for Death Battle of Legends1/6/2017 c4 Johnathen
this story is amazing OH when you bring up Deadpool be sure to go into detail about the fourth wall explaining it please but I like this idea and I hope it continues
TTFN
this story is amazing OH when you bring up Deadpool be sure to go into detail about the fourth wall explaining it please but I like this idea and I hope it continues
TTFN
1/2/2017 c4 
10DeadAliveManiac
I must say, I very much like this concept. It's pretty ingenious and I'd like to see where it goes. However, there are some things you should work on:
The first quotes in dialogue should not have a space. That's really nitpicky though and an easy fix.
Another nitpicky thing, break up your paragraphs of dialogue, it gets very hard to read and confusing to who is speaking very rapidly.
It seems like you rush while you write this. I struggle with this as well. Take your time and go through with a fine comb and correct any grammatical or spelling errors.
Along with rushing, this moves tremendously fast. Slow it down.
Finally, use your imagination and let as much description and creativity flow. You definitely have shown that with this concept, now let it continue with how you develop it.
Hope this is helpful, I look forward for what the next chapter brings.
10DeadAliveManiacI must say, I very much like this concept. It's pretty ingenious and I'd like to see where it goes. However, there are some things you should work on:
The first quotes in dialogue should not have a space. That's really nitpicky though and an easy fix.
Another nitpicky thing, break up your paragraphs of dialogue, it gets very hard to read and confusing to who is speaking very rapidly.
It seems like you rush while you write this. I struggle with this as well. Take your time and go through with a fine comb and correct any grammatical or spelling errors.
Along with rushing, this moves tremendously fast. Slow it down.
Finally, use your imagination and let as much description and creativity flow. You definitely have shown that with this concept, now let it continue with how you develop it.
Hope this is helpful, I look forward for what the next chapter brings.
12/10/2016 c4 4warrior of six blades
I have to say...about this guy, is an OC, cause he is one seriously powerful OC with one VERY messed up back story. Other than that, this guy is safely in a league of his own and never to be taken lightly.
4warrior of six bladesI have to say...about this guy, is an OC, cause he is one seriously powerful OC with one VERY messed up back story. Other than that, this guy is safely in a league of his own and never to be taken lightly.
12/10/2016 c3 warrior of six blades
Good reasoning on the virtual world to do battle in to avoid actually killing characters for real and allowing them to do another round for future battles.
Good reasoning on the virtual world to do battle in to avoid actually killing characters for real and allowing them to do another round for future battles.
12/10/2016 c3 ZFlame1
sorry to say but RWBY watches death battle was removed because of the assholes known as Critics United
sorry to say but RWBY watches death battle was removed because of the assholes known as Critics United
10/28/2016 c2 warrior of six blades
Glad to see Sora, Riku, and Kairi here...though I'm not sure how well she will do. Regardless, I wonder who the fourth team member will be for them. But kind of disappointed that Cloud and Link aren't there. Regardless, I look forward to seeing how this all plays out.
Glad to see Sora, Riku, and Kairi here...though I'm not sure how well she will do. Regardless, I wonder who the fourth team member will be for them. But kind of disappointed that Cloud and Link aren't there. Regardless, I look forward to seeing how this all plays out.
10/28/2016 c1 warrior of six blades
So that's how the heroes get involved in Death Battle. Nice to see, hope Sora's here as I think he could last a while at least in this tournament. Though I also hope the Death won't be permanent too...
So that's how the heroes get involved in Death Battle. Nice to see, hope Sora's here as I think he could last a while at least in this tournament. Though I also hope the Death won't be permanent too...
9/29/2016 c2 Guest
going great! I have a request. Before you post more chapters in, can you do some background research of the characters before they fight? Because that's one of the important things in Death Battle. Also, after the victor of the fight wins, can you do a results of the fight, but in your own words as well? For the other fighters, they might learn about their competitors (Except Deadpool because we all know he can break the fourth wall and stuff).
going great! I have a request. Before you post more chapters in, can you do some background research of the characters before they fight? Because that's one of the important things in Death Battle. Also, after the victor of the fight wins, can you do a results of the fight, but in your own words as well? For the other fighters, they might learn about their competitors (Except Deadpool because we all know he can break the fourth wall and stuff).
9/28/2016 c2 Guest
Superman solos all. But then there's Gandalf, and Supes doesn't do very well against magic. And of course there's Bat God.
Superman solos all. But then there's Gandalf, and Supes doesn't do very well against magic. And of course there's Bat God.
9/21/2016 c1 Guest
This is grrreat!
This is grrreat!