for The Blue Eyed Fox Of The Leaf2/26/2020 c1 TurnupGrain43
All I can say is damn a three year old broke his leg then snapped it back to place yah if this story continues it’s definitely going be a very interesting one
All I can say is damn a three year old broke his leg then snapped it back to place yah if this story continues it’s definitely going be a very interesting one
11/9/2019 c1 Borello
interesting idea
interesting idea
4/28/2019 c1 Guest
Why for kami sake dropped even 2 more chapters have been helpful..
Why for kami sake dropped even 2 more chapters have been helpful..
5/31/2017 c1 Guest
PLZ UPDATEE
PLZ UPDATEE
2/25/2017 c1 Guest
Hey this story is great! I hope u continue more of this story!
Hey this story is great! I hope u continue more of this story!
10/2/2016 c1 Velshard
Most time travel stories fail to get things right for not only a believable story in general but also in the initial handling of the story. And while this does seem like a good start it does come off as a bit of an info dump, you would also expect that Naruto and Kurama would do a hell of a lot of planning and thinking in the time allotted to them after their initial temporal transition. But there's none of that here, unless this story turns out to be one where Naruto fucks up his own time line and actually makes things worse for everyone. Otherwise the whole idea of him not bothering to speak with Kurama and mark out a series of important events to monitor and/or manipulate seems pretty damn stupid. You might want to reconsider this initial chapter's flow of events and ask your self if it's really how you want the start of your story to go and how this will affect your story long term.
Also, Kurama seems to have a flawless memory in canon, that is an asset for both you the author and your characters to exploit for the story's benefit.
Most time travel stories fail to get things right for not only a believable story in general but also in the initial handling of the story. And while this does seem like a good start it does come off as a bit of an info dump, you would also expect that Naruto and Kurama would do a hell of a lot of planning and thinking in the time allotted to them after their initial temporal transition. But there's none of that here, unless this story turns out to be one where Naruto fucks up his own time line and actually makes things worse for everyone. Otherwise the whole idea of him not bothering to speak with Kurama and mark out a series of important events to monitor and/or manipulate seems pretty damn stupid. You might want to reconsider this initial chapter's flow of events and ask your self if it's really how you want the start of your story to go and how this will affect your story long term.
Also, Kurama seems to have a flawless memory in canon, that is an asset for both you the author and your characters to exploit for the story's benefit.
9/26/2016 c1 sudhush
Good start of the chapter and all but please dont want naruto with sharingan or Bykugan. if possible a different doujustu like that read eyes from naruto anime. every thing eles is nicely described. Keep up the Great Work man.
Good start of the chapter and all but please dont want naruto with sharingan or Bykugan. if possible a different doujustu like that read eyes from naruto anime. every thing eles is nicely described. Keep up the Great Work man.
9/23/2016 c1 avidnarutofan
Overall, this was a good chapter.
There are some grammar mistakes and omissions of punctuation marks that could help sentence flow better.
The concept for this story, while having been used a fair amount, is still interesting. This is the second time travel fic I have read which has naruto retain his most powerful abilities (that are yet to be unlocked) so I look forward to seeing how you develop naruto.
Please don't make naruto as big of an idiot as he is in cannon. It got really irritating.
Will naruto get the rinnegan?
Cheers.
Overall, this was a good chapter.
There are some grammar mistakes and omissions of punctuation marks that could help sentence flow better.
The concept for this story, while having been used a fair amount, is still interesting. This is the second time travel fic I have read which has naruto retain his most powerful abilities (that are yet to be unlocked) so I look forward to seeing how you develop naruto.
Please don't make naruto as big of an idiot as he is in cannon. It got really irritating.
Will naruto get the rinnegan?
Cheers.
9/22/2016 c1 0DINS0N
If by chance the Kumo nin is alive, Naruto would have changed things for Neji tremendously. Pairing wise I'd be more than happy with the following:
Karin - she doesn't deserve what Sasuke put her through, and she's an Uzumaki!
Fu - similar age to Naruto, she would be a great bonus during the War.
If by chance the Kumo nin is alive, Naruto would have changed things for Neji tremendously. Pairing wise I'd be more than happy with the following:
Karin - she doesn't deserve what Sasuke put her through, and she's an Uzumaki!
Fu - similar age to Naruto, she would be a great bonus during the War.
9/21/2016 c1 Guest
Please don't make this a harem, man
Please don't make this a harem, man