm reading in chapters 65-67, they're at the Longbottom's for Ellison's christening (which now I think about is probably the wrong term for it because a magically family is definitely not blessing their child to Christ). And Susan is interrogating Tim and basically blames Harry for using Hannah's gossiping nature and Tim is just like, 'So, yeah, he did'. But Neville had asked Harry if that was why Hannah was invited and Harry said, 'Very much no, we just wanted to include your wife so we can keep you as a friend and all those conversations came up'.
In this chapter 67, Hermione said the twins kicked Harry out of the partnership but back then they were still on Harry's side and said, 'we're not backing out, in fact here's your proceeds from our sales' and that was the money they pranked for which Bill was fired over. Were the twins actually mad at Harry?
Man, Ernie is an ass. I kind hope Susan doesn't actually marry him. She's smarter and nicer than him.
Thank you for writing.