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12/11/2022 c2 Guest
Come back soon author I'm dying to wait I hadn't had such a beautiful and wonderful story
6/21/2022 c2 An
I wish you continued this, this is exactly the tape of story i was searching for
5/8/2022 c2 Austine Bembem Pena
next po please I really like your story and your imagination of this fanfiction
2/10/2021 c2 creativesm75
7/6/2020 c2 22crazzyredhead
Good story I hope you update soon I love these kind of stories and like to see what you do differently
1/29/2020 c1 MagicIceDragon
Wait shanks must be protective
1/3/2020 c2 8xHalfPrincex
I just found this! I need more of this. Please?
3/22/2019 c1 skyitegaming
Please update soon!
10/24/2018 c2 Guest
Did you die or smthing? Update please
4/24/2018 c2 Anoneme
I love this X’D. The concept is hilarious, and so far it’s very well written. My best suggestion is to not try and rewrite cannon, but cover the main events or moments where their characters shine through. For example, your audience knows Shanks saved Luffy from a Sea King, but that wasn’t as important to include as Luffy getting their hat and being close to Shanks like in the first chapter. That scene never showed up in cannon, but it easily could have ;). Showing new sides to main events like the sake-cups-of-brother(sibling)hood are good choices too. Rewriting cannon may bog down the story and make it less fun to read.

I do really like how most of this has been more or less Luffy’s point of view, even if continuing like that would get kind of difficult. The fact Luffy knows she’s a girl and hasn’t tried to hide it makes the other characters’ reactions easy to find funny.

Though because several people now know Luffy’s a girl, you can also include their reactions to others mistaking her as a boy (I can just imagine Garp trying to convince Sengoku that “No, really. My grandchild is a girl. You need to change her bounty poster or whoever tries to catch her won’t get the... right... pers... never mind. Want a cracker?”). (Or Ace trying to figure out if it’s better no one is trying to hit on his little sister or rage against the marines for being stupid and possibly insulting towards said little sister by mistaking her as a ‘him’... or maybe having a surprisingly in depth conversation with Izo about things like this).

There are a lot of possibilities, and I haven’t actually found many good stories with fem!Luffy-constantly-mistaken-as-a-guy. This has so much potential!
8/27/2017 c2 SickTundra8
NOooooooo, keep going on, chapter! I wanna know what happens...! TT
4/11/2017 c2 Riley baines123
PLEASEEEEEEE update I've spent the last week looking for a good story and I've finally found one (this one duh XD) so if at all possible PLEASEEEEEEEEEE update xx
2/12/2017 c2 OfMoonsAndStars
Good story!
1/6/2017 c2 1yuzukikuran476
please update :)
1/6/2017 c1 yuzukikuran476
Thank you Chibi-Twan for Making this one piece story and i hope that there will be more one piece stories like this one with : smart Luffy? or female luffy? or time travel ? and bringing ace back from dead like resurrection or Harem ? and luffy and ace and other straw hat crew can have more then one devil fruit powers? or luffy born with Gomu Gomu no Mi powers? . anyways please give me a PM and who do you think should romance pair with ace and Luffy and Sabo?. :D
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