for A Short Crossover10/24/2016 c1 the rouge rogue
A concession is something handed over as part of a treaty or peace deal, the word i think you want based on context is consciousness. Parlor (an establishment or type of room), not paler (as in lighter shade, or lacking color). Damn (well damn you have a lot of typos) not dam (a block in a river). Alright, not aright. Does, not dus. Straight(as a ruler), not strait (a difficult place to sail through between two land masses). Given Ranma's speech patterns, ye can be forgiven for using "ye" in place of "ya". Even as part of speech the start of sentences should be capitalized.
There is nothing inherently wrong with using spell check, but you should be aware that the words that it offers are not always the correct ones. I have misspelled words and used spell check only to realize that the word I was looking for was not on the list of options given. That is why I sometimes still use a dictionary for spelling. I can also tell you that my grammar is far from perfect, but I try.
I am not trying to frustrate you or belittle you or embarrass you, I just want the people who write to write well. I throwing this last note on because I notice that sometimes after some in-depth constructive criticism, as this is meant to be, simply give up writing. please don't.
A concession is something handed over as part of a treaty or peace deal, the word i think you want based on context is consciousness. Parlor (an establishment or type of room), not paler (as in lighter shade, or lacking color). Damn (well damn you have a lot of typos) not dam (a block in a river). Alright, not aright. Does, not dus. Straight(as a ruler), not strait (a difficult place to sail through between two land masses). Given Ranma's speech patterns, ye can be forgiven for using "ye" in place of "ya". Even as part of speech the start of sentences should be capitalized.
There is nothing inherently wrong with using spell check, but you should be aware that the words that it offers are not always the correct ones. I have misspelled words and used spell check only to realize that the word I was looking for was not on the list of options given. That is why I sometimes still use a dictionary for spelling. I can also tell you that my grammar is far from perfect, but I try.
I am not trying to frustrate you or belittle you or embarrass you, I just want the people who write to write well. I throwing this last note on because I notice that sometimes after some in-depth constructive criticism, as this is meant to be, simply give up writing. please don't.
10/19/2016 c1 Guest
The laziest of lazy, fanon-based Ranma crossover openings.
The laziest of lazy, fanon-based Ranma crossover openings.
10/20/2016 c2 funnywrter5
you need a beta reader to help you with spelling grammar incorrect auto-corrections
you need a beta reader to help you with spelling grammar incorrect auto-corrections
10/19/2016 c1 Rydan fall
It is nErima, not nArima.
Also, I would use shock and disbelieve instead if awe.
Followed by suspicion(?) since no normal human should be able to do this, meaning a new enemy has shown up.
Try to put yourself in the Sensei their position, youma's and other magically demons trying to steal live energy, all the time.
Would you trust this stranger that just fall down from the sky?
I would NOT, nor would they.
Thus NO awe in any way, shape or form.
Ad to this that as Sensei they can roof hop as well...
It is nErima, not nArima.
Also, I would use shock and disbelieve instead if awe.
Followed by suspicion(?) since no normal human should be able to do this, meaning a new enemy has shown up.
Try to put yourself in the Sensei their position, youma's and other magically demons trying to steal live energy, all the time.
Would you trust this stranger that just fall down from the sky?
I would NOT, nor would they.
Thus NO awe in any way, shape or form.
Ad to this that as Sensei they can roof hop as well...
10/19/2016 c1 funnywrter5
3 misspelled words and bad grammar taint good start of story with potential in first paragraph.
"concession" wrong word "another" misspelled "obviously" misspelled
3 misspelled words and bad grammar taint good start of story with potential in first paragraph.
"concession" wrong word "another" misspelled "obviously" misspelled