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11/1/2016 c5 Latherial
Good chapter, looking forward to reading the next one.
11/1/2016 c2 12DarkShadowRaven
Well I like everything that Naruto had done until now with this new time. I tried searching for Yui, but found nothing in canon which is a little sad, I would have liked to have at least a background character get a bigger role in this new timeline.

One thing is that eventually the timeline will be so different that events can change dramatically.
11/1/2016 c5 Darthan81
Gotta say I love the story so far. I laughed till I gasped at the prank he pulled on Mizuki, especially when he screamed like a girl. Keep up the good work!
10/31/2016 c5 3BrotherCaptainSheperd
Bahaha! Oh man. That was hilarious. I look forward to the next chapter, which hopefully will be coming soon?
10/31/2016 c1 Guest
I enjoy training fics as long as they don't get redundant and repetitive. So far I am very much enjoying your story.
10/31/2016 c5 naruto
great chapter keep it up
10/31/2016 c5 2Bad Wolf Jen
Honestly you needed to fill this chapter out a bit better. You really needed more charter interactions. I don't care how long a chapter is so long as it flows nicely and this chapter sorry to say was a bit chopie. Things just didn't flow right. And that could have been fixed by slowing things down a bit and adding some dialog between the charters. As for Yui, I'm fine with her leaveing. She did what she needed to do. She helped Naruto grow and she helped him be more accepted in the village. But again things would have went smother if you added a bit of charter interaction in this chapter. Skiping trough Naruto's early years is fine. You just got to make it flow better. And don't worry so much about your word count. So long as things flow right it doesn't matter if your chapter is 5 words or 5 million words. Keep up the good work. I can't wait for your next chapter.
10/31/2016 c5 1davycrockett100
awesome job
10/31/2016 c5 Guam
no it's enough for the childhood story
and u did well...
10/31/2016 c5 3Azaira
Great chapter. Especially the end.
BTW, I liked Yui, even if she had to leave.

Have to wonder about Kushina's chakra chains. Ashura could create a chakra construct like the Susanoo. The Uzumaki are descended from Senju who are descended from Asura. The Uzumaki have physical chakra constructs, just like Asura. Naruto is the transmigration of Asura. I see a definitive relation...

Keep an eye on those pronouns. He/His, She/her, etc. Not entirely sure, but I think you referred to two different people once or twice within a single sentence. That gets confusing. You can use different ways - blond, whiskered kid, etc. - to ensure it doesn't happen. It's fine if they're different genders, but try to avoid referring to two different people with pronouns in a single sentence.

And Naruto's world isn't our world. They don't have Christianity, Hinduism, or any truly prominent religion. The closest thing they have to one is the Sage of the Six Paths(and The Log). Yes, they have couples, but none of the customs we have.

Similarly, I would think they would have consorts, concubines, slaves, and many other variations of having multiple women to a single man. Whether this is because of a clan dieing out, being saved, debt, or whatever else, I don't think it matters much. Royalty, far more often than not, has a Wife and multiple concubines or consorts.

Depending upon circumstances, I would assume this no different in Kohona(I'm not talking about the childish version released for entertainment, but in a realistic setting - despite what Kishi shows us). In fact, I would believe it would be rather common for a male to take multiple females in such a society, simply because Kunoichi would prefer a strong male(when powerful women want a strong man, and wont take no, this would lead to deadly fights - something I'd assume a village wishes to avoid).

I'd also like to point out married women are not in Konoha's military, leading to more insight.

I could probably write a lengthy essay over this for various reasons, but to put simply, I believe it would be more difficult to write your Naruto as only having a single girl, than allowing him two or three. Don't really care either way, but it's something to think about.
10/31/2016 c5 2Phantomsoul2015
Nice job with the mizuki scene hope to see more very sgood on
10/31/2016 c5 shapeshifter340
Great story continue it soon please
10/31/2016 c5 Rebmul
sad to see yui go and I think you screwed it up with not wanting her having her rape his mouth cause it shows she loves him. I'm kinda hoping anko gets in on the romance since I think her and Naruto go together well plus when he removes her seal I think it could help things along. cant wait for kakashi to get rolled should have Naruto thousand years of death him hehehehe and use a recording seal to for blackmail to get him to training on time. I'm hoping sakura goes after sasuke cause really I cant stand Naruto sakura. Id ask for Naruto x mikoto but I don't think that's your style even though he could relate to someone that age.
10/31/2016 c5 frankieu
nice chapter yay for helping the other members of the class and letting some uchiha survive wonder what danzo is planning and if he still has that creepy arm of his
and yea nice prank of the teme :d
10/28/2016 c4 AzureSoulReaper
very nice eagerly awaiting more
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