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4/8/2019 c1 4ZenRaven
Goddamn, I thought others were over exaggerating about your grammar but damn you proved me wrong. I could not survive after the second para please get a beta reader for yourself.
4/6/2018 c1 Guest
Your grammar is nonexistent. Like reading a story a seven year old wrote. I would forgive you if you were seven.. But my little brother in real life writes a lot better than this it's pathetic seeing what you have here.
10/9/2017 c2 2Lil Author Vert
If anybody new is coming to this story, here's an example of the dialogue. "ahh ichigo you said go to help me" rias said while ichigo rubbed back head. "oh im sorry ris i dint mean to forget: ichigo yelled back.

P.S Yes, that colon is there on purpose.
6/9/2017 c1 Lil Author Vert
You have bad grammar and you're missing many words within your sentences.
9/22/2016 c1 4GREYDRONE70
Holy crap. The grammar in this story is making my head turn. Hey author I think it's WAY BEST that you go over your spelling, I can't make shit out of this. I'll come back once this story makes more sense.
9/15/2016 c1 Guest
Your grammar is shit. Is that a problem how? Well if your grammar skills are shit so will the story be. Dumbass.
8/31/2016 c3 Guest
So Yuzu and Karin are in the harem too? Nice.
9/1/2016 c1 Shattering
...The first K-Rated harem story I have ever seen...and the kind that has DxD in it...wow.
8/31/2016 c3 3PersonaQeminod1
Hope we havea. Bit of more background on what exactly happen in the past and sits for Riser ass whoping from the Crimson Strawberry (name for Ichigo and Rias pairing).
8/31/2016 c1 Gorp2323
Dear god... I-I think I need to take antidepressants after subjecting myself to this...
8/21/2016 c2 Guest
My eyes, They burn! X/\X
8/19/2016 c1 Guest
WHAT THE DICK.

RANDOM OVERCOMPLICATED SHIT.

WORSE,

RANDOM OVERCOMPLICATED SHIT CROSSOVER.
8/18/2016 c1 thread
Please get a beta. It shows that English is not your first language as there are a lot of grammar errors and the sentence structure is not Standard English. I suggest taking up the beta offer
8/18/2016 c1 daisuke
esta interesante
8/18/2016 c1 3Pyrofoxxxx
Grammar...
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