for Harry Finds The Truth1/28/2021 c2 stacyleedam25
Please update this story is so good and can't wait to see what happens next
Please update this story is so good and can't wait to see what happens next
1/24/2019 c1 Lily
There a lot of mistakes in your sentences. Correct them or it will be very difficult to understand the story. Overall, a good attempt but there's room for improvement.
There a lot of mistakes in your sentences. Correct them or it will be very difficult to understand the story. Overall, a good attempt but there's room for improvement.
9/21/2016 c1 Guest
A response to your review at r/12157262/
That you for your Review and i will take it all in. I'm working on it right now and hope fully you will maybe able to read all of it. Thank you for your time and please read it when i have made the changes if you want to. I can let you know when I'm done. Thank you so much I'm so new to this.
A response to your review at r/12157262/
That you for your Review and i will take it all in. I'm working on it right now and hope fully you will maybe able to read all of it. Thank you for your time and please read it when i have made the changes if you want to. I can let you know when I'm done. Thank you so much I'm so new to this.
9/20/2016 c1 Guest
This is obviously a trolling attempt. Pathetic.
This is obviously a trolling attempt. Pathetic.
9/21/2016 c1 
2RavenWolf9212
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I'm sorry for my bad punctuation and grammar and I did proof read it like 8 time. Every time i proof read i was always making changes. but i think one I'm new to fanfiction when it comes to writing it and two is i have a very bad case of a Learning Disabilities. Dyslexia, Dysgraphia, Attention Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder and Attention Deficit Disorder. But i have so many stories in my head, (fanfiction stories and my own stories) but I can not get them from my head to the paper the right way. But i will take any help and thank you. I'm editing my story and taking in what you have said. I hope when I'm done you can reread it, but if not that is ok. Thank you for you time.
2RavenWolf9212A response to your review at r/12157262/
I'm sorry for my bad punctuation and grammar and I did proof read it like 8 time. Every time i proof read i was always making changes. but i think one I'm new to fanfiction when it comes to writing it and two is i have a very bad case of a Learning Disabilities. Dyslexia, Dysgraphia, Attention Deficit Hyperactivity Disorder and Attention Deficit Disorder. But i have so many stories in my head, (fanfiction stories and my own stories) but I can not get them from my head to the paper the right way. But i will take any help and thank you. I'm editing my story and taking in what you have said. I hope when I'm done you can reread it, but if not that is ok. Thank you for you time.
9/20/2016 c1 2booklover 0711
This plot has potential but you need to work on your punctuation and grammar . It would be better if you try and make different paragraphs instead of just clubbing it together. There are lot of places where your sentences don't make sense due to misspelled words or grammatically wrong sentences , maybe you can proof read it before posting.
2booklover 0711This plot has potential but you need to work on your punctuation and grammar . It would be better if you try and make different paragraphs instead of just clubbing it together. There are lot of places where your sentences don't make sense due to misspelled words or grammatically wrong sentences , maybe you can proof read it before posting.
9/20/2016 c1 Mashkai30
This has potential. (The parts I read, anyway) It's very hard to read with its current format, however. The bold type makes it look like giant blocks of solid text. Bold is great for highlighting but doesn't work well in large quantities. Also, each section of dialogue should start a new paragraph which helps to denote a new speaker. As it is, its difficult to tell who is speaking at any given moment. Once the dialogue is split up, it should also be easier to see the places needing punctuation. As it currently stands, most of your periods come after several sentences running together.
This has potential. (The parts I read, anyway) It's very hard to read with its current format, however. The bold type makes it look like giant blocks of solid text. Bold is great for highlighting but doesn't work well in large quantities. Also, each section of dialogue should start a new paragraph which helps to denote a new speaker. As it is, its difficult to tell who is speaking at any given moment. Once the dialogue is split up, it should also be easier to see the places needing punctuation. As it currently stands, most of your periods come after several sentences running together.