for Two Heartbeats8/23/2016 c1 
92Tori of Lorien
I thought this was really powerful.
You did a really good job of getting into Thranduil's head, even though there wasn't much detail or full scenes (I thought that was actually really effective for this story!). I love the theme of the heartbeat throughout, both of his and of his wife's, as well as the actual writing of the heartbeat. That I thought was also used effectively here.
And the times you chose to write about were really potent, too, I think. Seeing her for the first time, their marriage, the birth of their children, her death, and even Oropher's death (all of which were either sweet or sad, even without much detail) were really fitting choices as they were important events in his life. I love that Thranduil questions why his heart continues to beat while Oropher's doesn't, and then how he can't hear his wife's anymore (really heartbreaking touches).
Good job! Hope to see more from you! :)
Tori
92Tori of LorienI thought this was really powerful.
You did a really good job of getting into Thranduil's head, even though there wasn't much detail or full scenes (I thought that was actually really effective for this story!). I love the theme of the heartbeat throughout, both of his and of his wife's, as well as the actual writing of the heartbeat. That I thought was also used effectively here.
And the times you chose to write about were really potent, too, I think. Seeing her for the first time, their marriage, the birth of their children, her death, and even Oropher's death (all of which were either sweet or sad, even without much detail) were really fitting choices as they were important events in his life. I love that Thranduil questions why his heart continues to beat while Oropher's doesn't, and then how he can't hear his wife's anymore (really heartbreaking touches).
Good job! Hope to see more from you! :)
Tori