1/11/2017 c8 Grandtheftautograndpa
Dear young lady
Although I don't know that much about the AVONGRS (I've only seen the movie once, and my grandaughter threw her soda at a plainclothes officer in the cineplex, and so I left in handcuffs, and missed the second half of the movie) I know that your stroy is a very very good one.
I like how happy you aare to be with the with the characters of teh Avengers, and it is very charming to this grandpa ;)
This story reads a lot like stream of consinceness, which I really enjoy, so very good job. If you want to learn more about writing the STREAM of CONSIENCENESS, you should read the book AMERICAN PSYCHO, and I think you'd like it because it is very good like your story.
Since I don't know the characters of THE AVENDGERS that well, when you called them by their christian names, it was very confusing to me but I'm sure its the good for people who know the characters and the aAventgers.
I only have one other piece of advice:
Have more people in vents, bcauses the vents are a great place for the ACTION. If you don't know what I mean, look at JOHN MCBAIN in DIE HARD which is BEST MOVIE EVER. Good Story so far and KEEP WRITING
-GrandTheftAutoGrandpa