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12/24/2018 c1 1k+Val-Creative
oh my god my heart hurts,,,,,, I love it
1/3/2017 c1 102Winter Leigh End
I can't decide if I like the repetition you have going on in this flash fiction. It certainly adds an interesting rhythmic quality to it. Though, it's almost a little overdone since it happens in nearly every line and this is so short.

This was an interesting moment to focus in on, I thought. I enjoyed how you have Remus see Sirius's death as just another in a long line of people lost to him. His thoughts on the whispers he hears and how he feels he's a coward, even though everyone he knows would disagree, because he won't go near was an interesting way to end this fic.

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