for The Starchild1/15/2017 c12 
2taylorj2000
Excuse me but I can't read your story because it's mixed up with computer jargon.
Could you sort this out please?
2taylorj2000Excuse me but I can't read your story because it's mixed up with computer jargon.
Could you sort this out please?
1/15/2017 c12 101Eraman
I think something went wrong when you uploaded this :S It's impossible to read wih all strange numbers and stuff amongst your writing.
101EramanI think something went wrong when you uploaded this :S It's impossible to read wih all strange numbers and stuff amongst your writing.
1/14/2017 c12 allison 200
what is it
what is it
12/12/2016 c1 Allison 200
When you going to continue the story
When you going to continue the story
11/22/2016 c11 91Madilayn
You have written a really interesting story and it moves along nicely. Nice characterisations as well - similar but different enough that they aren't TOO familiar.
The only negative might be that you have over-used commas and may want to look at your sentence structures to see what you can do about that.
But I am enjoying this.
91MadilaynYou have written a really interesting story and it moves along nicely. Nice characterisations as well - similar but different enough that they aren't TOO familiar.
The only negative might be that you have over-used commas and may want to look at your sentence structures to see what you can do about that.
But I am enjoying this.
10/31/2016 c1 Allison 200
Hey
Hey
10/27/2016 c7 Allison 200
Hey do you think they gonna see the ship from John's dreams
Hey do you think they gonna see the ship from John's dreams
10/26/2016 c8 4OurLadyOfTheDragon
This is so good. I love it! Just please don't have any spoilers for the new season as it hasn't started showing here yet
4OurLadyOfTheDragonThis is so good. I love it! Just please don't have any spoilers for the new season as it hasn't started showing here yet
10/26/2016 c8 50Cahaya Sidur
Oooooh...loving this even more now! Will the brothers find out what happened? (can't wait for them to get back the villa)
50Cahaya SidurOooooh...loving this even more now! Will the brothers find out what happened? (can't wait for them to get back the villa)
10/21/2016 c7 Allison 200
I have a feeling in the next chapter that Alan tell the family that there's something wrong with John And they go to a psychiatrist who has a plan using shock therapy but John is kidnapped by the bad guys
I have a feeling in the next chapter that Alan tell the family that there's something wrong with John And they go to a psychiatrist who has a plan using shock therapy but John is kidnapped by the bad guys
10/16/2016 c6 4OurLadyOfTheDragon
Is Johnny going bad now? Bad Ares. I love how you have brought the greek gods into this, and it makes sense, seeing as Ares is the greek god of war! Can't wait for an update!
4OurLadyOfTheDragonIs Johnny going bad now? Bad Ares. I love how you have brought the greek gods into this, and it makes sense, seeing as Ares is the greek god of war! Can't wait for an update!
10/16/2016 c6 Allison 200
Hey here's an idea, at the end of the dream EOS decide to take John back to earth for help and the brothers, at brains's suggested they go to a psychiatrist who knows about dreams, and wanting to more discovering about his dreams
Hey here's an idea, at the end of the dream EOS decide to take John back to earth for help and the brothers, at brains's suggested they go to a psychiatrist who knows about dreams, and wanting to more discovering about his dreams
10/9/2016 c5 OurLadyOfTheDragon
This is wonderful! I love how it is going! Possibly needs on or two read overs as I spotted one of two grammar/spelling errors but nothing major. Please update!
This is wonderful! I love how it is going! Possibly needs on or two read overs as I spotted one of two grammar/spelling errors but nothing major. Please update!
10/8/2016 c5 50Cahaya Sidur
Interesting...will the other Tracy brothers find out about John and Ares?
50Cahaya SidurInteresting...will the other Tracy brothers find out about John and Ares?