
8/14/2016 c1 einargs
Hoho! This is perhaps /the/ most engaging first chapter (in a fairy tail fic) that I've read. It does an excellent job of showing without telling, and it seems more than a little original, something that the hints of future character development only enhance. The dialogue also seems realistic, and though I haven't watched much of fairy tail you seem to do a good job of capturing everyone's character. Jeremy is also surprisingly well developed, and it's done in a way that makes his depth immediately obvious, something important for an OC.
All in all an /excellent/ start.
Hoho! This is perhaps /the/ most engaging first chapter (in a fairy tail fic) that I've read. It does an excellent job of showing without telling, and it seems more than a little original, something that the hints of future character development only enhance. The dialogue also seems realistic, and though I haven't watched much of fairy tail you seem to do a good job of capturing everyone's character. Jeremy is also surprisingly well developed, and it's done in a way that makes his depth immediately obvious, something important for an OC.
All in all an /excellent/ start.
8/13/2016 c1 Guest
One word, "AMZING!" Definitely something different from all this Lucy centric stories. I am definitely going to keep myself up to date with this story as well. Like another reviewer stated, can't wait for her to dive into magic and do it in a brutal business way. But this is definitely something new. Keep it up
One word, "AMZING!" Definitely something different from all this Lucy centric stories. I am definitely going to keep myself up to date with this story as well. Like another reviewer stated, can't wait for her to dive into magic and do it in a brutal business way. But this is definitely something new. Keep it up
8/13/2016 c1 arsenicgrace
this is AMAAZZIIIINNGG! your writing is very beautiful! but there's some questions tho, like why is Aquarius less annoyed than usual towards Lucy, and at 14 yrs old? are you going to be slowly incorporating all the Fairy tail mages into her life slowly like this chapter? anyways I can't wait for the next chapter!
this is AMAAZZIIIINNGG! your writing is very beautiful! but there's some questions tho, like why is Aquarius less annoyed than usual towards Lucy, and at 14 yrs old? are you going to be slowly incorporating all the Fairy tail mages into her life slowly like this chapter? anyways I can't wait for the next chapter!
8/13/2016 c1
8The Keeper of Worlds
Okay, this is truly a fun view on things and I really want to see this expand and Lucy gets a thrill for battle like Natsu but does it like a brutal business deal-LOL.
The havoc they'd reckon with her directing that power.

Okay, this is truly a fun view on things and I really want to see this expand and Lucy gets a thrill for battle like Natsu but does it like a brutal business deal-LOL.
The havoc they'd reckon with her directing that power.