for The Yajuu Sannin3/16 c1 prathmesh987654321
you should have made it clear that this fics main character is hinata and not Naruto in your description its heavily hinata focused fanfic and nothing more
you should have made it clear that this fics main character is hinata and not Naruto in your description its heavily hinata focused fanfic and nothing more
3/1 c40 
1Nightwing2013
My new theory on Kitsune: It’s a time loop paradox. Naruto will make a mistake on his Hiraishin seal that causes him to de-age and travel time without Kurama.
Hope you return soon!
1Nightwing2013My new theory on Kitsune: It’s a time loop paradox. Naruto will make a mistake on his Hiraishin seal that causes him to de-age and travel time without Kurama.
Hope you return soon!
1/27 c34 Seguary
This feels like a canon rehash at this point. You can make all the changes you want, but if those changes don’t actually alter the plot, they end up feeling pointless. Let me break this down with a few examples:
1. Hinata - You could replace her with anyone—Ino, Tenten, or even a less competent version of Hinata—and it wouldn’t make a difference. Since the story still follows canon’s major turning points, it doesn’t really matter how capable she is in this version. Her competence doesn’t actually change the plot in a meaningful way.
2. Wave Arc - This was basically a copy-paste of canon. Again, Zabuza nearly got finished off, but Haku still managed to rescue him, just like in the original. Even with the addition of the Byakugan, nothing significant changed. The fight on the bridge, Gato’s defeat—it all unfolded the same way. Haku surviving here could have been an interesting divergence, but since he’s off to Kiri, it feels irrelevant to the current story. And let’s be real, by the time that comes into play (if ever), we’ll probably have lost interest.
3. Forest of Death - Once again, it’s just canon beats all over again. Naruto goes missing, Sasuke gets the curse mark, and then the Sound team shows up, leading to Sasuke activating it. Nothing substantial has changed. Naruto hasn’t figured out a stopgap for the curse mark, nor does he use techniques like Hiraishin to tip the scales. Even with a more competent Hinata, the events play out exactly like canon, and that makes it feel repetitive.
Honestly, I don’t understand why you thought readers would want to go through a retelling of canon with only superficial changes. If I wanted that, I’d just revisit the original manga. What I hoped for was some *major* shake-ups—something that would make me think, “Wow, they’ve really taken this story in a new direction.” But instead, despite all these changes and the characters being more powerful than in canon, the story reads exactly the same.
Where’s the actual divergence? Where’s the creativity that makes me feel like this isn’t just canon with a fresh coat of paint? At every major turning point, it still feels like we’re reading about the canon Team 7, even when they’re clearly not supposed to be the same characters.
This was honestly disappointing. I really wanted to see something different, something bold. Instead, it feels like missed potential.
This feels like a canon rehash at this point. You can make all the changes you want, but if those changes don’t actually alter the plot, they end up feeling pointless. Let me break this down with a few examples:
1. Hinata - You could replace her with anyone—Ino, Tenten, or even a less competent version of Hinata—and it wouldn’t make a difference. Since the story still follows canon’s major turning points, it doesn’t really matter how capable she is in this version. Her competence doesn’t actually change the plot in a meaningful way.
2. Wave Arc - This was basically a copy-paste of canon. Again, Zabuza nearly got finished off, but Haku still managed to rescue him, just like in the original. Even with the addition of the Byakugan, nothing significant changed. The fight on the bridge, Gato’s defeat—it all unfolded the same way. Haku surviving here could have been an interesting divergence, but since he’s off to Kiri, it feels irrelevant to the current story. And let’s be real, by the time that comes into play (if ever), we’ll probably have lost interest.
3. Forest of Death - Once again, it’s just canon beats all over again. Naruto goes missing, Sasuke gets the curse mark, and then the Sound team shows up, leading to Sasuke activating it. Nothing substantial has changed. Naruto hasn’t figured out a stopgap for the curse mark, nor does he use techniques like Hiraishin to tip the scales. Even with a more competent Hinata, the events play out exactly like canon, and that makes it feel repetitive.
Honestly, I don’t understand why you thought readers would want to go through a retelling of canon with only superficial changes. If I wanted that, I’d just revisit the original manga. What I hoped for was some *major* shake-ups—something that would make me think, “Wow, they’ve really taken this story in a new direction.” But instead, despite all these changes and the characters being more powerful than in canon, the story reads exactly the same.
Where’s the actual divergence? Where’s the creativity that makes me feel like this isn’t just canon with a fresh coat of paint? At every major turning point, it still feels like we’re reading about the canon Team 7, even when they’re clearly not supposed to be the same characters.
This was honestly disappointing. I really wanted to see something different, something bold. Instead, it feels like missed potential.
1/28 c49 Pat9921
god dude i really wanna see everyone's reactions. it would be so priceless to watch it.
god dude i really wanna see everyone's reactions. it would be so priceless to watch it.
1/28 c49 Pat9921
why is kankuto here he should be not here as he forfeited in the preliminaries. ao that is some error here
damn the signature techniques DUDE!
awesome chapter.
i hope you come back to this fic why is it always the good ones.
why is kankuto here he should be not here as he forfeited in the preliminaries. ao that is some error here
damn the signature techniques DUDE!
awesome chapter.
i hope you come back to this fic why is it always the good ones.
1/28 c48 Pat9921
sorry couldn't she just plug her ears as rhat eould stop the "genjutsu" here i mean seems ki da convenient that she isn't doing that there has to be something that she can plug her ears with. it's kinda easy yo defeat the auditory genjutsu.
it screams plot convenience to me. i mean she is a smart kunoichi she should be able decipher this much.
sorry couldn't she just plug her ears as rhat eould stop the "genjutsu" here i mean seems ki da convenient that she isn't doing that there has to be something that she can plug her ears with. it's kinda easy yo defeat the auditory genjutsu.
it screams plot convenience to me. i mean she is a smart kunoichi she should be able decipher this much.
12/20/2024 c49 Lampre8
It's thefirst time i reread this after it stopped being updated. It's a pity, it wasa great story and was discontinued ina great moment...
It's thefirst time i reread this after it stopped being updated. It's a pity, it wasa great story and was discontinued ina great moment...
11/15/2024 c49 Dyson700
Hope you come back to this someday. A lot of potential, interesting choices throughout.
Hope you come back to this someday. A lot of potential, interesting choices throughout.
11/3/2024 c7 Animeworld2.0
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Hello, I hope you're doing well!
This is "Fiction Life" YouTube channel, where I share fanfiction stories with an audience that loves listening to them. I recently came across your story and found it so captivating that I would love to share it with my subscribers.
Channel link: FictionLife-zl3oc
With your permission, I would be honored to create a video of your story. I will give full credit to you as the original author in the video description and provide a link back to your original work. Additionally, I will share the video link in the comments of your story so you can see it for yourself.
I genuinely believe your story deserves to reach an even wider audience. Our channel is supported by the community, allowing us to continue spreading great stories like yours to new fans. If you have any suggestions, such as a preferred "What If" title or any other changes you'd like, I'd be more than happy to accommodate them.
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7/1/2024 c5 FlawedBauthor
If you're too stupid to finish a story, don't post it, you brain dead monkey.
If you're too stupid to finish a story, don't post it, you brain dead monkey.
6/28/2024 c49 Sapphire02
Maravilloso!
Planeas continuar alguna vez? Por favor vuelve...
Gracias por la historia
~L~
Maravilloso!
Planeas continuar alguna vez? Por favor vuelve...
Gracias por la historia
~L~
6/7/2024 c30 Guest
Ok, I liked this chapter!
Just one tiny thing I wanted to point out:
It seems that the Autocorrect changed vicious (with evil intent) to viscous (thick and sticky, not runny, like molasses).
Ok, I liked this chapter!
Just one tiny thing I wanted to point out:
It seems that the Autocorrect changed vicious (with evil intent) to viscous (thick and sticky, not runny, like molasses).