for Honour Thy Blood10/18/2016 c4 Half Alien
I enjoy the story very much. I noticed in your AN: that you haven't decided on a pairing yet. However, I always wonder why authors feel they have to do a pairing? When I was in school 14 to 18 there were very few serious couples. I'd say around 90 % of the school if not more were single. I just thought I'd thought that I'd though that out there since you haven't made up your mind yet. Either way I look forward to where this story goes.
I enjoy the story very much. I noticed in your AN: that you haven't decided on a pairing yet. However, I always wonder why authors feel they have to do a pairing? When I was in school 14 to 18 there were very few serious couples. I'd say around 90 % of the school if not more were single. I just thought I'd thought that I'd though that out there since you haven't made up your mind yet. Either way I look forward to where this story goes.
10/18/2016 c4 Almonda
I really this story and how things are developing in it. I am really looking forward to the next chapter.
I really this story and how things are developing in it. I am really looking forward to the next chapter.
10/18/2016 c4 Lethekeres
Great story so far. I like how you brought a character that is dead in canon. As for a relationship that isn't noncanon I'd like to see either Susan or maybe Hannah as a possible thing. Maybe daphne. I usually like a good harmony story but the way this story is going that would be a disaster. Another good one would be luna. Don't see many great stories with her as a partner. Can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work.
Great story so far. I like how you brought a character that is dead in canon. As for a relationship that isn't noncanon I'd like to see either Susan or maybe Hannah as a possible thing. Maybe daphne. I usually like a good harmony story but the way this story is going that would be a disaster. Another good one would be luna. Don't see many great stories with her as a partner. Can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work.
10/17/2016 c4 
10CaskettFan5
I liked the beginning from Sirius' point of view, it struck me as very authentic of how he'd react. However, the fact that plain mail was not blocked left me very disappointed with Sirius. I get the kids obeying Dumbledore's wishes but what is Sirius' excuse? Also, Arcturus should be disappointed (well, I guess more disappointed is better) that Sirius was not trying harder with his godfather duties. He might not take direct, personal action to correct his grandson but he ought to find some way to give him a kick in the butt.
It seems that mostly Harry has traded Dumbledore for Arcturus. Dumbledore may have the more pleasant manner but Arcturus is showing more concern for Harry and helping him more so the trade is pretty good for Harry.
The confrontation between Fudge and Dumbledore seemed off. If Fudge really wants to discredit Dumbledore, he ought to have tried harder to find something in this encounter to pin on him. Dumbledore also rather rudely threw Tonks under the bus to her ultimate boss. She owes Dumbledore a hex. I'm not sure how much you have Amelia involved with the Order. If she is an outsider, she should be very interested in what one of her Aurors was doing with Dumbledore. There may not be a Tonks-Remus pairing in this story if Remus keeps that up. On the other hand, maybe that is how he attracts her attention. ;-)
10CaskettFan5I liked the beginning from Sirius' point of view, it struck me as very authentic of how he'd react. However, the fact that plain mail was not blocked left me very disappointed with Sirius. I get the kids obeying Dumbledore's wishes but what is Sirius' excuse? Also, Arcturus should be disappointed (well, I guess more disappointed is better) that Sirius was not trying harder with his godfather duties. He might not take direct, personal action to correct his grandson but he ought to find some way to give him a kick in the butt.
It seems that mostly Harry has traded Dumbledore for Arcturus. Dumbledore may have the more pleasant manner but Arcturus is showing more concern for Harry and helping him more so the trade is pretty good for Harry.
The confrontation between Fudge and Dumbledore seemed off. If Fudge really wants to discredit Dumbledore, he ought to have tried harder to find something in this encounter to pin on him. Dumbledore also rather rudely threw Tonks under the bus to her ultimate boss. She owes Dumbledore a hex. I'm not sure how much you have Amelia involved with the Order. If she is an outsider, she should be very interested in what one of her Aurors was doing with Dumbledore. There may not be a Tonks-Remus pairing in this story if Remus keeps that up. On the other hand, maybe that is how he attracts her attention. ;-)
10/17/2016 c4 hkurtz2013
love this, especially the short confrontation with dumbles and co. can you have Arcturus kidnap Sirius and bring him back to the house for a lesson?
love this, especially the short confrontation with dumbles and co. can you have Arcturus kidnap Sirius and bring him back to the house for a lesson?
10/9/2016 c3 CaskettFan5
When I write, I always think a chapter should be as long as it needs to be. As a reader, I'll just take whatever I can get. I think you should have broken up that first paragraph, it was a little hard to read. I'd also suggest having different characters speak in separate paragraphs. Having two speak in the same paragraph can sometimes be confusing.
I'm slightly surprised that you had Harry dropping the subject of rejoining his friends so quickly. Harry is a very loyal person (why he could have qualified for Hufflepuff). I can accept it as part of his newfound determination to handle the Voldemort situation though. I don't think you were very fair to Ginny. She would have been like that in first year but by the end of her third, she was beginning to see him as he really was. She was just too confused by her feelings to approach him very much.
I liked how you related the new state of Harry's magic to his new wands. I also like how Harry is learning more about family members that he cannot remember. It's not like have family members you can actually meet but it is much better than nothing.
When I write, I always think a chapter should be as long as it needs to be. As a reader, I'll just take whatever I can get. I think you should have broken up that first paragraph, it was a little hard to read. I'd also suggest having different characters speak in separate paragraphs. Having two speak in the same paragraph can sometimes be confusing.
I'm slightly surprised that you had Harry dropping the subject of rejoining his friends so quickly. Harry is a very loyal person (why he could have qualified for Hufflepuff). I can accept it as part of his newfound determination to handle the Voldemort situation though. I don't think you were very fair to Ginny. She would have been like that in first year but by the end of her third, she was beginning to see him as he really was. She was just too confused by her feelings to approach him very much.
I liked how you related the new state of Harry's magic to his new wands. I also like how Harry is learning more about family members that he cannot remember. It's not like have family members you can actually meet but it is much better than nothing.
10/9/2016 c3 panther73110
Great chapter, can't wait to see what happens when they find out Arcturus is alive. I like the longer chapters
Great chapter, can't wait to see what happens when they find out Arcturus is alive. I like the longer chapters
10/9/2016 c3 hkurtz2013
I like the longer chapters, but as long as the information for the scene feels complete, shorter ones work too
I like the longer chapters, but as long as the information for the scene feels complete, shorter ones work too
9/26/2016 c2 Nightsonge
Excellent story so far. Personally, I've always been a fan of the Harry/Hermione pairing. While there were a few bobbles here and there "Broomstick in third year, half blood prince's potion book in sixth" She's stuck by him through thick and thin. The devotion between the two strongly pointed to such a pairing all through the books, couldn't believe she did a Harry/Ginny pairing, which lends a LOT of credibility to the Fandom potion theory. So many characters and foreshadowing, as well as the plot, all through the first five books, took a massive turnaround with books six and seven. I'm still half convinced those two books were ghost written by someone else.
Excellent story so far. Personally, I've always been a fan of the Harry/Hermione pairing. While there were a few bobbles here and there "Broomstick in third year, half blood prince's potion book in sixth" She's stuck by him through thick and thin. The devotion between the two strongly pointed to such a pairing all through the books, couldn't believe she did a Harry/Ginny pairing, which lends a LOT of credibility to the Fandom potion theory. So many characters and foreshadowing, as well as the plot, all through the first five books, took a massive turnaround with books six and seven. I'm still half convinced those two books were ghost written by someone else.
9/24/2016 c2 CaskettFan5
Did you have Arcturus share a memory belonging to Charlus? That's the only way Harry could have seen some of what he saw. It's sort of odd that a man so dark got so close to a man identified with the light. However, having someone willing to protect your back can make for fast friends.
Did you have Arcturus share a memory belonging to Charlus? That's the only way Harry could have seen some of what he saw. It's sort of odd that a man so dark got so close to a man identified with the light. However, having someone willing to protect your back can make for fast friends.
9/19/2016 c1 10CaskettFan5
Actually you can end up marrying your friend's sister. I know someone who did and they're still married and still friends too. I assume it can get a bit weird at times though. ;-)
This is an interesting premise and the identity of the rescuer did occur to me. It will mess things up a bit for Sirius though as he won't be Lord Black (unless Arcturus did a very thorough job of appearing to be dead). One concern though is that Arcturus was supposedly a blood bigot and a rather dark figure in his own right. He might not be good mentor material for a half-blood even if they are related.
10CaskettFan5Actually you can end up marrying your friend's sister. I know someone who did and they're still married and still friends too. I assume it can get a bit weird at times though. ;-)
This is an interesting premise and the identity of the rescuer did occur to me. It will mess things up a bit for Sirius though as he won't be Lord Black (unless Arcturus did a very thorough job of appearing to be dead). One concern though is that Arcturus was supposedly a blood bigot and a rather dark figure in his own right. He might not be good mentor material for a half-blood even if they are related.