for The Fates Want Change3/7/2023 c41 Undeath9087
I will say that you've improved immensely from the start of this (the earlier chapters were a bit strange to go through), so that's the improvement that you saw
As for Lily... honestly, can't say I remember her much, so yeah. I won't mind if she's cut but I also won't mind if she stays
I will say that you've improved immensely from the start of this (the earlier chapters were a bit strange to go through), so that's the improvement that you saw
As for Lily... honestly, can't say I remember her much, so yeah. I won't mind if she's cut but I also won't mind if she stays
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12Phoenix Warehouse Productions
What you saw was your evolution as a writer. That is why the later chapters look better.
12Phoenix Warehouse ProductionsWhat you saw was your evolution as a writer. That is why the later chapters look better.
3/7/2023 c41 1storp930
I loved the idea of lily it was a really interesting take on percy back story however if your going to cut her maybe change her to a child hood best friend so you don't lose everything you put into it
1storp930I loved the idea of lily it was a really interesting take on percy back story however if your going to cut her maybe change her to a child hood best friend so you don't lose everything you put into it
1/27/2023 c7 Ltbutterfly287
Luke doesn't deserve to be here, the idea that anyone could forgive him for everything he did is ridiculous. He caused the deaths of so many campers and tried to destroy the world with Kronos, and the only reason he didn't is cause he realized Kronos planned to kill Annabeth and Thalia as well. You don't get to make choices that you are aware of the resulting actions to and then be forgiven because you got a little guilty. That's like Hitler having a change of heart when Berlin was being taken. Luke may not have killed as many people but if he won then billions would have died.
Luke doesn't deserve to be here, the idea that anyone could forgive him for everything he did is ridiculous. He caused the deaths of so many campers and tried to destroy the world with Kronos, and the only reason he didn't is cause he realized Kronos planned to kill Annabeth and Thalia as well. You don't get to make choices that you are aware of the resulting actions to and then be forgiven because you got a little guilty. That's like Hitler having a change of heart when Berlin was being taken. Luke may not have killed as many people but if he won then billions would have died.
1/26/2023 c5 Ltbutterfly287
Why does everyone make things with Gabe so fucking cringe, people need to stop taking an off hand thought about getting punched and turning that into sexual abuse or extreme abuse. Seriously you need to acknowledge that sally would never have allowed Gabe around Percy or even stuck with him if he was so extreme with Percy. She valued his safety over everything else if she was aware of his abuse she would have sent him to camp and divorced the guy.
Why does everyone make things with Gabe so fucking cringe, people need to stop taking an off hand thought about getting punched and turning that into sexual abuse or extreme abuse. Seriously you need to acknowledge that sally would never have allowed Gabe around Percy or even stuck with him if he was so extreme with Percy. She valued his safety over everything else if she was aware of his abuse she would have sent him to camp and divorced the guy.
9/27/2022 c40 JackieWolfe20
I always thought that the CSS Birmingham was a real ship, now to find out that it is purely fictional... Wow. I was not expecting that. Anyway please update soon, I can't wait to read about percys embarrassment when they find out he got turned into a guinea pig. Hehe :-)
I always thought that the CSS Birmingham was a real ship, now to find out that it is purely fictional... Wow. I was not expecting that. Anyway please update soon, I can't wait to read about percys embarrassment when they find out he got turned into a guinea pig. Hehe :-)
9/23/2022 c31 JackieWolfe20
I never noticed that thing with the eye probably because I could barely keep up with the whole taxi ride whenever I read it.
I never noticed that thing with the eye probably because I could barely keep up with the whole taxi ride whenever I read it.