10/18/2016 c3 HonestyBitch
Well now I have to review anonymously because you blocked me haha. Understandable. But I just wanted to say that even though a lot of your description is super extra and honestly annoying to read (specifically of characters and just overuse of adjectives in general) I can tell you're putting significantly more effort into this story. I noticed you got a beta reader. Or maybe you just started crediting them. Either way, something is different. Your OC is still some special little flower that needs to be protected and everyone loves and blah blah blah but honestly I feel like you've grown as a writer. These characters don't feel so self-insert anymore. And believe it or not I can actually give proper constructive criticism if I think the story is worth it. Your last one just could not be fixed. Like holy shit. But here, you're doing an ok job. Keep it up.
Well now I have to review anonymously because you blocked me haha. Understandable. But I just wanted to say that even though a lot of your description is super extra and honestly annoying to read (specifically of characters and just overuse of adjectives in general) I can tell you're putting significantly more effort into this story. I noticed you got a beta reader. Or maybe you just started crediting them. Either way, something is different. Your OC is still some special little flower that needs to be protected and everyone loves and blah blah blah but honestly I feel like you've grown as a writer. These characters don't feel so self-insert anymore. And believe it or not I can actually give proper constructive criticism if I think the story is worth it. Your last one just could not be fixed. Like holy shit. But here, you're doing an ok job. Keep it up.
8/21/2016 c1 KinaSakria
This story is absolutely amazing and really interesting so far. I can't wait to read more, the beginning was super brutal, but really good nonetheless. Keep up the good work and can't wait to see what you write next!
This story is absolutely amazing and really interesting so far. I can't wait to read more, the beginning was super brutal, but really good nonetheless. Keep up the good work and can't wait to see what you write next!
8/19/2016 c1 T. S. Idiot
Oh my goooooooddddddd you didn't have to put me in the description! I feel so special
Oh my goooooooddddddd you didn't have to put me in the description! I feel so special